The Traitor's Moon [BL]

LV 3

minho_Shiny

To say, this is my first BL novel(before that I only read BL comics) and I took a liking towards this novel. A good and unique story. The plot is very captivating and the writing quality is also good with detailed description. The story development is also good. Not too fast nor not too slow. Keep up the good work author.

LV 3

valiantxvillainous

A beautifully detailed piece, written in a style true to the genre! I love the captivating opening and the riveting descriptions of settings and characters. The prose is wonderfully well-written and edited, so expect an easy reading. However, I do suggest that the author break up longer paragraphs especially when there are many in a row. Remember than many of your readers will be viewing your story from mobile and this could be tiring to the eyes. As for the characters, hm so far my favorite has to be the cool and bold Liu Zhuyu. I’m not really sure how I feel about MC and ML right now. I feel like much of their characterization and thunder gets stolen by long descriptions of the setting. Don’t get me wrong! I think the author’s detail with the setting is wonderful! But I also think sometimes it can be omitted in certain places where it might distract the reader’s attention to more important interactions/plot-points. The plot so far seems very carefully constructed. I’m very curious about the characters and their hidden intentions that are lightly hinted throughout. The prologue was super captivating and really leaves me curious about how the MC ended up in that situation. I also I know I’m a hypocrite for saying this but… I suggest adding an auxiliary chapter for all the Chinese terms used!

LV 2

vellichor

I started reading this a couple of days ago and while there haven’t been updates in a while, this book is truly amazing. It’s lovely to read and the writing is, in my opinion, amazing. I hope to see more chapters and the plot so far is pretty good. :)

LV 3

Vicariously

This story does have some potential and would be a decent read for those who like the dynamics between the main couple, but I wasn't overly captivated for a number of reasons. The writing quality itself is good, no glaring grammar errors, and updates also seem to be frequent so. This is all good. Where I start to list out complaints come with story development and characters. In the prologue and synopsis we are given a sneak peek at future content where MC was somehow led to betray his sect...I'm interested so far. He seems resolved, a strong character. Then the story shifts into the past (which will be for who knows how long) and my impression is quickly broken. MC starts out as a bit naive and lighthearted, the troublemaker of the sect (which is fine), but as soon as the ML appears MC is immediately outsmarted in 'wit' and is somehow being sexually harassed by the ML in 70% of their scenes afterwards. I understand that it was before everything went wrong, but where is a speck of the resolution/strong mindedness from the character in the prologue? It seemed to have disappeared. The introduction of side characters and the background of sects proceeded decently, but as soon as these two MCs interact, it gets cringe-y fast. I know some readers are fine with super flirty interactions, but it hit me wrong when it was from the get go. The ML keep talking about how attractive MC is 100X times and the MC just is like...blushing and trying to avoid but failing...and literally no one but one side character cares that he's being harassed. The ML constantly mentioning the MC's appearance just makes him seem shallow. Some people would like this 'flirting' but I take issue with it because most of the MC's dialogue either seems oblivious to or not keen on what is happening. If these interactions were toned down, like reducing these scenes to a few times instead of constant, it would make the read easier. You know, pace out the romance a little. Instead of having their interactions at 100 as soon as they meet, have it at about 20. I'm not saying it should be slow burn...but they literally met once and the ML has already latched onto the MC. And literally after 1 day the MC is already 'used' to the ML clinging around him or something like that. Have the ML show some restraint and respect in the first chapters...after all, he's supposed be the next lead of his sect. But instead I'm being distracted by alpha gong and shy shou interactions when I'm supposed to be trying to piece together what happened that made the MC 'betray' his sect. Like, ML, the MC literally just wants to sleep, why the hell are you annoying him to stay awake until he hugs you to sleep??? Yes, once again, other readers might like this kind of thing, just not my cup of tea. I'm just smh. And the MC is not any better. I think the author is going for 'oh he acts like he doesn't like it but he's embarrassed and does like it' but to me MC just feels like a doormat. If he is a 'snow fox', then where's the wit? Where's the spunk? You don't want ML in your bed, then just kick him out of the room with your words like a normal human being. It makes me doubt the potential of the story I originally found in the prologue, too. Is it really going to be that interesting of a plot that led MC to betray, or just some arbitrary and convoluted set-up, so once he explains himself everything's all peachy again? I'm still going to read the next chapters and give the story a chance to see if it mellows out or #plot makes the ML act less annoying. Cause' the thing is, I DID like the story set up and side characters (female one/sect sister) that were introduced. The main couple is my largest complaint. Their interactions come on too strong for my tastes and detracts from the story line.

LV 3

InkPaper

My cup of tea...I love the smooth plot writing.... It's quite early for the review thus left it below 5...But I am gonna change it as the story progress.

LV 4

NotUse

I have currently read six chapters so far, and overall the plot is interesting. The dialogues seem to be genuine and well thought. The first chapter hooked me right from the start due to the author's unique writing style. As for the Story Development, it has a nice flow so I have nothing to complain about when it comes to this category. For the stability of updates, I'll just assume that you update everyday. haha! As for the vocabulary, there are no misspelled words or terms. Good job author and keep up the good work!!!

LV 4

The_Canary

This is tell the author that I really like how the narrative of the story was beautifully written. The pacing of the story of smooth. This was actually my first time reading about cultivators, so I was intrigued by this world. Great job author!

seems like interesting story but its only several chapters come out..finger cross, hopefully it will getting better for next chapters..........................................................

LV 12

Kiryuusama

This is a nice written story. I like the dynamics of characters. Will this be continued some time in the future? No pressure!! But great work!

LV 4

Alienated9

Started this book few hours ago and I'm glad to catch up. I can't wait for the next chapter update, because, I am so into the characters and the plot.

LV 6

tellynana95

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LV 5

Sakura_Lair

Such a good story! This author's works are all amazing and do not disappoint! This story's plot and mysterious intrigue keep you guessing and reading for more! This story will soon begin to update again in October so make sure to read the beginning chapters so you can be ready for more once it does!