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This is a great story that explores the theme of love and obsession like no other, but from the beginning as it cooks slowly perhaps for the author's plan to develop his characters all round
great story, I have enjoyed it.
nice opening
great continuation. keep it up.
This no, don't tell just show what is happening.
"ZZZzzz...Huh? Oh, yeah. What happened next?" Soul jerked awake suddenly.
Predators Reign
Fantasy · NamanKumar
the start is great, I envy your talent.
I really like the opening.
In a small village, life bustled with the energy of both people and animals. The autumn weather had brought in clouds that obscured the sun, and a recent rain had left the village streets muddy and treacherous.
Vampire Headsman
Fantasy · NIHILA
Just like the way the story opens, [img=coins]let me find the mc first
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original STORM OVER A PARADISE:THE DARK LOOM
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Perhaps he had gone up the tree of love a boy and come down a young man, maybe he had learned not of its mysteries. Chris is torn between his love for Laura and his obsession with Amelia, a woman he has never expressed his feelings to. When a close relative, Ann, tells him a lie that Amelia is betrothed to another man, Chris is driven to commit a terrible act. In a moment of madness, he kills Amelia, only to realize as he lays her lifeless body on the ground that it was their engagement day. But will Chris face the consequences of his actions and come to terms with the devastating truth of what he has done? This story explores themes of love, obsession, and the destructive power of lies. It is a tragic tale of a man who loses everything because of a misguided heart.14 Chs 6 お気に入り
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STORM OVER A PARADISE:THE DARK LOOM
Urban · Timothy_Odhiambo