JaysonDark05

Friend, your story is good, but I think you should rewrite it starting from chapter 12, because you made a sudden change: the protagonist got beaten up and you didn't explain why. Also, you said it was because he was in Zetsu mode, but that's nonsense, because it's easier to get out of Zetsu mode than it is to get into it. Nen users are much stronger and faster than a normal human, and even more so if they have learned Ten. From what I've read, you gave the protagonist Nen talent because in Hunter x Hunter it was estimated that learning Ten could take a few years, while Zetsu could be learned more easily if you already know how to block aura points.[img=thinking]

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