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A cliche story of a man, Russell Moon, who has been reincarnated inside his own novel – an unpublished one at that, if that even makes sense!
Being in a new world that he was familiar with, he began to uncover the mysteries behind his reincarnation even after trying his best to avoid getting involved, knowing the clear ending of peace if he just let the main characters do their routines.
However, he also discovered what he later called "Untouched Elements"
These elements could be said to be translated into the saying,
I didn't know this shit!
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The only fault with this story is that it focuses more on the MC's sister and other friends than MC , after the few starting chapters there has not been a single ch purely dedicated to MC , all we read is about the sister and the original 'main characters '
Hello, to anyone who's reading this; if you are reading my 'first novel', I hope you could give it a proper review for me to know your thoughts. I'm a new writer, and hope to improve more.
This is first time reading a novel where main character feel like side character. He is not involve in plot at all. Even if have powers he doesn't use it. What the point of being low key when your whole academy think you wierd and freaking he join a class in which he receives basic information about World and he is reincarnated in a novel he read and then also he doesn't know about novel. If you make his main character it would make more sense. St least author try to fit him in story and i know he is extra character in novel but you took this too seriously and even from his pov he seems like extra character. That I guess you can say he is weird due to his previous life character. His character and personality are too boring.
This novel could've been better but the MC plays a extremely minor role in the story's progression. Kinda like that one dwarf that isekai MCs always visit to upgrade their gear; he's important but not too much. The story at times has a lot of unnecessary information like there's this one scene where the teacher does a roll call and rather than just mention the important names and maybe a few others, while skipping the rest, the author goes through the hassle of thinking up a bunch of names for people who have absolutely zero impact on the story. It also keeps hinting at the fact that there's something special about the MC but then proceeds to delegate him to the background rather than unraveling the mystery. His role is just to eat with his sister and mention some random facts. He's boring and also has no personality. I read up till ch. 89 and can't say whether or not the story improves later on so I can't really recommend. Try it and see for yourself
Great story. The start was a bit boring since there was a ton of information. It ’s a typical dungeon story. Not a lot of tension going on. I feel like the characters are stronger than their rank. Kind of hoping for more character development. Can’t really understand what the plot is supposed to be. There isn’t really a problem in the early chapters. Please focus on the mc more. It’s great that you are writing about the side characters instead of soley focusing on the mc, but I think there should be a balance. I hope this can count as constructive criticism. ^^
Read as of 131/131 chaps as of current. I wrote a very long review... but then I dropped my mouse which had inadvertently closed the review... AGHHRRR So I will just make it brief. Should you read it? -If you are okay with the MC that is more of an extra and a story with large focus on many characters, if you enjoy the living in the novel setting, as well as a slice of life , but looming serious plot then you should give it a go. It's a novel that you have to give it a go and see if you can handle its issues and bank on a pay off because of how slow it is. It has good world building particularly in regards to the mechanism and powers. There are also lots of world building elsewhere but also very miniscule in other areas which feels odd. The writing quality is not bad in terms of grammar and punctuation. The novel has a lot of issues which drag the story down: 1. Lots of info dumps and irrelevant information which even involves several characters which in the first 30 chaps you will be introduced with about 15+ names and their traits I kid you not. 2. Very large character focus that is executed in a scatter manner, and simultaneously which results in poor characterisation that requires time and with the direction of the story and its events. Very hard to emphasise with. 3. Mc. Absolutely horrid. Reminds me of korean protagonists near the end game. The mc of this novel isn't mechanical in his growth to power like them, but he is unlikable and I seriously don't know why the author thought it was a good choice to journey the readers into his shoes. He has social anxiety but this point isn't emphasised enough to give a satisfying character development, presentation, or conveying of themes. I actually don't hate him, but I'm very inclined to dislike him. Thinking of reasons to dislike, I can honestly go on and on. 4. Op for no reason. Ties into the MC. He worked nothing for it and although there is a mystery which may possibly have answers to why he got to be so op. But from what is shown, there is no intention behind it besides complete convenience for the author. There are many novels with OP / super free cheats for the MC, but they have an actual intention whether it's to faceslap, feel good, show op, steamroll, be a power in the shadows etc. HERE THERE'S NOTHING. He didn't earn for it at all and the powers weren't used to test him or something to make it feel as if he's worthy. Even worse he shares these powers to others for literally free. No issue with that, but there's 0 struggle and it gives the impression of feeling indignant to readers like myself. 5. Lack of action. Mc takes until like 70 chaps to actually fight. The fights that do occur which is conducted by the other characters that are in focus do not feel substantial at all. I don't feel a reason to care majority of the time. It honestly feels more like a slice of life. The fights are there because it's required and there's no satisfying driving force. 6. Harem. I'm a harem lover. I do appreciate the fact that while there are many heroines around the mc, there seems to be surprisingly no heroine that can be said to have fallen for the mc. For the most part, it's good will and romantic feelings have yet to blossom. I like this a lot. This means I can ship without being disappointed at how obvious a pairing may be and expect possibly some juicy romantic drama. HOWEVER, it feels very strange and it bugs me that majority of characters that go into salience throughout the novel are FEMALE. I swear 90% of the males that are in relevance are just antagonists. Wish-fulfilment? Anycase, I really want more male characters to interact. --------------------------------- Biggest suggestion- The author should write some auxiliary chapters. One on detailing the concepts of the novels, vital information, even perhaps a timeline of significant events. 