Daniel_Roberto

I've read up to the most recent chapters. The backstory is very interesting. The plots are also unpredictable. The protagonist is still a bit blank. Some events seem very forced. The system is less useless, but not that much. For me it's very sad that this story took so long to get better, it's not a 5/5 yet, but it would be at least a 4.

The story is very good, but I think the author deviated too much from the main story and simply put a bunch of side stories in it. These stories are not bad, I dare say that their power systems are all very interesting. What I believe is that these stories should all be individual, in separate books, not all in one. I hope the author does that after he finishes with this story.

Review after about 30 chapters: The writing is reasonable. The story is generic. The amount of indecent scenes is a bit too much for me. I believe it should be better balanced, like dual cultivation. Although lately there are too many scenes about this. The biggest problem is the plot holes... there are so many that I can't even count them, a simple search or an opinion from a friend would save this story. Here are some points that I remember that I found strange: 1- Childhood impotence: I don't know why some authors believe that a young boy can't harden his penis. Guys, even a baby can do that, literally. What really changes after adolescence is just the pleasure one gets from it, and a few other factors. I believe this type of mistake is typical of female authors, since they have never experienced it. 2- Ridiculously stupid characters: the protagonist receives an absurd talent, everyone knows it, but even so they try to make enemies of him and let him leave the house calmly, as if nothing could happen. Without contradicting the main characters, I know that his mother is a dual cultivator, but not even prostitutes would want to fuck a 7-year-old child, unless they are crazy. 3- System: the system gives him points for cultivating, a lot of points, but he practically doesn't use them. The system allows him to buy practically anything, but he is so retarded that my head hurts. Anyway, I only recommend this story to those who can completely turn off their brains to read. I usually don't care that much about plot holes, but there are some that are so stupid that they simply don't allow me to continue the story. Anyway, I praise the author for writing, since not everyone can do that. I also hope that he doesn't take my criticism personally, but rather as points that he should pay more attention to so that he can evolve in his writing.