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Moments 237
Change "... use to..." to "...usually..." as this makes your intention clearer.
"Handle your son, I don't use to let my attacker live." Alpha Zenith was not playing with what he said.
Replacement Bride for the Alpha of the North
Fantasy · i_want_to_sleep
Change "...bury under the rag..." to "slip it under the rug..." to make your idea clear ti your reader.
" How do you want me to help them? Wang Shi kidnapped the Marquis! Do you think I can bury it under the rag? It is impossible!" Wang Yu snorted, she looked at her elderly mother and simply said, " Now if we want to deal with this case then we can only look for the commoner whom Wang Shi captured."
Guide to raise my cutie husbands
Fantasy · fairytail72
Change first sentence to "Are there any other questions?". This will give Kendall's response more impact. Keep on writing. You are a very good storyteller. Can't wait to see where your story takes me. :)
"Is there any question?" Kendall turned against the guest, and looked at the person in charge coldly,
Reborn Hearts: The Billionaire's Devoted Wife
Urban · black_flowertrend
Change "spec" to "type" to make sense.
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Bound To The Heartless Demon
Fantasy · IceQueen21
The first sentence should be changed to either: "Did he just write this drivel?"; or "He wrote this?!" Then your paragraph will make sense.
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Bound To The Heartless Demon
Fantasy · IceQueen21
Change "cutted" ( not an english word) to "cut". Your sentence meaning will become clearer to your reader. Keep on writing.
"He went to one of the rooms to rest after Li Xiao cutted her cake."
Twisted Fate: Unexpected Love
Urban · Rosepetals456
Change "...tomorrow..." to "about it the next day...". , the story flow becomes smoother. And your intent of your paragraph clearer. Keep on writing. If you chose your words and grammar with care, your readers will cintinue to be captivated by your story.
Nan Luo was confused but Long Qian Xing didn't explain any further. When they heard the news tomorrow, they would know.
Forgotten Legend of the Bloodied Flower
History · Sorahana
Change your last sentence to "Grandfather, did that man finally leave?" This will make the irritation felt by Luo more apparent.
Nan Luo looked at his grandfather who came to Ning Shu Pavilion as he grinned. "Grandpa, did that man left?"
Forgotten Legend of the Bloodied Flower
History · Sorahana
Remove the word, "by". Your sentence will flow better.
Not to mention, Su Ai Yuan was calling Nan Hua's name loudly and some of the ladies there had heard it by themselves.
Forgotten Legend of the Bloodied Flower
History · Sorahana
Change "Patient" (a person who seeks medical assistance, intervention or healing) to "Patience" (the state of calm, waiting for a favorable time to act or for a favorable situation to unfold or occur.) This change will make your statement/intent clearer to your reader and your story flow with less confusion. Keep on writing.
It was one of the most important thing that she had learned since very young. She didn't lack patience at all.
Forgotten Legend of the Bloodied Flower
History · Sorahana
Change "their" ( pronoun which indicates or points to a possession of a group of people) to "here" ( point to a place close to or near the speaker). Your point will become clearer to your reader. Keep on writing. I am interested to see where your story will take me.
"Okay~ I am sending you an address come their, it is my house. I am currently busy so I can't come to your house." He replied.
Revenge Of Billionaire's Wife
Teen · silklove_
Change "took" to "brought". It will flow better.
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The Alpha's long lost heir
Fantasy · Tessy_Writes
Your last sentence should read, "Come on. Go to her, son." This helps to rrinfirce Oberon's need to initiate a bond between his son and his mother. This make your flow smoother.
Elena was shocked, she spread her arms. Oberon slowly put Archi on the ground, "Come on, go to her son."
The Alpha's long lost heir
Fantasy · Tessy_Writes
Change "grinded" to "ground" so your sentence flows better,
"You're truly divine." He continued huskily, and I trembled as I cried out once again as he grinded his cock against mine. His lips kept brushing against mine each time he spoke, and after staring down at me for a moment longer, he leaned down and took my mouth in a searing kiss. With each deep kiss accompanied with the overwhelming feeling of him grinding of his cock against mine, I felt myself getting more and more wrecked.
Chasing And Claiming My Rejected Omega Mate:Alpha’s Severe Regret [BL]
LGBT+ · Bree_Airee
Change "tyrranize" (not an english word) to "terrorize" (inflict great intense fear on to an individual or group). This makes the thought of your paragraph flow better.
"Of course you are, darling! This is not going to be your prison. You can go outside whenever you desire, we just want to know when you do so we can protect you. That is the job of Alphas. We must protect the weaker members of the pack and not tyrannize them. Do you get that?", James says very convinced of what he´s talking about.
You'll be loved (bxb)
Urban · Mariaxxxlovebite
Change "hung" to "hang". Mind your grammar as it disrupts the time element of your flow. This small change makes your statement have more impact. So you know that your character means what she says.
Change "am" to "have". This makes the affirmation statement come out with more pride and happiness.
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Male Lead's Canon Fodder Wife
Fantasy · Fleeting_Dawn
Change "though" (to think of something or someone in the past) to "taught" (to teach one something in the past). Your thought comes out better.
"My mother always does random jobs while we moved around because she was looking for my father but when they later met, my father acted like he doesn't know her since she is a mute and he also doesn't want Ah Dai, then we moved around and came to the capital, my mother started working at an Inn but the pay wasn't much and they didn't allow us to sleep inside then General Si Yunsheng found me and my mother in front of his home when his guards were about to drive us away but he stopped them and took us in, fed us and asked us to stay." Ah Dai started talking, he placed his hand on Si Ning's shoulder. "I remembered it was the first time I will meet someone kind that I cried along with my mother, he gave us clothes and a home to stay then I met you, you laughed at me because I couldn't read and write and that was when you thought me how to read and write and I promised to always serve you." He stopped when he looked down at Si Ning to check if he was asleep or not.
Cunning General Si Ning
LGBT+ · RainhaAsha
Change "breaths" to "breath". This corrects your last sentence.
Breaking free from his passionate kiss, Sabrina distanced her face away from him. Both of them were still catching their breaths.
His Mistress is His Ex-Wife
Urban · ellezar_g