fat_gamer

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Aspiring author, avid reader of novels. Love almost all kinds of novels.

2022-01-21 入りました Global
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fat_gamer
fat_gamer
6 months ago
Replied to TakeEasy

Yes, but it'll be later when he is older

fat_gamer
fat_gamer
6 months ago
Replied to nevershe

There was a football world Cup in 2002. You can search it up on Google ...

fat_gamer
fat_gamer
6 months ago
Replied to commander_pride_21

It just means that the system's capabilities are lower than a higher-ranked system. I'll explore it more in the future. Hope you continue enjoying it.

fat_gamer
fat_gamer
6 months ago
Replied to nevershe

Thanks for the suggestion. It's just that webnovel rewards having shorter chapters since it cares about update frequency. I would have preferred posting one long chapter a week.

fat_gamer
fat_gamer
fat_gamer
7 months ago
Posted

The premise is quite interesting and the tone made me chuckle a couple of times. Definitely an interesting read and a story with potential. I hope you keep writing!

fat_gamer
fat_gamer
7 months ago
Replied to nevershe

Thanks for sharing your opinions. While I agree that the majority of childhood arcs fall flat, I will try my best to make it exciting to read. I intend to have Nick heal and find his core through this arc, as such it is quite important to the story. I hope you continue to stick with it and enjoy reading it!

fat_gamer
fat_gamer
7 months ago
Replied to nevershe

Thanks a lot for your review! Could you elaborate on what you mean by rhythm? Since Nick is just 10 years old, he cannot play professionally until at least the age of 15. I do plan to have him be a part of a youth academy where aspiring football players gather if that's what you are referring to. Again, thanks a lot for the review! And hope you continue enjoying this story!

fat_gamer
fat_gamer
7 months ago
Replied to Bnathann

Thanks for your comment! If you read the prologue, you'll get an idea of the system. To answer your question, yes, the system will be anything but OP. Nick has to work for his goals 😀

fat_gamer
fat_gamer
7 months ago
Posted

Your writing is easy to read and flows very smoothly. The action scenes are definitely a huge strength as it felt very impactful. While the premise and genre are quite common, your decision to take things slow might result a well polished story. I loved the pacing in the first few chapters. Some advice from me would be attempt a more show don't tell approach. This could be through the thoughts of the MC, or dialogue since omnipotent narrator kills the sense of immersion. Also, revisiting your chapters after you're done writing them a few hours to a day later will help you spot mistakes easily. Overall, a pleasant read and keep posting

  • Football-Ballon d'or or die [Gacha System] original

    Football-Ballon d'or or die [Gacha System]

    Sports REINCARNATION SYSTEM WEAKTOSTRONG SLICEOFLIFE LEVELUP URBAN NO-HAREM ORDINARY

    4.26

    Nick has always dreamed of becoming a professional football player. Through long hours of rigorous training and excruciating effort put into polishing his skills, he was finally able to debut as a professional footballer.  But, his joy was short-lived as he faced the cruel wall of lack of physical talent, preventing him from improving his skills any further, causing an untimely end to his career. Years later, stuck in a dead-end job, Nick finds himself frustrated and unsatisfied with his current life. Choosing to drown his sorrows with alcohol, Nick goes on a drinking spree and ends up perishing. But all is not over as he receives a mysterious message while his consciousness fades away, finding himself in his younger self. What will Nick do now, trapped in his younger self? Will he have the courage to take on the challenge of being a pro player again? Or will he take the easy way out? Join Nick, as he finds himself with an almost impossible goal, leading him to face some of the best footballers the world has to offer, accompanied by a system that is out to kill him. What to expect: - Slow-paced story - Dialed back System - Deep dive into tactics - In-depth life of an athlete - Hard-working MC - Focused and calm MC What NOT to expect: - OP MC - Harem - MC attaining instant power-ups

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