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Very nice story. Very nice characters. Good plot. Full of interesting ideas.
Great story with well thought and realistic characters. It's a pity it is only released twice a week as I always want more. But the quality makes it worth the wait.
Moba is fun .......................................................................................................................................................
This is very interesting the great chessmaster and gunnz.........................................................................................................................
Kai love to overreact and it's annoying.this is an amazing novel waiting for the updates ..........................................................................
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Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
This story is mostly perfect well built world (i consider the game to be the world building aspect of it). The main issue I have with it is that the conflict seems almost contrived (when Yuel choose to change playing style it seemed almost forced) in addition I dislike the forced underdog route that the current direction of the plot is going. Besides those two things the book is good and definitely worth a read.
Revelar Spoiler
This book is a lot of fun. Its amazing how much you can write about each game. I often forget our lovely players are still so young. Nothing has made me want to play a MOBA game more then this book
Do you like e-sports?Do you like MOBA?Do you like videogames? If your answer is yes to any of those an questions then give this novel a try i believe you will like the story.
I'M pretty impressed.. Not like other moba Story.. Story development good.. I'm looking forward.. Btw anyone know releasing schedule?
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This reviews is made after reading up to chapter 23 of this novel, so spoilers and misunderstandings is definitely going to spawn if you don't know the context, but this is how a really good author sparked a reader to push him to write a long comment on chap 23 and leave a review for you all to see. Copy pasted my comment: Not gonna lie, when Julia went berserk I picked up some yandere vibes from her, and when she got the idea to kill Lars to earn his love from Ellen (ingame, but this could develop to real life consequences) I imagine myself in MC's shoes and got all this god view information like us readers, walked up to Ellen, 👿 slapped her face and straight up yelling at her face about developing some yandere tropes to his middle school friend who is head over heels over my other best friend. This awoke some burning feeling in me as a reader but. Props to the Author for hinting at this but for the moment didn't develop to worse case scenario "yet". Haven't read further as the making of this comment, just wanted to write all my feelings down and continue on. But as a side note. I think that my "fears" are unwarranted at this point of time because the flow and writing of this scene, makes me feel like the author doesn't want to take the yandere traits to a dangerous consequence or conclusion in this point of time. Thank you for reading this spurr of the moment comment😁, and huge praise for the author to write really likeable and relatable characters. Interesting story to hook me up and a great introduction to how an MOBA plays out in more indepth. (from a gamer that only scraped the surface on League and didn't invest time to learn the game. You, author has enlightened me to this amazing genre of games😍🎮. I encourage you to pick this novel up and read. Because it hooked me up with the story's great pacing and at the same time wonderful character and background development.
Revelar Spoiler
Da best story i have read yo! Lol, i love this series too much, i think this novel should get to published wkwkwk, i really. The character grow slowly and steady, yet its not boring af. The mc is not so op, it have the strong side and bad side. Honestly if u are a moba player, this novel should be on your MUST READ library
I like this book. It's interesting and the characters are entertaining. I hope that there will be a mass release. That would be awesome. I'm not much of a gamer but I very much understand what the author is trying to convey. Hope the quality will continue or will be raised by a notch 'til the book ends.
As a Master's (Top 500) League of Legends player in Season 8, I would think I have an edge over other readers in this certain type of genre, so here are my two cents on the novel. The novel itself is great, I thoroughly enjoyed each of the chapters. Good writing along with good pacing makes the story an interesting read. It has decent enough characters and game backstory to make it enjoyable. The story does seem unrealistic to a certain sense. I think a good MOBA story boils down to how much the author itself understands the genre of MOBA's. Although he does explain the basic nitty-gritty of game mechanics, he fails to mention any important or groundbreaking that players with more skill would notice, and that will have an effect on how far the novel can progress linearly. It's fine since these guys are middle schoolers and are still learning about the game, but if he wants to bring this novel from a lighthearted read to an actual quality MOBA novel, it's going to take a lot of work. Overall, still a good read. There's no other MOBA novel to compare this to, so I guess it is a staple. There are things that could be improved, but the things the author does writes, he does correctly.
