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Really great story. There were minor grammatical mistakes but nothing that took away from the overall story. The storyline was interesting and fluid. Great job author 😊
The banged up princess with her two good step sisters. Well, it's supposed to be a spoof of Cinderella, at least as far as the title goes. There are similarities, and there are vast differences. As usual on Webnovel we're introduced to the world of the very rich populated by people who live in the poverty of the soul. For every dollar they earn a little of their humanity is gone. At least if they don't belong to the good guys. There are good guys, and bad ones. The good ones are so good I sometimes cry in frustration, and the bad ones should have experienced a retroactive abortion long before the start of the story. So, we have ourselves a spoiled, rich daughter surrounded by friends and her love interest and rapists wannabees. True to the title the looming threat of a stepmother with two attached daughters is introduced, and this is pretty much where we leave Cinderella behind. Seventy odd chapters of exactly the kind of melodramatic romance-drama people look for on this site, all packaged in perfectly servicable English, the usual head hopping that gives me a head ache and a plethora of characters that screams in desperation for a dramatis personae slowly build up to the kind of political schemes and backstabbing I suspected. Then the story goes splatter movie in your face. End political machinations and enter machine guns. After a solid body count we're served a couple of dozen chapters of abusive torture, a splash of the supernatural thrown in for good measure, a few chunks of huge backstory-dumps, the introduction of even more vital characters and a climax so close to the end of the story that the denounment comes to screeching halt with the reader slamming his face into a concrete wall stunned by the fact that the story just ended. While I liked the first two thirds of the story, the last third is a pacing mess. It's like going to the movies watching an all American **** romance movie for 80 minutes with John Wick entering the scene and setting the mood for the last 40. One moment the heroine is happily humping her love interest, the next she's splattering someone's brain matter over a wall. So for the stars: Writing 5: With the help of the one star handicap I always hand out on this site the writing reaches a five star quality. Yes there are errors and stupid mistakes, but it's nowhere as atrocious as the average here. Stability 5: The story is completed. It doesn't get any more stable that that, so five stars. Story 4: Two thirds perfectly presented romance drama followed by one third gory mess. I guess the average is four, but this is an average. Five stars followed by two stars. Character 4: There are simply too bloody many characters in this story. My main gripe is that the bad guys are so utterly evil that they're no longer human at all. I have an easier time accepting that the good ones are frustratingly nice and dandy all the time. Oh, and they all swear like a fishmonger's wife. I'm not certain why, but there's never a scene that isn't littered by verbal genitals, abusive titles or plain old style curses. World 5: It's there, fully fleshed out. Not much to say. Gaudy as hell, but then once again this is the world of people with more money than taste. Lastly: If you can't accept romance high drama suddenly going splatter berserk then this isn't for you.
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I'm only at chapter 10 but this is definitely worth the read. It's even better knowing that this is a completed story, there's no clue hackers unless you have to stop reading!
Interesting story but not what this reader or was looking to read. The dark tones of the villainess were very disturbing and darkened almost every chapter. The ability to be seemingly omnipotent in spreading her evil made her seem like an OP demonic character. The villain's impunity until the end was horrible. What I found even more disturbing was the female leads willingness to visit her in jail and even introduce her children to her in a cathartic attempt to rehabilitate the villain and bring some type of healing for her step sisters. Seriously a murderess is not someone I knowingly want my children associating with. More sickening is that the villain was responsible of the murder of her two parents and multiple attempted murders of the female lead. Talk about casting pearls before swine. Ugh. I hope the authors next projects are a bit more balanced and less dark.
This is one hell of an amazing story. Excellent story plot that you wouldn't see what will be coming next! You will love all the characters as well. All in all, it is a very wonderful and great read! Again, thank you so much, dear author!!! 😘😘😘
As far as I have read, I find the plotline very much appealing, and keep up with the good work! There is some here and there mistakes, that will be fine with some proofreading. Other than that, it's well-written
It’s an interesting and modern take on Cinderella. I think the author did a good job detailing the characters and background. There were some scenes that could have transition better. But overall it’s a fun read.
