Fallen_Asgard

Fallen_Asgard

male LV 4

Hello

2019-08-30 入りました Canada
バッジ 6

Moments 164
Fallen_Asgard
Fallen_Asgard
1 years ago
Posted

The story was good I read up to chapter 29 I would’ve given you a 5 stars but you plagiarize a chapter from another writer on here which is called the Brightest Doom. That bar scene is straight from the brightest doom. You cannot steal people’s writing try to pass it as yours.

Fallen_Asgard
Fallen_Asgard
1 years ago
Posted

This is stolen work this is not the original author

Fallen_Asgard
Fallen_Asgard
2 years ago
Commented

Law* not Yang

Fallen_Asgard
Fallen_Asgard
2 years ago
Commented

Stop putting quotation marks in the middle of what is being said. You only need two quotation marks

"Well, the younger ones need to defeat the older ones. "Since we are the future after all," Claude said, mocking Emporio.

Mushoku Tensei: The forgotten Mob

Mushoku Tensei: The forgotten Mob

Anime & Comics · FortuneEternal

Fallen_Asgard
Fallen_Asgard
2 years ago
Commented

Snorting?lol

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On the throne, Bumi was lying on his back, snorting. 

Playing as a Bender (Avatar: Last Airbender SI)

Playing as a Bender (Avatar: Last Airbender SI)

TV · blazuki

Fallen_Asgard
Fallen_Asgard
2 years ago
Commented

This -> “…”..” is wrong in English grammar. This ->”…” is the correct way

"Just leave them be..." I don't want a weird religion to start to appear in the great forest" I said, while looking at the weird sight of beastmen crafters yelling they want to meet with God Claude.

Mushoku Tensei: The forgotten Mob

Mushoku Tensei: The forgotten Mob

Anime & Comics · FortuneEternal

Fallen_Asgard
Fallen_Asgard
2 years ago
Commented

Thanks for the chapter here is something you should fix when you’re writing what someone said you need only two of these “..” one at the beginning and one at the end of the final word said by the speaker. This is->”….”…” wrong

Fallen_Asgard
Fallen_Asgard
2 years ago
Commented

Landing*

Haru jumped high in the air, skipping four meters, before lending on his feet. He wasn't even wearing his Wind Shoes, and he achieved such a feat.

Playing as a Bender (Avatar: Last Airbender SI)

Playing as a Bender (Avatar: Last Airbender SI)

TV · blazuki

Fallen_Asgard
Fallen_Asgard
2 years ago
Commented

Train to tomorrow*

"Fresh." Haru stood up and stretched his arms up. "I can tomorrow to train." 

Playing as a Bender (Avatar: Last Airbender SI)

Playing as a Bender (Avatar: Last Airbender SI)

TV · blazuki

Fallen_Asgard
Fallen_Asgard
2 years ago
Commented

Snack*

Julian "It's a special snake made with Leppa berries, it restores his stamina so he can continue to train".

Journey Towards Greatness

Journey Towards Greatness

Anime & Comics · Evil_God_ZARAKH