Wonderful and very deep character background, development and interaction in a normal way. This sets the standard very high and makes a big difference to many novels which only follow the viewpoint of the main character. The game that is being played in the novel is based on DotA and LoL, which makes it easier to follow the story. The world background gives a small minus as it isn't brought up that much, but I guess it isn't possible either as it would be similar, if not identical to Earth. Simply a wonderful read if you have the patience to wait for updates, as the chapters are also quite long!
This is an hidden gem, I'm usually not a fan of esport novel yet this one made me reconsiderate it, hidden gem. Great job author. 140 characters ...
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I just fucking love w/ this story <3<3<3, just hope this novel gonna have some adaptation. It will be very good \(^-^)/. If u are a fans of moba like dota,lol,hon, i think u should give this novel a try. If u are not, i suggest u to play and read this novel lulz.
I never review novel before, so i dont know what should i say as well, all i can say is, this novel got a really nice story, nice development, nice character, and many relateable thing if you play some sort of MOBA, author itself have a very consistent update schedule, the quality of story itself keep improving instead of becoming worse like most of series, i cant really think about any cons of this series except for i cant read new chapter everyday haha, Quality > Quantity though.
I see it's a tradition for authors to post a review on their novels, so why not. This is my third web novel series. Some of you may have comes across "How Do You QA Test a Tsundere Android?!" or "God Vessel Online", most likely on RoyalRoads. Can't say any of my fics ever achieved much popularity, though. This is a very experimental story, since nobody else seem to be interested in writing proper Esport stories. That's why I went "I'll do it myself then!" It's pretty challenging to pull this off without any reference to go by, but I'm doing what I can. Any critique, both positive and negative, is more than welcome. I need as much feedback as possible to figure out how to best write this unusual novel. No way I'll be able to figure everything out on my own. RELEASE SCHEDULE: A 3k~5k words chapter a week. GAME WIKI: https://classmancers.wikia.com/ HOMEPAGE: https://darkclaymore.wordpress.com/classmancers/
The novel has an almost professional feel, even though it is not my type of novel, I will definitely check it out for future updates, the characters have a motivation and more importantly, they feel real. The mc might come off as a bit of douche in the initial chapters but that's ok, and world building is very good. and I feel like there is a conspiracy behind the pushing of this game to the mainstream schools if you like gaming novels then this is a must for you to check it out.
its a brilliant story may take a few more chapters to attract many more readers but will surely be popular before long. MOBA esports are still new to many people. So, its acceptable that this story takes its time to succeed. its rich in content, excitement and overall totally worth its penny.
WRITING QUALITY 5 STARS: I just can't spot some errors in your work, IT'S PERFECT!!!!! STABILITY UPDATES 3 STARS: Released Ch1 on the month of July and the latest 19 hours ago. The release is not steady. STORY DEVELOPMENT 5 STARS: In the first Chapters, there's already going on, since the plot is unique, the development in this story is refreshing... I just crave for more. CHARACTER DESIGN 4 STARS: As the story goes on, you will gradually be able to get to know the Characters personality. WORLD BACKGROUND 5 STARS: A normal world, no magic or something, just technology. Gave it 5 stars since WE can relate to it. When I read the First Charpter, I added it immediately on my Library.. It is simply promising
Author I gotta give you a thumbs up. I'm not a fan of the video game genre but once I read your first chap you had me hooked. --------------------------
No school would teach students to play games. The government would shut it down because it encourages the youth to be "unproductive" Furthermore the players should be worried when the game they devoted their youth to, slowly loses its popularity.
It is a very interesting work. Vivid descriptions. Good story and characters. Hope people would like it more. I am hooked. Wanting more chapters but I can understand how it will take times for the author to produce a well thoughtout story. Please keep up the good work author. I am rooting for this story.
Truly a great story with a lot of untapped potential. The story, so far, has shown that the main character, Yuel, is strong and not invincible, which is a redeeming quality as it allows alot of different and unique situations. The characters are all different in there own rights. Overall its a great story and has many ways that author can take it
nice idea and nice reading but com on you wrot 500 chapter but its like i only read 50 your puting a way to more detailling on the matchs
Very nice story. Very nice characters. Good plot. Full of interesting ideas.
