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The Demon of Lust: If you want to live, keep me entertained
4.49 (22 レビュー結果)
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Warning: The story is exceedingly dark and contains explicit mature and gore scenes.
I was born into this fantasy world where magic, dragons, flying cities, and mysteries are still hidden. Everyone is racing to become the holder of their destiny before being buried in the casket.
Follow Hadrian Von Kaiser as he drives people to despair with his special powers, superior intelligence, and demonic heart to trample all creatures to the ground.
The book's cover does not belong to me, but if you are the original owner and want me to take it down, all you have to do is let me know, and I will remove it as soon as possible.
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I appreciate your efforts to write a good novel, but this is just not good… 1. You constantly mistake pronouns. 2. The POV changes make it extremely difficult to even tell who the main character is. 3. Three chapters in, and the main character is nowhere to be seen, unless the main character is the girl the POV is constantly following. 4. It’s just not very smart to use a side character’s POV rather than the main character’s, otherwise it makes me think that said side character is the MC.
Although, the start was bit confusing but as I read further, things got clearer on its own.. Author did the great job in choosing words in narration. Wonderful vocabulary! Great work.. Keep writing the minor issues will resolve with the practice... Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading the story.. Rooting for you!
Wonderful story. Despite the confusion in the beginning the story developed and world building is great. After few chapters I understood the perception. I like the character of Alice the most because of her intelligence and cuteness. Every character has unique personality. Great work author!! With the background of war, being the envoy and role of MC is more to see. I recommend everyone should absolutely read it.
loved it. It has a nice premise. It was confusing at first. I mean really confusing. But later the story did a hard carry. I hope you don't stop. I want to see more from you, My friend.
I have only read a few chapters, but I can tell that the story would be action-packed. Although I was a bit confused in the first two chapters, it got better after that. The story keeps me guessing.
Nice plot l must say..... Its just getting me read this story more... So plzzz author do upload more so that l can read more 🤭🤭.... Keep going l really really like the sotry...
The shifting POVs are a bit annoying, but it gets good if you dedicate your focus and try to absorb everything. The overall plot is easy to follow, though, and so far, the worldbuilding and the charas feel fine, excited for new chaps!
I would say that this is a pretty good story knowing that this is the author's first story. And I'll give that to [her?]. The world is pretty expansive, it looks like a lot of thought was invested into the world building. Though I'd say it honestly, I was kind of confused by the constant shift in perspective but I'm not really bothered by it since the author already mentioned it in the comment section. There were some capitalization mistakes and punctuation misplacements but not too distracting. Overall, I gave it 4.8. Keep it up, author!!! And keep improving!
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Good start, good writing skill, a fantasy world and levelling concept but has serious vibe. I can't believe this the work of a new author. Slow and steady pace but I got the feeling that it gonna build up something epic. Hope the author keep up with the writing quality.
Amazing. The story is so nicely portraid and so well written makes me want to read more and more. I like how the plot is well designed. Hoping to read more...
Author I can tell you care a whole lot about your characters. I would advise to go back and read the scenes for fluidity. Make sure it's not just about building scenes without tying in the characters to be the main focus. Please continue to develop them. They are intrinsic to help flesh out the plot. Check again on the structure of each paragraph and chapter. Make sure the main idea is conveyed and flatters the characters and your world. You got this. You are passionate! Cheers, Ra!
The story has a nice start. I love the synopsis and how the writer immediately pulls readers into the story's world. To sum it up, I enjoyed the first few chapters and will definitely add it to my collection.
there are some mistakes here and there, but they don't really bother you, unless we're talking about which is a male , and who's a woman, but aside from that, the writing is good! the story starts a bit slow, though if you can make it to chapter 4, you will start enjoying it! give the author a chance, may they bless us with a great story!
The story is unique and have a quite different taste than your usual trendy novels . It’s pace is also slow to medium and good for people looking to find something when tired. The update speed is great. World background is little out of line. Characters are nicely written and their interactions are also good. There are some grammatical issues but they are close to none and story is easily conveyable. But I think there are some issues like at times info dump is too much at once and chance of povs are not managed properly also the consistency of sentences just need a touch , maybe few edits will fix it . Other than good story and be sure to give it a try.😊😊
The author's story is definitely. I love the character designs and where the world is not only from the MC's perspective. I was only confused about the world background and all this Noble families. But so far so good. Just a few typing mistakes but that won't stop me from reading.
it is an interesting read,however the shifting narrative was little tough to follow,however the twists and turns popping up makes it an enjoyable ride,keep writing
The story is at a slow pace but that is what I love about it I read lots of novels and everything happens so fast that it is overwhelming for me. This novel has great potential. Keep going author.
There are a lot of interesting things which author have thoroughly described, from world background to MC's way of thinking. It's entertaining. However the only thing I found lacking in this novel was writing quality, which the author himself has already mentioned in the first review. I hope the author will re-read his text to find out the mistakes and correct them, since honestly, making such a nice story in the first go is a very great feat, and it should reach huge success.
This is the first story that I have published on a Webnovel, and I sincerely hope that you enjoy reading it. The world I created is expansive, and numerous mysteries keep cropping up so you don't get bored. However, the beginning of the chapter may leave you feeling a little bewildered due to the fact that the point of view keeps shifting. You will be following the main character, who has the heart of a demon, so there will be many violent and brutal scenes throughout the story. However, I guarantee that you will enjoy it as the story progresses. There is an additional adult scene... if you know what I mean. Don't be shy about sharing your thoughts in the comment section.