Mr_Sir_Man

Mr_Sir_Man

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I read too much.

2020-11-26 入りました Ascension Island
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Mr_Sir_Man
Mr_Sir_Man
4 months ago
Replied to Jazpex

this is not normal american. crime is growing like hell. I will try to show that in the story with more detail next time so there is no confusion.

"Sir, can you state your name and the reason you're here?" the guard asked, his tone professional yet firm, not leaving any room for negotiation.

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Mr_Sir_Man
Mr_Sir_Man
4 months ago
Replied to Victor_Adiogo

why? tell me so i can fix.

Mr_Sir_Man
Mr_Sir_Man
4 months ago
Commented

1000 words

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Mr_Sir_Man
Mr_Sir_Man
4 months ago
Commented

Tell me my mistakes I will not fix now but in future maybe.

Mr_Sir_Man
Mr_Sir_Man
4 months ago
Commented

Uneventful chapter. Just tired I will get a longer chapter next time. Thank you

Mr_Sir_Man
Mr_Sir_Man
4 months ago
Commented

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As sunset laminated the streets with orange light. the trash bags sitting in the pool of blood. the homeless man looked at the people with disgust but Peter looked at the sunset and thought what a beautiful world. 

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Mr_Sir_Man
Mr_Sir_Man
4 months ago
Replied to Zhorvak

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Peter snaps at Gwen, "WHAT DO YOU WANT ME TO DO?" Gwen hits Peter on the arm, and he winces, holding his arm in pain.

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Mr_Sir_Man
Mr_Sir_Man
4 months ago
Replied to Victor_Adiogo

i don't know if you noticed i am increasing the word count and i plan to make the chapters longer but i need time to getting used to writing

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Mr_Sir_Man
Mr_Sir_Man
4 months ago
Commented

why am I doing this?

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Ben reached into his pocket and handed over his wallet. Suddenly, a voice shouted, "Hands up!" The robber panicked and fired a shot. In response, an officer, who had been undercover, fired and shot the robber.

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Mr_Sir_Man
Mr_Sir_Man
4 months ago
Commented

Should I write how I did in the first 3 chapter or was this chapter better

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