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HOLY MOTHER OF GOD! At first I wanted to stop reading but then it got good and I got addicted to the story. I am in love with the story. I finished it and I don't regret it. Olivia was such a great character and her friends👌👌anyway I recommend it even tho it has a few words messed up it was worth it
The story is quite good and very interesting............ .... I can't wait to finish the story and thanks to the Author for putting something very good together
Scarletbunny knows how to reel you into the story. One of the best I’ve read so far! I love the way she wrote a new spin on a Cinderella type story. The wicked step-mother is the worst type of person there is.
your writing skills got better and better. omg, i'm so envious. the plot is sooo interesting and for the scenes, i fell off my bed twice. which chapters were it again?
I get a hope after reading it. I am little sad that its updatr is a bit slow but nevermind because good things take time to haapen or written . I appreciate you author...
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I'm afraid that I would forget about what happened by the time I get to the end of the story. So, I would be doing a review based on the first 10 chapters. I'd be dropping comments every now and then. The storyline is interesting and I like how protective Avery is. And how different he actually is compared to the first episode. There are some grammatical errors and missing comma. Missing capitalization of the first word. I can still understand the story but I had to pause every now and then. COMMA is important! Hope you would have fixed them in the later chapters. Also, Elmond is hilarious! I love sidekicks that has a gay vibe for their boss! I want to see more of him! :P But your synopsis is giving me a bad vibe.
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The book is very fascinating and oddly addictive for a world that hasn't been fully revealed yet. The characters are interesting and still mysterious, I like the assassin the most, I like to think of him as a ninja well I read but that's just me :D.
*Remember, this review is based on the first five chapters* Constructive Criticism: There are many things people could possibly say, of those, I honestly am without. I know that this work isn't perfect, but I cannot give any complaint with the exception of, "You ruined your godliness in chapter three."... Basically, this all sums up to, correct the error I spotted in chapter three, and I'll have no complaints.;,;. Positive Feedback: EVERYTHING Personal Feedback: I started reading this novel for the purpose of a review promised, and honestly, I would not have started it otherwise (I don't normally read many novels that don's have some sort of Isekai feel), But this one had me just wanting more the entire time I was reading. I don't run into many that do this, so this one is a keeper... to be kept in my library, and read later.;,;.
Hello, Fro is here~~~!! This story really give me a fairy tale drama vibe haha. It is interesting, cinderela version with more drama and interesting plots. Not really my cup of tea in reading, but it is okay since the story was good. Writing quality : the author has good diction, the writing was easy to read, though sometime the author would make each sentence was too long. Need to shorten that a bit. There is still a bit typo and grammar mistakes, but overall is good. One more thing author, you have a habit to cut scene suddenly without any warn, so I felt a bit stifled when the feeling was building up and then the scene was suddenly cut off. For example in chap 10 I think, you have Eli paid attention at Olivia sweetly, make him corrected her hair style and then saying something sweet, but ended the scene suddenly. So I felt bit annoyed because the scene would become even more sweet if you end it more smoothly. Though in later chapters this habit was reducing, so maybe it was improvement. Story development : there is something that bugged me, because even after 50 chapter, story hasnt mention anything about the legend of four founder (Norell etc) and what they are for since they was only mentioned random once and without any purpose. Also did this story has fantasy genre in it? Because you make the agni has something supernatural, like when loreley said something she has to obey her mother wheter she wanted it or not like her body was controled by witch thing or something. Also, one more thing, I dont know if you are forgot or not, in later chapter loreley mention her mother has been obsessed of avery, stalked him, kill his wife, and plan to get rid of his daughter. But I remember in early chapter, the first time agni heard about olivia was when she fell on laila on cafe. She even saw olivia's photo and ask her people to search olivia background. This prove agni didnt know anything about avery's daughter, when she claimed she hate avery's daughter when she stalked avery in the past, so I hope you fixed them. And second thing was when avery was searching a new wife, is