I’m not saying it is established. But if the mc took the place of the 2nd legion Primarch and is in a different universe then the emperor would think him lost and wouldn’t be able to find him during his crusade like the other primarchs.
Gonna be honest here author. The constant changing of povs is gonna make people quit reading pretty fast. Most readers don’t want 6 different povs every single chapter. The early chapters were fine with one or two but these last 4 or 5 chapters have way to many switches. Another issue, the group of ex Edd are going to be some of his pilots, then they should never be so casual with him. Even his sons aren’t so casual as to call him by his first name, it’s usually lord father. And finally, when the hell are we going to the 40k universe?? With each chapter I’m losing more and more interest.
Is he ever actually going to the 40K universe? While this is interesting I thought it would be a fic set in 40k. Kind of a let down. I was expecting a whole scene of the emperor finding out 2nd legion son survived and them being reunited. This just seems like a power fantasy in other universes that can’t compete with 40k tech.
Do they not notice “loot” just disappearing off the bodies??
Again you need a beta reader/editor author…
This make zero sense. 12 grenades would not be able to kill that many people. Even if they were packed in like sardines.
Author I see that you are posting 10 chaps a week. I suggest you slow down and find a beta reader because most the dialogue is pretty awkward to read.
Is he dumb?? He has a pocket dimension that grows things at 10x the speed….and if it’s endless then simply create a massive farm and become the number one good crop producer. Making yourself invaluable to the kindgom.
I like the idea of a mad scientist Harry. Hopefully the story stays true to this idea.
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original Reborn For Power
Alexander Power a war veteran of 12 years, finally succumbs to cancer years after being honorably discharged from the army. However, he finds himself in a face to face meeting with death itself and is given the offer to be reborn into the body of an alternate version of himself. He accepts. He finds himself in an alternate world where corporations have even more power than his old world. Where they wage wars against one another for power over the world. He plans to exploit this with his system given by death, they war and he will give them better weapons to do so. Of course that isn’t where his plans end, no, weapons are simply the first step in this new life. Afterall he was Reborn for Power! Updates 1-2 times a week. 3K+ words per chapter. Check Auxiliary chapter for info and warning.4 Chs 8 お気に入り
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The Rune Wars: Book 1: The Hive King
The first book in the Rune Wars series. The Observer tells us the story of the Rune Holder, Jerrick the Hive King. Jerrick a young man with a few loose screws, has found the first Rune in millions of years. The Rune give him the power to create hive monsters to sate his bloodlust. Now he must not only fight against the Federation of Humanity that hunts him, but also those of ancient races of the galaxy trying to destroy the new Rune Holder. To add to all his new problems, he now has to deal with a Hive god attempting to manipulate and use him. I am posting this story on Royal Road under the same username. Warnings and info in the auxiliary chapter. I am not an artist, so the cover is AI art I found online. Plan to eventually pay for covers for each book.4 Chs 3 お気に入り
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MMORPG: THE ALCHEMIST
A new virtual reality mmorpg has released, Immortals Reborn, and a young man named Alex takes this as his chance to better his life….by becoming rich of course. After all most players want to go on grand adventures and they will all need potions to survive, and he’ll be there to take advantage of such a demand. Authors Notice: This is not an action or adventure story. This is a more of a slice of life story of alchemy and business building. The cover is not mine, if the creator would like me to change it just ask. Feel free to ask any questions in my review below. Cross posting on Royal Road under the username: UnKnownEntity0014 Chs 19 お気に入り
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Mafia King System
Our MC Alex dies at an old age of 83. Having lived a life as a cartel botanist, helping them perfect their growing methods for weed and poppy. He was tired and wanted to move on, yet he didn’t wish to truly die, just start over. Someone or something heard his wishes and now he is in a new world with a system to aid him in growing plants. He will use his unique plants and drugs to expand his influence in this world. He will become a Mafia Boss. He will become the Mafia King. (Author’s note): Hello readers. This is my first story so please point out any mistakes you see, but do it in a constructive way. Now regarding the story. This is NOT an action/adventure story. Any action will usually be from our MCs underlings povs. Why would he take the risk of dying when he can just send his followers to do it. This story will focus on the MC scheming his way into becoming the first ever Mafia boss in this world. He is not a nice guy. He does what is necessary to achieve his goals. There will be drug use, violence and foul language in this story. I’m not sure on any sort of romance right now. However even if I decide he will have a significant other(s), it will not be a focus in the story. Anywho thanks for reading and do leave suggestions. Discord server: https://discord.gg/vRJ333TCev I will be posting this story on both Wattpad and RoyalRoad.com23 Chs 103 お気に入り
Exactly so it would be interesting to see the emperor and other primarchs reactions when he just shows back up in 40k. If he shows up with his legion though that’s going to confuse and make a lot of people suspicious.
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