this story has potential, the beginning chapter needs some little more work but all in all a pretty good novel. However I think it's needed to add Kingdom building as well on the tags to make it more specific for that genre.
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Just as they were about to grab me and Sofia, the sound of hooves suddenly broke through the quiet night, freezing all of us in place.
Reborn as a Founding Father of the United States
History · DonkeyRider
thank you for the chapter 😁
that meaning should happen to get out of murder but hey
He stood there, looking at the body of the lord. Whoms't he had just swiftly killed without difficulty. The eyes were fully opened, and somehow, it meant something, but that meaning was lost to Hierd at the moment.
Auferstan: Building A Military in Another World
War · Powfoom
wow wow wow we haven't a edge load in here
"Ahem! I am acting in my purest form of intellect!" He imagined himself in a dramatic pose. "I am of such lordly presence!"
Auferstan: Building A Military in Another World
War · Powfoom
"You will become the leader of your squad, where in it you will lead whilst following my orders."
Auferstan: Building A Military in Another World
War · Powfoom
same here my dude same here
"I keep going on this shit without planning. What in the hell am I going to say to them in the 'debriefing' I said? I keep spouting shit without meaning, I just wanna look cool..."
Auferstan: Building A Military in Another World
War · Powfoom
lol
"Lord, Hierd?" Alrife eagerly awaited an answer from the 'lord,' of which had multiple droplets of sweat dropping from his face.
Auferstan: Building A Military in Another World
War · Powfoom
isn't it obvious you think the power of God and anime on your side no one can defeat you
"How in the lord am I going to train them?"
Auferstan: Building A Military in Another World
War · Powfoom
this novel has many problems. One of these problems is the... ...chapter length. Not many people have time to hear a whole essay of a chapter. A second problem I have is the repetition of words. For example, his plans for Rome and his wish to make a great empire. I understand his goal for the first time I hear it. However, when you repeat that again and again, when a new technology that he adds in... ...combines with his goals repeating again, it gets tedious and it gets extremely annoying. And for the third issue I have with this novel is the character development. Marcus, the MC, we know how he got there, but we don't see him grow. And the Chief and the other side characters are mostly ignored or forgotten about. So yeah, that's why I gave it this score. Fast storytelling, lack of character development, and way too long chapters, man. If I want to look at an essay, I should just ask my teacher. To give me a example of an essay.
Rebirth of Rome
Others · cookieowl