Jose_Quintero_9445

La lucha es buena, no está tan gráfico como uno esperaría, he visto novelas que literalmente describen como los niños tienen las tripas afuera y como unos cuervos se los comen, así que eso no está tan gráfic

Me gusta la historia, hay cosas que uno pensaría que es lógico que lo haga, pero también hay que tener en cuenta ciertas cosas y se me pasa, pero bueno yo diría que hasta ahora está bastante bien

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No se, pero siento que debo dudar en algo todavía, ese momento donde la IA de alfred no respondio es sospechoso

https://ficcion-sin-limites.fandom.com/es/wiki/Tiering_System

It's cool and I understand that the random character selection bothers you a little but it's more interactive this way. One more thing is that one of the dialogues says that Kale (MC) took the powers away from Bills (Beerus), I think the best thing would be for him to say that he erased the law on which his power is based to make it more intimidating ( giving them to understand that you can delete them too (perhaps it is poorly translated since I use Google Translate to read the novels on the page)

The chapter is good, remember also in parallel chapters to mention what those who will live at the MC do, they can be several people at the same time.

Honestly, it is better to see the change made, since although I did not know that it was wrong, something told me that it is not going where it should. Side stories such as what buyers do with their goods can be seen in additional chapters and the main story with the MC in first person

Author, I am confused with the story, about the speech he gave to the fog about his powers, what happened to Aizen and honestly, the direction of the story, I don't know where it is going. Could you explain it in a spoiler tab for those who don't want to know?

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