I really wish I could give this story 5 stars, I liked it that much. However the problems with it are just too big and really drag the story down. This is a novel that starts well. Being an alchemy story set in the modern world is, for me, a refreshing change of pace. I really enjoyed this novel for the first half. Story was well developed and the pacing was excellent. Character development was good and story line was interesting. Now for why I marked the story down. (Writing quality)..The editing and english quality is so-so, above machine translation but could be improved by a pass through microsoft word. (Story Development)(Spoiler Follows) My complaint is with the novel shift starting at chapter 141. While flashbacks are an excellent method of both plot and character development, they are normally limited to a chapter or two at a time. What happened here is the introduction and deployment of an entirely different plot and supporting characters, with no warning or explanation. This is very distracting to the reader and totally destroys the immersion in the story.
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I found it distracted from the flow of the story. Let's be realistic, if you enjoy this style of story, you are typically not going to be upset by a mild depiction of blood.
Definitely a different way to get a top villain. Good so far.
The motorcycle was a beast of a machine, capable of taking him to speeds. What kind of speeds, needs expanded, ie, - of over a 150 kmh, or - that were totally insane. Just as examples.
This seems to be a different take than what you usually see.
Okay, so who crashed the system.
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MMORPG: Rebirth as an Alchemist
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