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2017-12-20 入りました Ascension Island
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4 days ago
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Chapter 1 had more dialog because of that it was better. And you shouldnt rush with the plot. If you do a time skip, you should say the things that he did in that time fragme. Maybe try reading Tyranny of Steel, if you do like him it would be perfect. But you dont have to write 1000 chapters like him. You can do it shorter.

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Dollar
4 days ago
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This chapter was much better than then the other ones, keep going like this👍

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Dollar
5 days ago
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You repeat yourself too much, you alredy talked about the digger pasha. And now you do it again. You should change that and write that just in 1 chapter. And it feels like your wrote the story with chat gbt…

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Dollar
Dollar
12 months ago
Replied to wcpwnsuto

His parents are italian, that means he is italian…. If my children are born in Italy, and are Italien citizen. Dies not mean they are Italian, because my wife and I are not Italian………..

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Dollar
12 months ago
Replied to wcpwnsuto

Google is your friend just use it 😂 Napoleon's family was of Italian origin…

Dollar
Dollar
1 years ago
Replied to wcpwnsuto

He is Italian, but fought for France 😂

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Dollar
1 years ago
Commented

Really good work 👍

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Dollar
1 years ago
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Dont know what happened, but it seems like this chapter wasnt edited. The maid is calling the MC uncle, cultivation realms name are changed. Its confusing….