Darklight11

Just started reading this when it reached 60 chapters. I like where the story is going, but there are some glaring issues with it that hopefully if fixed will elevate this to the next level. However, before going into the issues is this a translation or original? Its tagged as original, but doesn't feel like it because of the issues I'll mention next... First is the constant name changing - I counted 4 different name changes for the main character, but every single character has had a name change at one point so this makes it very difficult to understand who the character is until we get further into context of the chapters. If this is a translation it should be noted as such otherwise this is just bad writing to keep changing the names of the characters - decide on the names and fix the chapters to reflect that even if translation how can the names constantly be mistranslated, which makes me think this is a bot translation and no proofreading is actually done? Second issue is the talk about a system but it kind of came out of nowhere and we don't know what the current quests are or how exactly the system functions - that should be added into chapters 1/2 clarifying the details if this is truly an original story. Third issue is the talk about the money cost of the pokemon - again this leads me to believe this is a translation not an original because it keeps changing. For an original story I give it a 3.5/5 creativity and trying, but for a translation 3/5 as though the grammar is okay the issues noted make it difficult to follow the story.

I tend not to read stories until at least +15 chapters so I began this one today. Right off the start in the first few chapters I was getting confused on the intended age of the MC from point of ritual to then being taken care of. During the pre-Hogwarts chapters I took things with a grain of salt. There were setups for a friendship with Hermonie which seemed to disappear somehow in subsequent chapters to completely not even mentioning her during train/sorting/interactions thereafter, a new OC which so far isn't too bad but I think using the name Knott will confuse many with the Nott family so perhaps a different name, and some background setting for the MC with prior magic family heritage. I liked the idea of this Harry Potter AU, but there are too many holes with the MC for my taste. I'd suggest a rewrite of the story and plan things out better and eliminate the unneeded parts. I'd highly suggest remove the whole reincarnator aspect because the character certainly doesn't act like an adult and some things seem to forced. If you wanted to keep Felix dead I can understand, just felt too rushed to do a few chapters of it being born and with the reincarnator aspect felt wrong/forced in the way it happened.