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Reincarnated in Orichimaru body in AU of Naruto with talent system.
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[English isn't my first language]
[I don't own anything and I use characters from other works]
[The cover is from Pinterest]
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Good idea and nice nice start. The grammar, though, is terrible and I just can't read it. I takes courage to try and post though and I commend you for that. Try finding someone to help with your grammar.
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Interesting summary and idea which has a lot of potentiol however the grammer is awfull and doesnt make any sense words words wordS 140 charecters
Really good so far, love the few changes that you are making comparing to the original story. If you keep this pace(1 chapter per day or so) this will be an interesting read.
i like this novel idea, thou still in beginning stage. dont disappoint us! dont drop pls ty[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Really fresh idea for me upgrading and changing the power of original characters good story writing and character depth is little but its okay it just fan fic who gives shit good luck (English not my languages sorry if you have headache reading this )
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The story is messed up from the very beginning. Every major naruto character starts of the same age. I don't understand what the author was hoping for, but he dropped the novel and that speaks for itself.
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‘English isn’t my first language “ so you know this is about to be a masterpiece
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The chapters are incredibly short while it has 49 chapters each chapter could be read in maybe 20 seconds or so Huge turn-off. ............
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Great story with an amazing consept and great pasing and a system that is not too broken so i hope you finish the Story as it would be a shame not to get an ending to it
Need new chapters plllllllllllleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaassssssssssssssssssssssseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
i don't know what to say but i can't understand how the world work cause there's too many different things from what i know about naruto world even if you say that it is because it has to be the fact that the world is alternative universe but too many different things. i will not surprised anymore if you say that the six path sage has a surname banjamin instead outsutsuki.
grammar is too bad making it difficult to read otherwise story seems good as of third chapter but sadly Im not willing to read more because of grammar