Wow, this sentence is too long. Please make it there sentences or more, it's easy to read that way
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Save the Last Bullet for me
Sci-fi · MOSS3000
I like how the writer could tell a scene vividly and how natural the dialogue are. But what bothers me a lot is the logic. I mean... The MC murdered her boyfriend and... Well, it might be just a differ sense of taste haha
The writing is good, but the logic really bothers me haha.
Wait... The MC murdered her boyfriend, right... Then, why it was shrugged off like nothing?
Oh no, the MC is too strong emotionally. I think it might not be my cup of tea...
Wow so long, please make it two or three sentences, it helps the reader
I slowly adjusted myself, as I frighteningly sat down with my heart racing, still trying to catch my breath, before my guarded eyes quickly drifted away, fixing it gaze on a dark silhouette that stood towards the entrance of the room..
TILL I DIE IVY
Urban · Jovialjune
Very nice, I like the story progression. though through the first 5 chapters, I haven't seen a correlation between the prologue and the rest chapters. The writing is nice, but it might be better if you avoid brandishing the paragraph with long sentences and keep some straightforward.
Wait, whaaaatt? I find it hard to believe the logic here. They were hostile but then begged Raizel help? Why?
Typo, do not use ' for a dialogue, but "
'You'll make a good test subject. Once we hand you over and get back to retrieve the coffin… we might just be free from this accursed job', Rubia hugged Ming Yue in joy.
Hydrax Legacy
Sci-fi · SYED_ASAD
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original Garden of Sinners
4.74
The Strongest God was reincarnated into the future to search for her only daughter.31 Chs 57 お気に入り
- original
Bunga Lentera
Hubungan antara ibu dan anak seringkali penuh dengan kehangatan dan ingatan indah, namun ketika kepercayaan dikhianati semua kehangatan itu menjadi kebohongan yang menyakitkan. Claris adalah seorang penyihir yang tinggal di kota perdagangan Pei Jin. Namun jauh dari penyihir biasa, Claris memiliki masa lalu yang terus memburunya. Kontrak dengan sang Dewi Kematian, Nyght. Misi besar yang Claris bawa terlalu berat membawa takdir dunia disana, ia harus mengakhiri hidup dari orang yang paling disayangi dalam hidupnya. Sosok Ibu yang meninggalkannya diumur tigabelas,sosok ibu yang ia cari selama 7 tahun, dan sosok ibu yang telah mengkhianati Claris.42 Chs 19 お気に入り
Ah, I see. Now that makes some sense!
The Fallen Rise
Fantasy · Yasmina_Iro