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- Qualidade de Escrita
- Estabilidade das atualizações
- Desenvolvimento de Histórias
- Design de Personagens
- Antecedentes do mundo
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No me gusta, a pesar de que está bien definido el panorama pero los personajes están hecho un desastre, no sabes que personajes están en cada escena y ******mente aparecen como por arte de magia, todo el mundo habla al mismo tiempo y la protagonista femenina es demasiado op, yo leo este tipo de historias no porque la protagonista es poderosa sí no por como se desarrollan los personajes , sus sentimientos, sus personalidades, etc. Estoy segura que puedes hacer esta historia mejor, tienes una muy buena idea del escenario pero cada buena historia, aún si es de ciencia ficción, necesita lógica, esta bien que la protagonista pueda entender las cosas a su alrededor sin embargo estas exagerando sus capacidades, todo tiene un límite, en especial si está en ese estado deberías primero fomentar su relación con los primeros personajes y no lanzarnos tantos nombres a la vez, esa es mi opinión si decides seguirla es tu decisión.
Has potential, however, the abrupt POV changes ruin the flow of the story. Interesting story concept but the execution needs work. All in all, a fun read to pass time, as long as you can follow whose perspective the story is being told from.
It's a good story, I just wished there were more chapters to read. Good thing there are creative minds like yourself because I'm definitely not one of them. Keep up the great work.
I've only recently started web novels but this story has potential, I look forward to reading your story. I hope it does well, I could see it being made into anime but that might be looking too far into the future.
As far as the first three chapters released, its a good story. I hope this novel is very long, I don't like when good stories come to an end 😭😤 MORE PLEASE 😋
So far I like the story. I am really looking forward to where it goes. How long will this story be? 😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉 just to make up for 140 characters ugh.
I just read it few hours ago and yes it was fun and exciting to be read 😍 Hope the brothers will not be enemy over love🙁 Keep a good work author 🤗🤗
No me gusta, a pesar de que está bien definido el panorama pero los personajes están hecho un desastre, no sabes que personajes están en cada escena y ******mente aparecen como por arte de magia, todo el mundo habla al mismo tiempo y la protagonista femenina es demasiado op, yo leo este tipo de historias no porque la protagonista es poderosa sí no por como se desarrollan los personajes , sus sentimientos, sus personalidades, etc. Estoy segura que puedes hacer esta historia mejor, tienes una muy buena idea del escenario pero cada buena historia, aún si es de ciencia ficción, necesita lógica, esta bien que la protagonista pueda entender las cosas a su alrededor sin embargo estas exagerando sus capacidades, todo tiene un límite, en especial si está en ese estado deberías primero fomentar su relación con los primeros personajes y no lanzarnos tantos nombres a la vez, esa es mi opinión si decides seguirla es tu decisión.
Has potential, however, the abrupt POV changes ruin the flow of the story. Interesting story concept but the execution needs work. All in all, a fun read to pass time, as long as you can follow whose perspective the story is being told from.
It's a good story, I just wished there were more chapters to read. Good thing there are creative minds like yourself because I'm definitely not one of them. Keep up the great work.
I've only recently started web novels but this story has potential, I look forward to reading your story. I hope it does well, I could see it being made into anime but that might be looking too far into the future.
As far as the first three chapters released, its a good story. I hope this novel is very long, I don't like when good stories come to an end 😭😤 MORE PLEASE 😋
So far I like the story. I am really looking forward to where it goes. How long will this story be? 😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉 just to make up for 140 characters ugh.
I just read it few hours ago and yes it was fun and exciting to be read 😍 Hope the brothers will not be enemy over love🙁 Keep a good work author 🤗🤗