shubham_das

Wow. What a find. I have read all the chapters, 10 as of yet. The design is good, to say the least. Grammar is consistent. Although not much is seen yet in the character development department, they are still well thought out. 4.8 stars for this budding author.

Hope my review helps and you atleast consider it. Peace.

to be more precise, the intense sensation one has in the middle of a fight, is often broken by mindless explanation. And even they are not clear and precise at all. So the momentum and flow of the fight scenes keep breaking. its difficult to read it without having to read it twice or thrice. i often have to ignore one two paragraphs just to keep the flow. But alas, its irritating doing that, when its supposed to be effortless. The troubling part is the essence of the fight scenes, namely, kicks, stabs, ducking, summer sault. punch, sword strikes, dodge, usage of different abilities like fire fusion, fireball, dark matter etc, they are all explained in a bland manner. Like we are watching cartoons, not animes. Secondly, there are obvious misses the mc does while doing things, fighting, going about day to day life. Every other character for that matter. They are not behaving as per their standard. I mean , i understand the MC hail from a primitive age, but with enough adversities, even a dumb changes his ways, becomes wise and alert. Their thinking changes. The weak-to-strong loses its meaning , if all that is happening is his level increases, but his mentality doesn't transform and becomes sharp after all thta training. And it becomes very obvious and cliche when MC keeps getting low standards in his talent, luck, fights. when even the wise instructors 'choose' to ignore such obvious improvements. Like everything stacks against the MC and somehow he breaks through all that. But still that doesn't change his personality. In short, character depth is absent here. which is the most appealing thing about a story. It might not be obvious at first. But as i read along more and more chapters, it became irritating to continue reading it. On the one hand, the world background and story is good, but the essense is poor and hard to read. So you can't help but drop it.