Great story with well thought and realistic characters. It's a pity it is only released twice a week as I always want more. But the quality makes it worth the wait.
Moba is fun .......................................................................................................................................................
This is very interesting the great chessmaster and gunnz.........................................................................................................................
Kai love to overreact and it's annoying.this is an amazing novel waiting for the updates ..........................................................................
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Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
This story is mostly perfect well built world (i consider the game to be the world building aspect of it). The main issue I have with it is that the conflict seems almost contrived (when Yuel choose to change playing style it seemed almost forced) in addition I dislike the forced underdog route that the current direction of the plot is going. Besides those two things the book is good and definitely worth a read.
Revelar Spoiler This book is a lot of fun. Its amazing how much you can write about each game. I often forget our lovely players are still so young. Nothing has made me want to play a MOBA game more then this book
Do you like e-sports?Do you like MOBA?Do you like videogames? If your answer is yes to any of those an questions then give this novel a try i believe you will like the story.
I'M pretty impressed.. Not like other moba Story.. Story development good.. I'm looking forward.. Btw anyone know releasing schedule?
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This reviews is made after reading up to chapter 23 of this novel, so spoilers and misunderstandings is definitely going to spawn if you don't know the context, but this is how a really good author sparked a reader to push him to write a long comment on chap 23 and leave a review for you all to see. Copy pasted my comment: Not gonna lie, when Julia went berserk I picked up some yandere vibes from her, and when she got the idea to kill Lars to earn his love from Ellen (ingame, but this could develop to real life consequences) I imagine myself in MC's shoes and got all this god view information like us readers, walked up to Ellen, 👿 slapped her face and straight up yelling at her face about developing some yandere tropes to his middle school friend who is head over heels over my other best friend. This awoke some burning feeling in me as a reader but. Props to the Author for hinting at this but for the moment didn't develop to worse case scenario "yet". Haven't read further as the making of this comment, just wanted to write all my feelings down and continue on. But as a side note. I think that my "fears" are unwarranted at this point of time because the flow and writing of this scene, makes me feel like the author doesn't want to take the yandere traits to a dangerous consequence or conclusion in this point of time. Thank you for reading this spurr of the moment comment😁, and huge praise for the author to write really likeable and relatable characters. Interesting story to hook me up and a great introduction to how an MOBA plays out in more indepth. (from a gamer that only scraped the surface on League and didn't invest time to learn the game. You, author has enlightened me to this amazing genre of games😍🎮. I encourage you to pick this novel up and read. Because it hooked me up with the story's great pacing and at the same time wonderful character and background development.
Revelar Spoiler Da best story i have read yo! Lol, i love this series too much, i think this novel should get to published wkwkwk, i really. The character grow slowly and steady, yet its not boring af. The mc is not so op, it have the strong side and bad side. Honestly if u are a moba player, this novel should be on your MUST READ library
I like this book. It's interesting and the characters are entertaining. I hope that there will be a mass release. That would be awesome. I'm not much of a gamer but I very much understand what the author is trying to convey. Hope the quality will continue or will be raised by a notch 'til the book ends.
As a Master's (Top 500) League of Legends player in Season 8, I would think I have an edge over other readers in this certain type of genre, so here are my two cents on the novel. The novel itself is great, I thoroughly enjoyed each of the chapters. Good writing along with good pacing makes the story an interesting read. It has decent enough characters and game backstory to make it enjoyable. The story does seem unrealistic to a certain sense. I think a good MOBA story boils down to how much the author itself understands the genre of MOBA's. Although he does explain the basic nitty-gritty of game mechanics, he fails to mention any important or groundbreaking that players with more skill would notice, and that will have an effect on how far the novel can progress linearly. It's fine since these guys are middle schoolers and are still learning about the game, but if he wants to bring this novel from a lighthearted read to an actual quality MOBA novel, it's going to take a lot of work. Overall, still a good read. There's no other MOBA novel to compare this to, so I guess it is a staple. There are things that could be improved, but the things the author does writes, he does correctly.