it coincidental that agni's file was on avery's matching document? And robin and amy was the ones collected the file. But loreley claimed that agni has been planning since years ago. Maybe you could smooth these up. Character design : one thing that bugged me a lot is the crying. Your characters were too much a cry baby or maybe emotional, not only the MC. I dont know if it was only my bias. I just bit irritated seeing the character often cry or has their eyes tears up each time some thing happen, even over such a little thing like embarrassed. Another one is about avery, maybe it was because he was manipulated by agni, but when the first time avery angry at olivia (forgot what chap) when olivia was just being attacked and accused agni as preparator to her father. I think her father reaction is too extreme, he even insult sarcastically at his own daughter who was in this story his only baby even since his was died. To insult her like that when he though she was throwing tantrum was too extreme I think. Another one is about Eli, there was a bit disparity about his character when the first time he showed up and his character in the next chapter. He was cold, only like to reading and ignore everyone. But when he apologized at olivia the next day, I think his image suddenly fell down. Maybe it was just my bias toward a cold type lol. But I just felt strange seeing him acting so shy and timid next. Felt so ooc hahah. Well overall, other than the ones I mentioned above, all the character is good and OC enough. World development : it was interesting seeing a noble like world with modern setting (phone and so on.) maybe you could try to explain the world more, like the country etc Well, I think enough of my rambling, I dont want to bore you with my nonsense garbage lol, you did a good job with this story. Keeo your hard work!!
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OK finally caught up to the recent chapter, yay :) So Here is my review of this novel, this is basically a homage to Disney fairy tales not the old gritty original version of the fairy tales but the kid friendly version of Disney. The story line and progress reminds me of Korean Dramas which by the way I personally like watching. The characters are fun and amusing to read as they somehow get into your skin. The update speed is superb for an original author in webnovel who by the way isn't getting paid. The world building is the weak link for me but who cares I'm more interested in the characters anyway. So overall this story is worth a read, you can even make it a bedtime story. :) P.S. As always thanks for the support Scarlettbunny. Also won the prompt by the way Adopted soldier wins. :)
*Hey you reader! I recommend you to read this novel 🤣🤣* This review is made based on my first impression only as I'm still on chapter 7. Honestly I'm not a fan of the classic fairytales where the female MC needs to be saved by the prince charming or something. Idk if this is like that. but somehow, your novel felt me really intrigued. It got me hooked up and anticipate what would happen in the future. 5/5 The story is cool, original in its own way. Hinderella/Cinderella. With evil step mother and sisters in the future. I'm expecting it to become popular soon. 4/5 Characters.. is MC going to be bullied without much fight? Her father is overprotective, how could she be bullied? Well unless he dies? Or is he going to be super in love with the stepmother making him neglect his favourite daughter? The lady Masama.. (funny, "Masama" in Tagalog means "bad") her daughter was accidentally shoved with a cake and she already want to ruin the entire girls life? Is she just really too bad and unreasonable? Well atleast her character is really perfect for an antagonist. Just by reading a small part of her pov I already started hating her. The bff's are good. I decided that I love Blaire the most in this story. (Above questions.. were the ones that popped up inside my head while reading and comparing it to the old Cinderella story.) 4.5/5 Flow. The spelling and grammar are excellent. I had to reread some sentences again to understand what's going on. Maybe because the paragraphs are a bit long, kinda hurts my eyes that have bad astigmatism. haha but i really like how everything is so descriptive, I was able to imagine the scenes clearly in my head. Added it in my library, and I'll continue reading. I'll support it. Goodluck!! And keep up the good work!!
Love it! The only problem is there are never enough chapters lol! Other than that it’s a wonderful story and the characters are amazing. Great read! I was hooked from chapter two!
Hello everyone who has been reading! Thank you so much for reading my work! I have never done anything like this before in my entire life and always dreamed I would get the courage to do so. I pushed myself to do it because of the writing contest but I honestly think I want to keep this work alive so I will do my best to upload chapets on a daily basis. 😁😁😁 I apologise for giving myself a rating but I would be happy to hear feedback.
