This is one of the qualities I value most in a fanfic, if I were to read the canon I would be reading the webtoon, so author just go crazy with the butterfly effects.
I wanted to let yall know, that i don't like to follow the canon like the majority of fanfiction authors, i prefer to branch out and only include the major and important arcs, but every action of the mc will drastically change the story since it's more realistic.
Lookism [Masterpiece]
Anime & Comics · Kqro
Of course both, also a piece of advice, don't do flashback chapters, it totally destroys the immersion of the work, if you want to tell stories about characters, use dialogues between the characters and through information about the world, things like TV, telephones, etc., that's it. helps to build mystery and this mystery does not always need to be solved, one of the examples we have in lookism is the king of seoul.
I went in thinking it would be more of the norm, stressed teenager gets a system and now all the girls are chasing him, all the men hate him and he slaps everyone in the face, but no, here I found a more realistic approach to this type of reality, the protagonist having friends is one of those things, he is also someone who accepts reality, the protagonist is not just an edge lord, dense isekai protagonist, who sees everything and everyone as XP, he is a human, evolving and with flaws, which you see being corrected throughout the chapters, the secondary characters have lives, opinions, desires and dreams, not only used as plot devices, here you understand why this character did this, what motivated him to do it, Now talking about the underworld, he is as realistic as possible, in the fact that the world is not black and white but a good mix of gray. I think that's what I have to say for now, I'll leave it 4.2 stars because it still has room to grow.
One of the best things about this fanfic is the author's charismatic writing, it makes you really immersed in the story, along with the dialogues being able to express the emotion that the author wanted to express, it is still at the beginning, but any work with these characteristics has the potential to become a well-cut diamond, good work
First time seeing a child's sincerity being so well represented in a fanfic
"First i'm not mentally callenged, second i'm black because i have more melani-" but before i could continue my explanation Mike interrupted me "And why you couldn't choose a better color? Why Black?" he asked with disappointment.
Lookism [Flow State]
Anime & Comics · Kqro
Yes
I think it would be very interesting for the Hanju gang to get involved with creating online casinos, and with superstar management companies, thus creating their own economic system with free advertising for the online casino, another thing I would like to see is a hanju's greater interest in using the gang as a whole, not just the henchmen who hang around him and then he tells them to stand aside to watch him fight, I would like to see them care more about their futures and get sucked even more into the responsibility of an adult life (earning money, building a family, etc.), this is something that is very much missing from the original work (although I understand that everyone is a teenager full of hormones), and also those moments of fun with the boys, parties and spending hard-earned money. I think I went too far to impose my demands, but I hope the author highlights key points in this comment, but I won't forget that the author's vision is what matters.
The Gu World may be scary, but nothing beats reality, one of the examples you can find by searching"siege of Maarate Anumane" and what they did to the people of that City.
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original The Adventure In The Mysterys Multiverse
Adam is someone who does everything possible to improve his life situation, who sees a good opportunity, when he arrives, come and accompany Adam on this journey through the mysterious multiverse. Here's the author and I ask those who are enjoying the story to comment and those who are not enjoying the story to comment because they aren't, because I know I'm new to this writing thing.14 Chs 20 お気に入り
Brother, I didn't expect what I just read. It took me 2 days to get to the current chapters and let's just say that these 2 days were a lot of reflection. If there's something I liked and the density of the story, everyone is involved, using their brains and stuff. If I were to add, I would like to see a POV of Civilians or people who were caught by the skin of their teeth in this criminal underworld. And also, now another recommendation for the author, open a Patreon and post your work on other sites, from my research time webnovel is not a welcoming place for works with realistic themes, it is more for fantasies and leveling.
TRUE CRIMINAL EMPIRE
Action · ANTI_God