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You make a comparison with her parents' hair but don't say hers...
Elyse Reid, the one Clifford refers to as the blessed child. Unlike her mother Elyse's hair was white the same as Clifford's hair, Elyse's eyes were like two beryl-green jewels meted onto the snow, her pencil-thin eyebrows eased down gently to her black, beetle's-leg eyelashes. A sculptor could not have fashioned her seraph's ears and pixie's nose any better.
Worldly Overlord
Fantasy · Bhar_Yo
Thanks for the vocabulary. However, I don't see what you like about it. Personally, I just don't want to read the story anymore when I read this kind of passage. Just knowing that on top of giving you his future tells you he won't die so all his fights don't make much sense to me anymore.
However little did he know , that this fatty would one day be called as the king of gluttony Beelzebub!
Rise Of The Dragon Emperor
Fantasy · Raj_Shah_7152
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I'm glad to hear that it's only a break! I understand your feelings. It's true that I was also a bit shocked that your story didn't work better. Surely not enough people who fell on it. I have the impression that the algorithm on this site is not the best. Also the readers are not better when I see what enters the top.
Incredible first volume, can't wait for the sequel! I see you are stopped further in writing this novel, is this just a break from this novel? I hope it does because I don't see the reason to stop when it's gone so well.
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I Am The Fated Villan (mtl)
Eastern · raycrimson