Great story!!!!!!❤️ With so many twists&turns, thrills, romance and Drama!!!!! Most of the chapters kept me on the tip of d seat!!! Very well written author 👍
Really great story. There were minor grammatical mistakes but nothing that took away from the overall story. The storyline was interesting and fluid. Great job author 😊
The banged up princess with her two good step sisters. Well, it's supposed to be a spoof of Cinderella, at least as far as the title goes. There are similarities, and there are vast differences. As usual on Webnovel we're introduced to the world of the very rich populated by people who live in the poverty of the soul. For every dollar they earn a little of their humanity is gone. At least if they don't belong to the good guys. There are good guys, and bad ones. The good ones are so good I sometimes cry in frustration, and the bad ones should have experienced a retroactive abortion long before the start of the story. So, we have ourselves a spoiled, rich daughter surrounded by friends and her love interest and rapists wannabees. True to the title the looming threat of a stepmother with two attached daughters is introduced, and this is pretty much where we leave Cinderella behind. Seventy odd chapters of exactly the kind of melodramatic romance-drama people look for on this site, all packaged in perfectly servicable English, the usual head hopping that gives me a head ache and a plethora of characters that screams in desperation for a dramatis personae slowly build up to the kind of political schemes and backstabbing I suspected. Then the story goes splatter movie in your face. End political machinations and enter machine guns. After a solid body count we're served a couple of dozen chapters of abusive torture, a splash of the supernatural thrown in for good measure, a few chunks of huge backstory-dumps, the introduction of even more vital characters and a climax so close to the end of the story that the denounment comes to screeching halt with the reader slamming his face into a concrete wall stunned by the fact that the story just ended. While I liked the first two thirds of the story, the last third is a pacing mess. It's like going to the movies watching an all American **** romance movie for 80 minutes with John Wick entering the scene and setting the mood for the last 40. One moment the heroine is happily humping her love interest, the next she's splattering someone's brain matter over a wall. So for the stars: Writing 5: With the help of the one star handicap I always hand out on this site the writing reaches a five star quality. Yes there are errors and stupid mistakes, but it's nowhere as atrocious as the average here. Stability 5: The story is completed. It doesn't get any more stable that that, so five stars. Story 4: Two thirds perfectly presented romance drama followed by one third gory mess. I guess the average is four, but this is an average. Five stars followed by two stars. Character 4: There are simply too bloody many characters in this story. My main gripe is that the bad guys are so utterly evil that they're no longer human at all. I have an easier time accepting that the good ones are frustratingly nice and dandy all the time. Oh, and they all swear like a fishmonger's wife. I'm not certain why, but there's never a scene that isn't littered by verbal genitals, abusive titles or plain old style curses. World 5: It's there, fully fleshed out. Not much to say. Gaudy as hell, but then once again this is the world of people with more money than taste. Lastly: If you can't accept romance high drama suddenly going splatter berserk then this isn't for you.
Revelar Spoiler I'm only at chapter 10 but this is definitely worth the read. It's even better knowing that this is a completed story, there's no clue hackers unless you have to stop reading!
Interesting story but not what this reader or was looking to read. The dark tones of the villainess were very disturbing and darkened almost every chapter. The ability to be seemingly omnipotent in spreading her evil made her seem like an OP demonic character. The villain's impunity until the end was horrible. What I found even more disturbing was the female leads willingness to visit her in jail and even introduce her children to her in a cathartic attempt to rehabilitate the villain and bring some type of healing for her step sisters. Seriously a murderess is not someone I knowingly want my children associating with. More sickening is that the villain was responsible of the murder of her two parents and multiple attempted murders of the female lead. Talk about casting pearls before swine. Ugh. I hope the authors next projects are a bit more balanced and less dark.
This is one hell of an amazing story. Excellent story plot that you wouldn't see what will be coming next! You will love all the characters as well. All in all, it is a very wonderful and great read! Again, thank you so much, dear author!!! 😘😘😘
As far as I have read, I find the plotline very much appealing, and keep up with the good work! There is some here and there mistakes, that will be fine with some proofreading. Other than that, it's well-written
It’s an interesting and modern take on Cinderella. I think the author did a good job detailing the characters and background. There were some scenes that could have transition better. But overall it’s a fun read.
