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Writing quality- **** grammar, makes me feel nauseous.- 1 star Stability of Updates- just found it, so no clue- it's a five automatically Story Development- I don't understand anything. Also, he meets a pretty Korean girl, and, a chap or so later, he comes from a fat ugly dude to a handsome muscular dude. -meh. 2 stars. Not bad to the point of hell, but, well. Character Design- Proceeds to tease Korean girl who he met for... say, a few days? Or maybe a month or so, Idek. "You want it, baby?" or something like that. Really, "baby", don't use that, cringey as hell, and usually, it's a thug character or harassing person that uses that line.-1 star. World Background- I don't understand this. What's going on. I really don't know. Mostly all of this is because of the **** grammar. Use a grammar checker or something. I don't know.
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The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
Was hyped up for this novel.. After all, it had one of my favorite genre.. Transportation+system+celeb+popularity..... Well its just like Jay Aslan - Journey to the top..... But well.. what an utter disappointment.. I've tried to read trough even though it had horrible writing quality with grammar missing in most of the sentences.. But i had enough.. -_- I AM NOT JUDGING THIS NOVEL... SURE I CAN TYPE.. But i am not that free enough to produce trash and post it online... I am just sharing my opinion.. DO NOT READ THIS... It should've have a rating of 2.5!! But well.. you know how web novel works..
Hey, I not usualy make reviews to the novels that I read but this one calls my attention. That's only your first chapter but you are one of the little a mount of authors making a Male Lead that wanna be famous novel. Usualy the people like to make just harem and blood with a poor background and I hope that you don't become one of them. Take my today's stones, if you tomorrow Chapter be good like today's one, I'll give you more. =)
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
The writer of this novel is a Brazilian youtuber called "Zy" who was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude photos with a minor girl who was one of his subscribers. She was about 15 years old. oh, and he moved the location to indonesia so people are not suspicious
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
As the loads of copypastas you may have seen say, this is actually a Brazilian youtuber named “Zy”, which is proven because they share the same discord account, that got caught ***ting a 14 yo some months ago. When you see this you might think “maybe this guy redeemed himself since it has been some time, after all, everyone deserves a second chance” but thing is, the guy not only tried to hide it by deleting or privating his apology video as of writing, but also the second he comes back he starts with a post bragging about earning way more after this debacle, which he deleted after being met with criticism, and not taking the situation seriously overall, proving he doesn’t feel remorse or has learned a single thing from it. So pls, don’t support this guy, he is very sleazy and a horrible person who shouldn’t have any following whatsoever. TL DR: the writer is a youtuber who got caught ***ting a minor, and hasn’t learned a single thing from it, so don’t give him support in any way
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
The writer of this novel is a Brazilian youtuber called "zy" who was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude photos with a minor girl who was one of his subscribers. She was about 15 years old.
The writer of this novel is a Brazilian youtuber called "zy" who was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude photos with a minor girl who was one of his subscribers. She was about 15 years old.
The writer of this novel is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15.
As the loads of copypastas you may have seen say, this is actually a Brazilian youtuber named “Zy”, which is proven because they share the same discord account, that got caught ***ting a 14 yo some months ago. When you see this you might think “maybe this guy redeemed himself since it has been some time, after all, everyone deserves a second chance” but thing is, the guy not only tried to hide it by deleting or privating his apology video as of writing, but also the second he comes back he starts with a post bragging about earning way more after this debacle, which he deleted after being met with criticism, and not taking the situation seriously overall, proving he doesn’t feel remorse or has learned a single thing from it. So pls, don’t support this guy, he is very sleazy and a horrible person who shouldn’t have any following whatsoever. TL DR: the writer is a youtuber who got caught ***ting a minor, and hasn’t learned a single thing from it, so don’t give him support in any way