does that mean our mc did it ?
Of course, it's not like he needs his approval or anything, he can do whatever he wants without regard to what Roran and Garrow think. But it's best not to make waves and to fly under the radar for now as he still needs to live with them if he doesn't want to sleep outside in the cold from now on...
The Inheritance Cycle: Getting My Wish Fulfilled (Eragon)
Book&Literature · CouchPotatoDandy
I just started and I admit I'm not very enthusiastic. The main character reincarnates because it’s said he has very good karma, but his behavior suggests that if behaving like he does allows you to reincarnate, then I think 80% of the global population would have reincarnated into their favorite universe in their favorite character’s body. Additionally, he receives the memories of 14 years of life with his cousin and uncle, and yet he feels nothing for them! That’s not normal; memories shape who we are, as well as the emotions we feel. If he feels nothing, it’s possible he could be a sociopath. And finally, the way things are written... I must admit it bothers me a bit, but I’m not sure how to describe it. The description doesn’t immerse me in the universe; it feels like the story is set in modern times rather than medieval. But, well, since there are so few fanfics about Eragon, I’ll continue a bit, hoping that it improves.
Then it’s not logical for him to get this reincarnation because I don’t think he has accumulated enough karma by being this way...
Of course, it's not like he needs his approval or anything, he can do whatever he wants without regard to what Roran and Garrow think. But it's best not to make waves and to fly under the radar for now as he still needs to live with them if he doesn't want to sleep outside in the cold from now on...
The Inheritance Cycle: Getting My Wish Fulfilled (Eragon)
Book&Literature · CouchPotatoDandy
I looked at the new one ('Thunder Emperor') and nope I prefer the beginning of this one. It's a shame that you didn't try to write more than one chapter but I don't know what kind of problems you had with the story, so I won't say anything.
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wait what, I thought he had like ten skills !!!
Thank you for your kind response. Please don't be too hard on yourself—writing is a journey, and the fact that you've already written nine chapters is an achievement in itself. I am glad to know that you will pay attention to the mindset of Aegon. You're absolutely right to depict Aegon as hesitant. After living his whole life as someone else's son, it's natural for him to be unsure of himself. That depth and realism in his character are important, and you can't change him in just two second, I think it's one of the problem with writer that I see, they change the mindset of their character to fast and for me it felt weird cause I don't think you change the way you aprehend life and death this fast. However be just sure to not making it to much or to less. Regarding the way you write, I don't think it's a mistake at all. It's simply a different style that can appeal to many readers, as you can see from the positive comments you've received so I'm starting to think that I was wrong. My perspective might just be one of many, and I'm always open to discussing things with others because I know I can learn from different viewpoints too. Keep up the great work—your writing is already resonating with a lot of people, and that's what really matters.
This is just my opinion, but I don't think you should write the chapter this long. It felt too one-sided and, to me, somewhat pointless. With every paragraph, I found myself thinking, 'I could explain this better, more clearly, and more concisely.' The fact that it's so long for just a few actions started to get on my nerves. And before the middle of the chapter I started to not read everything in the paragraph. The same goes for Aegon being hesitant and unsure—I've seen that so many times that I wanted to kill him. I think you should be careful because people might start to hate your main character EVEN SO YOU ARE RIGHT about his mindset but explaining it every where when we already understand it, it's really a bad idea. Still I don't represent all the reader so some people might disagree with me and I would be happy to discuss their point of view and finally thanks for the chapter I love the begining of the story !!!
Hearing the Kusa-nin mention a red-haired woman with exceptional healing abilities, Kaito's mind immediately connected the dots. "Shit, Karin," he thought, recalling the only other member of the Uzumaki clan still alive.
(Kaito)
Anime & Comics · Tilct
No doubt
Annie nodded eagerly, and as they walked into the school together, Clark felt a strange sense of kinship with this newcomer. Both of them, in their own ways, were trying to find their place in a world that didn't quite understand them.
The Boys: It Stands For Hope
TV · Eletto
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original Eternal Odyssey: The Reincarnated Dreamer
Hey guys, just so you know, it's my first novel, and English is not my first language, so I apologize for any grammatical mistakes, etc. The cover is one I found on the internet, so if the person who created it wants me to delete it, there is no problem. Finally, I'm writing this web novel because I'm tired of reading the same stories where the protagonist hides their power or seeks revenge later on. Also, the protagonist will not be someone who is cunning or dark, so if you don't enjoy an honest hero's journey, this might not be for you. ****************************************************************** Follow the journey of Lucas, a young boy who, after a mysterious transformation, finds himself in a snowy, fantastical world. As he grapples with the uncertainties of his situation and explores his newfound abilities, he embarks on a quest to uncover the truth behind his reincarnation. With his unique skills and a mix of courage and curiosity, Lucas ventures into a world filled with sword and magic, challenges, and unexpected encounters. However, as he delves deeper into this unfamiliar realm, he makes a shocking discovery – he is trapped in a webnovel he had once read, and he is not the villain, nor the main character; in fact, he is no character at all.6 Chs 2 お気に入り
Wow, the number of greetings is a little too much, no?
(Kaito)
Anime & Comics · Tilct