First thing, I will say use simple worlds in conversation
As the priestess foretold, four months passed before the twins stirred from their slumber. The lord wasted no time, urgently commanding the butler, "Increase security and maintain constant vigilance over the twins for the next four months."
Fantasy · Death_Monarch_1
"He should be mine, he definitely should be."
A gleeful laughter bubbled forth from her lips as she reveled in the prospect of a future filled with love and companionship. "He is mine, and mine alone," she declared with unwavering determination. "Whatever the future holds, he belongs to me."
Fantasy · Death_Monarch_1
I don't why but I think this chapter could have written more betterly
Her thoughts spun into a whirlwind of possibilities, her mind alight with fantasies of companionship and love. "If he wants me, then he must love me," she reasoned, her excitement building with each passing moment. "And if he becomes my husband, we will have children together. They will call me mommy."
Fantasy · Death_Monarch_1
shouldn't before it should have been like "Am I in love?" and, then that Would have been better, don't you think.
Realization dawned upon her like a gentle breeze, stirring the depths of her soul. "I have been alone for centuries," she admitted, her voice tinged with a hint of longing. "Perhaps it feels good to have someone to talk to, to share laughter and anger."
Fantasy · Death_Monarch_1
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"Good morning, my love," he whispered, pressing a gentle kiss to her forehead.
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"Ensure that everyone in the castle maintains absolute silence until tomorrow morning. I will not tolerate even the slightest disruption," the lord commanded with authority.
Fantasy · Death_Monarch_1
Death and... me (Just like that novel or what?)
"My lord, my lord, congratulations!" the head maid exclaimed, bursting out of the room with a radiant smile. "My lady has given birth to twins!"
Fantasy · Death_Monarch_1
Looks like reborn in process
"Bring the hot water!" the head maid barked out orders, her voice echoing through the corridors of the castle. "And fetch some extra clothes, hurry!"
Fantasy · Death_Monarch_1
SIS, really?
With a heavy sigh, she brought her hands to her face, her breaths deep and contemplative. But soon, a warm flush spread across her cheeks, and a radiant smile graced her lips. "He said he wants to marry me," she exclaimed, her heart dancing with newfound joy. "For the first time, someone has expressed a desire for me."
Fantasy · Death_Monarch_1
The writting is good and, the plot is interesting and, what even more better is that the MC THINKS before he does something not like others protagonist who goes around without even thinking about the consequences. I also like the MC being lustful.
Netori King: I Will NTR Everyone!
Fantasy · Pervert_Human