Blue_Hell52

Honestly a great story so far but could use some cleanup on the chapter of separating paragraphs and when the stats and system comes up of separating the individual stats Name HP/constitution:healthy Attack:20 special Attack:20 Speed:20 Defense:20 Specially Defense:20 And clean up paragraphs by separating different sections But overall I love the story and cant wait to read more!!

Excited to see where this goes and how the mc will react. IM thinking maybe a betrayal type ploy from the arrogant swordsman but backfires and mc goes ham alone on the army of goblins. Or mc finds a new power and exploits that to destroy the army. Anyway excited to see where this goes author keep up the good work!!

DUDE!! I be crying with the Zara quote!! Keep up the good work author

I’m interested to see where the medicine thing ends up as and what is grafia going to do too!! Love the fanfic and can’t wait for more chapters!!

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Dude I feared up the past two chapters with the whole thing with his mom! Not many good professional books do that to me so keep up the good work and I know if you can make me feel what the MC feels you’re doing your writing right!!!! Keep ip the good work!!

Also a good bug type or maybe a tortera would be sick!!

I would personally love to see a steelix or Aagron in the team!! Or like a diamond steelix by finding the crystal onix!!! That would be so cool

Honestly love the more chill parts of the story so far and can’t wait for the ACTION!!!!! overall The Hobbit is one of my favorite movies and I can’t wait to see where this goes!!! Keep up the great work author!!