Wonderful and very deep character background, development and interaction in a normal way. This sets the standard very high and makes a big difference to many novels which only follow the viewpoint of the main character. The game that is being played in the novel is based on DotA and LoL, which makes it easier to follow the story. The world background gives a small minus as it isn't brought up that much, but I guess it isn't possible either as it would be similar, if not identical to Earth. Simply a wonderful read if you have the patience to wait for updates, as the chapters are also quite long!
This is an hidden gem, I'm usually not a fan of esport novel yet this one made me reconsiderate it, hidden gem. Great job author. 140 characters ...
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I just fucking love w/ this story <3<3<3, just hope this novel gonna have some adaptation. It will be very good \(^-^)/. If u are a fans of moba like dota,lol,hon, i think u should give this novel a try. If u are not, i suggest u to play and read this novel lulz.
I never review novel before, so i dont know what should i say as well, all i can say is, this novel got a really nice story, nice development, nice character, and many relateable thing if you play some sort of MOBA, author itself have a very consistent update schedule, the quality of story itself keep improving instead of becoming worse like most of series, i cant really think about any cons of this series except for i cant read new chapter everyday haha, Quality > Quantity though.
I see it's a tradition for authors to post a review on their novels, so why not. This is my third web novel series. Some of you may have comes across "How Do You QA Test a Tsundere Android?!" or "God Vessel Online", most likely on RoyalRoads. Can't say any of my fics ever achieved much popularity, though. This is a very experimental story, since nobody else seem to be interested in writing proper Esport stories. That's why I went "I'll do it myself then!" It's pretty challenging to pull this off without any reference to go by, but I'm doing what I can. Any critique, both positive and negative, is more than welcome. I need as much feedback as possible to figure out how to best write this unusual novel. No way I'll be able to figure everything out on my own. RELEASE SCHEDULE: A 3k~5k words chapter a week. GAME WIKI: https://classmancers.wikia.com/ HOMEPAGE: https://darkclaymore.wordpress.com/classmancers/
The novel has an almost professional feel, even though it is not my type of novel, I will definitely check it out for future updates, the characters have a motivation and more importantly, they feel real. The mc might come off as a bit of douche in the initial chapters but that's ok, and world building is very good. and I feel like there is a conspiracy behind the pushing of this game to the mainstream schools if you like gaming novels then this is a must for you to check it out.
its a brilliant story may take a few more chapters to attract many more readers but will surely be popular before long. MOBA esports are still new to many people. So, its acceptable that this story takes its time to succeed. its rich in content, excitement and overall totally worth its penny.
WRITING QUALITY 5 STARS: I just can't spot some errors in your work, IT'S PERFECT!!!!! STABILITY UPDATES 3 STARS: Released Ch1 on the month of July and the latest 19 hours ago. The release is not steady. STORY DEVELOPMENT 5 STARS: In the first Chapters, there's already going on, since the plot is unique, the development in this story is refreshing... I just crave for more. CHARACTER DESIGN 4 STARS: As the story goes on, you will gradually be able to get to know the Characters personality. WORLD BACKGROUND 5 STARS: A normal world, no magic or something, just technology. Gave it 5 stars since WE can relate to it. When I read the First Charpter, I added it immediately on my Library.. It is simply promising
Author I gotta give you a thumbs up. I'm not a fan of the video game genre but once I read your first chap you had me hooked. --------------------------
No school would teach students to play games. The government would shut it down because it encourages the youth to be "unproductive" Furthermore the players should be worried when the game they devoted their youth to, slowly loses its popularity.
It is a very interesting work. Vivid descriptions. Good story and characters. Hope people would like it more. I am hooked. Wanting more chapters but I can understand how it will take times for the author to produce a well thoughtout story. Please keep up the good work author. I am rooting for this story.
Truly a great story with a lot of untapped potential. The story, so far, has shown that the main character, Yuel, is strong and not invincible, which is a redeeming quality as it allows alot of different and unique situations. The characters are all different in there own rights. Overall its a great story and has many ways that author can take it
nice idea and nice reading but com on you wrot 500 chapter but its like i only read 50 your puting a way to more detailling on the matchs