Revelar Spoiler HOLY MOTHER OF GOD! At first I wanted to stop reading but then it got good and I got addicted to the story. I am in love with the story. I finished it and I don't regret it. Olivia was such a great character and her friends👌👌anyway I recommend it even tho it has a few words messed up it was worth it
The story is quite good and very interesting............ .... I can't wait to finish the story and thanks to the Author for putting something very good together
Scarletbunny knows how to reel you into the story. One of the best I’ve read so far! I love the way she wrote a new spin on a Cinderella type story. The wicked step-mother is the worst type of person there is.
your writing skills got better and better. omg, i'm so envious. the plot is sooo interesting and for the scenes, i fell off my bed twice. which chapters were it again?
I get a hope after reading it. I am little sad that its updatr is a bit slow but nevermind because good things take time to haapen or written . I appreciate you author...
Revelar Spoiler I'm afraid that I would forget about what happened by the time I get to the end of the story. So, I would be doing a review based on the first 10 chapters. I'd be dropping comments every now and then. The storyline is interesting and I like how protective Avery is. And how different he actually is compared to the first episode. There are some grammatical errors and missing comma. Missing capitalization of the first word. I can still understand the story but I had to pause every now and then. COMMA is important! Hope you would have fixed them in the later chapters. Also, Elmond is hilarious! I love sidekicks that has a gay vibe for their boss! I want to see more of him! :P But your synopsis is giving me a bad vibe.
Revelar Spoiler The book is very fascinating and oddly addictive for a world that hasn't been fully revealed yet. The characters are interesting and still mysterious, I like the assassin the most, I like to think of him as a ninja well I read but that's just me :D.
*Remember, this review is based on the first five chapters* Constructive Criticism: There are many things people could possibly say, of those, I honestly am without. I know that this work isn't perfect, but I cannot give any complaint with the exception of, "You ruined your godliness in chapter three."... Basically, this all sums up to, correct the error I spotted in chapter three, and I'll have no complaints.;,;. Positive Feedback: EVERYTHING Personal Feedback: I started reading this novel for the purpose of a review promised, and honestly, I would not have started it otherwise (I don't normally read many novels that don's have some sort of Isekai feel), But this one had me just wanting more the entire time I was reading. I don't run into many that do this, so this one is a keeper... to be kept in my library, and read later.;,;.
Hello, Fro is here~~~!! This story really give me a fairy tale drama vibe haha. It is interesting, cinderela version with more drama and interesting plots. Not really my cup of tea in reading, but it is okay since the story was good. Writing quality : the author has good diction, the writing was easy to read, though sometime the author would make each sentence was too long. Need to shorten that a bit. There is still a bit typo and grammar mistakes, but overall is good. One more thing author, you have a habit to cut scene suddenly without any warn, so I felt a bit stifled when the feeling was building up and then the scene was suddenly cut off. For example in chap 10 I think, you have Eli paid attention at Olivia sweetly, make him corrected her hair style and then saying something sweet, but ended the scene suddenly. So I felt bit annoyed because the scene would become even more sweet if you end it more smoothly. Though in later chapters this habit was reducing, so maybe it was improvement. Story development : there is something that bugged me, because even after 50 chapter, story hasnt mention anything about the legend of four founder (Norell etc) and what they are for since they was only mentioned random once and without any purpose. Also did this story has fantasy genre in it? Because you make the agni has something supernatural, like when loreley said something she has to obey her mother wheter she wanted it or not like her body was controled by witch thing or something. Also, one more thing, I dont know if you are forgot or not, in later chapter loreley mention her mother has been obsessed of avery, stalked him, kill his wife, and plan to get rid of his daughter. But I remember in early chapter, the first time agni heard about olivia was when she fell on laila on cafe. She even saw olivia's photo and ask her people to search olivia background. This prove agni didnt know anything about avery's daughter, when she claimed she hate avery's daughter when she stalked avery in the past, so I hope you fixed them. And second thing was when avery was searching a new wife, is it coincidental that agni's file was on avery's matching document? And robin and amy was the ones collected the