everything good as long as the story flows
Don't mind the haters this arc is pretty good
thanks for the chapter bnit of advise dont do the full status only do what would be changed you can always add the full status in the author notes at the end of chapter
i dont like that he shackled everyone else to be below him forever instead of making it a challenge for them to surpass the mc so he can evolve further
Thanks for the chapters I have enjoyed read your story immensely. especially the little notes when nothing makes sense
14 with armour
She got to work. Glancing at the floating soul of her son next to her, he fingers never stopped weaving. Weaving something far beyond the sculpting of Greek Gods. A proper Primarch, not the twink-ish body Tzeentch gave him. Tall, just like his brothers at about 10 feet exactly (no armor). Just shy of his big bro Vulkan– bless his soul. Physique bigger than his previous fuckboy self. Bulky– not slender. Defined– not mildly toned. Rippling– oozing masculinity. A proper Primarch. Skin looking soft yet as hard as iron. Hearts like that of the Wartsila RT-flex96C in power. Lungs as greedy as the word itself. Anti-body so strong not even Papa Nurgle's love could infect him. Born anew, haven't mentioned the added things his mother gave him. Looking closely, his skin shined like looking at the scale of a dragon. His eyes already had the vertical slit, but the blue was dull. Now, he had the same vibrant blue his mother has– as if the entire galaxy was being those eyes. Then, the added spice… the reproductive system of the body works.
The Wrath of the II Legion
Video Games · Zesrael
They should never have been able to access his AI undetected alarms should of been blaring as soon as anything connected with how he set everything up and the tech he has access to
I'm still confused on the priesthood bit do you mean divinity or domain because a priesthood is literally a organisation of priests? other wise following the story so far
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I rather enjoy the fic But do hope the meta knowledge changes things and and want see where this fic takes it hopefully it becomes something unique.
Reborn as Lucifer Morningstar in Lucifer TV/DC comics
TV · Samael_Son_of_Dawn