2nd. Brief character sheet of major characters at least. Particularly we want ILLUSTRATIONS!! PICTURES PLEASE! ---------------------------- I usually end my reviews with shipping as I only read romances/harems. There are a lot of heroines. Tbh many of the characters are pretty average. Which is unfortunately due to poor execution. Look at Amery, her acting all wary and everything ended up being whatever in the end. It didn't end up being dramatic at all. From the heroines shown so far, the characters I would like to see as the winning FL would be--- The Princesses, particularly Rumia. They are interesting and their backgrounds can create a lot of conflict of interest. Their personalities can change the mc into a satisfying character development direction. You can even set up a love triangle which can dramatise the story. They are also part of the OG main characters, so the connection of that can put pressure on the MC. There is a lot to explore imo. Honestly, Samantha being possessive is interesting, but I think she's very stale compared to what the princesses can bring to the table. Azalea- My 3rd choice. She already has a relationship with the mc and I think the fact that because SPOILERS{she sacrificed her own parents} makes her a target of a possible interesting relationship. There is stuff to be worked with. We readers don't know much about her goal and so she's a great choice to be explored. Amelie is my 4th. I'm always bias to heroines that can be freely with the MC. I think it's cheating that they can do that and that's my issue with Amelie and why she is 4th. That said, I'm not sure what to say besides the fact that I do like her. She kinda seems the obvious choice for the FL. So if the above 3 aren't the ones, then I would hope it would be her, much to my disliking. So yeah author, I know I critcised a lot, but I hope you can make one of these girls win the heart of the mc!
this story and writing is great but it is slow in the start but moving on you will love the story and it is one of the best I have seen so far ps love the story
I usually don't criticised novel much i am easy to please but amount of bullshh this novel has astounds me and it is so boring so boring that i who have read countless trash Chinese novel is saying it believe me don't waste your time on this only reason I am giving it 2 stars are because of good writing quality i gave it good rating before but the more i read it trasher it got
7 chapters in. The novel has been nothing but lengthy info dumps and MC getting random power-ups non-stop. All those power-ups are insane but the only thing MC did to deserve them was to find a random hidden dungeon without any difficulty while doing so. None the less it required 4 lengthy chapters to list down various power-ups that MC gotten.
Free chaps are long and boring. The story is interesting I might go back in reading after it goes for more chaps. It's not really suited to be read by 1 chapter a day but still I salute this author for a great work
author i think u should add over-over-overpowered like my man got everything he wants in less than 20 chapter...........................................
Hello, for those who read this review to know more about the novel here it is, the novel is great it has a slow start because of the explanations of the world's power system, talking about abilities, magic, classes etc, I'm in the 3rd chapter and I already liked it.
one of the few books i liked here i hope it comes back it's always in the back of my mind so please freaking write again I'm tiered of checking for an appdate and finding nothing *tears*
I like it i you don great job although i wish for some romantic between our MC and Samanth in school after the party but of course you had to ruin it by reveling something i wouldn’t wish it to my worst enemy it destroy ones soul completely i really hate when this happened infact you did forget or simply ingnor some events like one of the Princesses witnessing our MC in Samanth room in night time (not spoiler) !!! then completely forgot about it the next day like nothing happened infact she was willing to inform her friends yet even after the roomers that spread about the mc rel ationship with someone alse it was the perfect timing to revail that fact or took about it but nothing happened
great writing quality every thing feels like proper litrpg and side characters have good growth
Hello, dear author! I've read your novel and it's really great. We are a SWAP HONEST REVIEW AND COLLECTION for Webnovel. You can search for webnovel666 on DISCORD or @webnovel666 on Telegram to join our community This novel is an exciting story of a man's journey of self-discovery after he is reincarnated inside his own novel. Russell Moon must face the unknowns of this new world and plunge into the mysteries of his reincarnation. It is sure to be an intriguing journey of exploration and understanding. I can't wait to read more about his adventures!
The story is ok to me. I've read until chapter 120 and I might continue reading or maybe not, depends. The story isn't too fast pace which is good. The information dump is inevitable when they have system setting which really not a big deal. The reason why I didn't give 5 star is because the MC Russell Moon, isn't the kind of MC I liked. I don't really want him to be crueler or cold type of man but his character somehow make me felt he didn't suit with the title of Mediator of Chaos. He's weird as described as other characters and I agree with that. The other thing that turn me off from continue reading this novel is the lack of fighting and action from our MC until 70+ chapters when we finally see him fighting. In the earlier chapters, MC just got a bunch of things and titles and cheat keys after he 'somehow' luckily being contracted by a powerful constellation that none other constellation knew about. Then he got another pack of booster + cheat keys (skills ie). It seems like author just want to conveniently make him became OP as fast as he could for no reason. His life wasn't really in danger in the earlier chapters per say. Fortunately there is no harem tag but throughout the novel, the smell of harem vibe is too much to ignored. I could even see his sister became one of his harem member on how much she tried to meddle and want to involve in everything her oppa did. Request for author to give at least one male friend to our MC Russell Moon. It's weird none of the male students ever seem to be talking to him and he kept on being with girls all the time. I have a sister and as a female it's still weird for me to not have friend and instead befriending my sister's friend. Sorry for the long review but overall I think author-sama already did a great job. Kept on writing until the end.
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