file. But loreley claimed that agni has been planning since years ago. Maybe you could smooth these up. Character design : one thing that bugged me a lot is the crying. Your characters were too much a cry baby or maybe emotional, not only the MC. I dont know if it was only my bias. I just bit irritated seeing the character often cry or has their eyes tears up each time some thing happen, even over such a little thing like embarrassed. Another one is about avery, maybe it was because he was manipulated by agni, but when the first time avery angry at olivia (forgot what chap) when olivia was just being attacked and accused agni as preparator to her father. I think her father reaction is too extreme, he even insult sarcastically at his own daughter who was in this story his only baby even since his was died. To insult her like that when he though she was throwing tantrum was too extreme I think. Another one is about Eli, there was a bit disparity about his character when the first time he showed up and his character in the next chapter. He was cold, only like to reading and ignore everyone. But when he apologized at olivia the next day, I think his image suddenly fell down. Maybe it was just my bias toward a cold type lol. But I just felt strange seeing him acting so shy and timid next. Felt so ooc hahah. Well overall, other than the ones I mentioned above, all the character is good and OC enough. World development : it was interesting seeing a noble like world with modern setting (phone and so on.) maybe you could try to explain the world more, like the country etc Well, I think enough of my rambling, I dont want to bore you with my nonsense garbage lol, you did a good job with this story. Keeo your hard work!!
Revelar Spoiler OK finally caught up to the recent chapter, yay :) So Here is my review of this novel, this is basically a homage to Disney fairy tales not the old gritty original version of the fairy tales but the kid friendly version of Disney. The story line and progress reminds me of Korean Dramas which by the way I personally like watching. The characters are fun and amusing to read as they somehow get into your skin. The update speed is superb for an original author in webnovel who by the way isn't getting paid. The world building is the weak link for me but who cares I'm more interested in the characters anyway. So overall this story is worth a read, you can even make it a bedtime story. :) P.S. As always thanks for the support Scarlettbunny. Also won the prompt by the way Adopted soldier wins. :)
*Hey you reader! I recommend you to read this novel 🤣🤣* This review is made based on my first impression only as I'm still on chapter 7. Honestly I'm not a fan of the classic fairytales where the female MC needs to be saved by the prince charming or something. Idk if this is like that. but somehow, your novel felt me really intrigued. It got me hooked up and anticipate what would happen in the future. 5/5 The story is cool, original in its own way. Hinderella/Cinderella. With evil step mother and sisters in the future. I'm expecting it to become popular soon. 4/5 Characters.. is MC going to be bullied without much fight? Her father is overprotective, how could she be bullied? Well unless he dies? Or is he going to be super in love with the stepmother making him neglect his favourite daughter? The lady Masama.. (funny, "Masama" in Tagalog means "bad") her daughter was accidentally shoved with a cake and she already want to ruin the entire girls life? Is she just really too bad and unreasonable? Well atleast her character is really perfect for an antagonist. Just by reading a small part of her pov I already started hating her. The bff's are good. I decided that I love Blaire the most in this story. (Above questions.. were the ones that popped up inside my head while reading and comparing it to the old Cinderella story.) 4.5/5 Flow. The spelling and grammar are excellent. I had to reread some sentences again to understand what's going on. Maybe because the paragraphs are a bit long, kinda hurts my eyes that have bad astigmatism. haha but i really like how everything is so descriptive, I was able to imagine the scenes clearly in my head. Added it in my library, and I'll continue reading. I'll support it. Goodluck!! And keep up the good work!!
Love it! The only problem is there are never enough chapters lol! Other than that it’s a wonderful story and the characters are amazing. Great read! I was hooked from chapter two!
Hello everyone who has been reading! Thank you so much for reading my work! I have never done anything like this before in my entire life and always dreamed I would get the courage to do so. I pushed myself to do it because of the writing contest but I honestly think I want to keep this work alive so I will do my best to upload chapets on a daily basis. 😁😁😁 I apologise for giving myself a rating but I would be happy to hear feedback.
Great story!!!!!!❤️ With so many twists&turns, thrills, romance and Drama!!!!! Most of the chapters kept me on the tip of d seat!!! Very well written author 👍