an sound should be a sound. an goes before words starting with vowel. a go before words starting with consonants.
She smiled to herself, not expecting this side of him. Instinctively, she glanced around for any sign of him but only met his abscence. At that moment, an sound from the kitchen caught her eyes.
Urban · Henrietta_Otu
you need an English editor.
wanking should be yanking. wanking is British term for masturbation.
Kelvin gets down immediately. "Hey, are you okay?" he said, crouching next to her as he laid a hand on her shoulder. With glazing eyes, she looked at him– wanking his hand off while she shot to her full length.
Urban · Henrietta_Otu
lunches should be lunches. lunches is food you have around noon. lurches is when you make abrupt motion forward.
She chuckles, seeing the look on his face. "My breakup gift." she giggles– slamming the glass on the table while strolling off. But Nolan quickly lunches after her, holding her by the hand.
Urban · Henrietta_Otu
glass should be window. glass is what the window is made of.
この段落は削除されました。
Urban · Henrietta_Otu
either should be with. fat finger
thumb should be forefinger. it would be very hard to pull the trigger either his thumb.
niece is girl, nephew is boys. giving little boy gender swap is wrong.
"Tell me, did this b*stard hurt my favorite niece? How should I punish him? Should we throw him into the ocean?" He stared provokingly at Pei Xin. When a trace of panic and fear flashed across the woman's eyes, his mood lightened up. He turned to Sun Che and coaxed him softly, "He hit you here, right? Should I break his hands instead?"
Urban · JQK
"Scars" should be "wounds". Wounds are open sore, cuts, and/or bruises that just occurred and have not healed. Scars are leftovers after wounds have healed and left reminder. Wounds go away as healing occurs. Scars are permanent unless you surgically remove them.
Pei Xin distanced her son from noticing the scars on her body by picking out more snacks for him. "It's okay, I'm fine. Gosh, I haven't showered for two whole days! If you lean on me, you'll be full of mud and dirt too. That'll make you smell."
Urban · JQK
grandfather is male so correct pronoun is him, NOT her.
Fortunately, Kayden was well vested with knowledge on each member of the MacCathys.Yet never seen them before except for the Chairman. Which was Clinton's grandfather. At least, she could rely on her for assistance.
Our Wedding Night
Urban · Henrietta_Otu