Savage: The Night Wizard - (A Harry Potter Fanfic)

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Se7en

As a shameless author... Or very smart and cunning, I'm giving myself five stars, just because I can, and because that might be the only one I'll get... Sniff. (Feel sorry for me and give me five stars, hehe). I hope my story pleases you all, just as many of the stories here please and cheer me. :) I would also like you to tell me what I can improve on the fanfic, because it would improve the experience for you guys, and it would help me to write better (And learn English). But please, when commenting, be respectful. I would love to receive a negative review to help me improve, but I would be very disappointed (and perhaps annoyed) if I were only given name-calling and mockery. But I still hope you have fun reading and commenting, just as I had fun writing. Thanks Se7en! :)

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Se7en

WebNovel has decided that the site's readers should be forced to use the app to read the stories they like, and because of that I've decided that I will post my fanfic on other sites as well. I myself am one of the readers who uses the site, because I translate the stories with Google Translate, but fortunately now I can read some texts in English, but the feeling is not the same. I'll start posting on the sites: FanFiction.Net, RoyalRoad and ScribbleHub. If you know other good sites, let me know.

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TheKindlyGentleman

Even Ignoring the fact that you can't train occlumecy without the assistance of a legilimens, that you can't successfully train controlled Magic until the age of 11, that occlumecy and legilimency take years to train to novice mastery, let alone the full mastery required to augment ones memories, that training one martial art to full mastery requires at least half a decade of dedicated work, let alone 4-8 martial arts with only semi-dedication, that you can't learn magical spells based upon what you've learned from movies and books from another life taught with the use of a wand in mind, wandlessly. Ignoring all of that, creating a character that is so Overpowered before Canon even starts, such that at his current rate of progression he will never be in danger at any point in the story, makes for a horribly boring and bland tale indeed. This is complete wish fulfillment, it is not at all realistic even for fantasy fiction. what's more the grammar while decent enough to read is still below average and often repetitive. all in all I recommend the author is clear and concise with whatever point they may be trying to get across, that they describe the environment around the character more often and in more detail, that they stop giving written diatribes of what the character plans to do and more of what they are currently doing, that they make the character face danger and adversity more often and that the character is given more of a personality, with faults and quirks and that the character is not so strong so fast, AT MOST they should be at the level of a third year at the end of the first year.

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Stillness_Of_Death

Writing: Not bad but needs improvement. Update: No comment. I mean every HP fanfics start with at a dozen chapters but very few maintain their momentum while the rest are dropped. Storyline: MC's too OP and no proper explanation for MC'S Powers. Character: Typical OP MCish behavior. Nothing that stands from other dropped fanfics. I mean nothing is perfect. Fanfics are like what we would have done if we're in HP kind of thing. As humans are not perfect the author should mix failures in success. I mean like how can a normal human can control magic and fight better than most adults at age of 5/10 year old albeit the human is a transmigration without hard work and years of experience even if he is creative is beyond my imagination. Long story short if you need to have a OP MC then write in the perspective of a normal human from Earth. Not everyone are genius you know. Background: No comment. Story is still young.

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Changen4125

50 chapters in and there is nothing but info dumps. It reads more like a wiki than a story. If it's suppose to be a slice of life then make about a slice of life, but instead we are a fed a drivel of facts and history instead of a story. It's like having Hermione in your ears telling you about her day.

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MedTryglaw

Gods, as a witness, I tried ... but the MC is too much OP, to the point that it makes a caricature of it. Not yet in school, he has powers and talents that rival Voldemort ... MC knows everything, has all talents and is a genius at all.

LV 5

Assassins_Read

Started nice, my expectations were on the clouds thought it will be a good fic but it quickly went to the ground and became a below average story, not worth reading

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Lycarus

a book with a lot of potential, it's still in its infancy, but you can expect a lot of content. the author also reads his readers' tips, and has very good ideas. you don't have to rely on polls for your decisions, it's your book so follow your ideas so you'll find it more fun too.

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Mac_Laurin_AGBONON

I loved the story but considering that the story has 109 chapters and up to cap 65 he is still in his first year. against but not my preference. The second is MS's tendency to be praised for everything he does. So it's not for me. Very slow story. Adorei a história mas considerando que a história tem 109 capítulos e até o cap 65 ele ainda está no primeiro ano. Eu ou largar. A história é incrivelmente bem escrita. Meu problema está na sua interação com dois garotos na maior parte da história não tenho nada contra mas não é minha preferência. O segundo é a tendência do MS de ser elogiado por tudo o que ele faz. Então não é para mim história muito lenta.

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CrowMoonrise

Read up to C64 and cant believe I even got that far. The MC is just not likeable. I cant stand his actions or thoughts, just a cringy 'chunibyo' on sugar even though he should mentally be 30 years old but you get this instead ( although the Author commented that there is a reason for it but that doesn't make the MC likeable ). His training arc at the beginning also makes no sense considering the slow pace of the story and once he got to Hogwarts he is barely doing any training/research and even plans on joining the Quidditch Team. So why the training arc to push him up to Adult Wizard standards? he has enough free time at Hogwarts that could've been used. The writing quality is acceptable considering he is writing in Spanish and translating to English via Google Translator. Although it looks like the Author picked up the story pace later on but the first 60 chapters are only pre Hogwarts + first 2 weeks at Hogwarts which is pretty slow for 200+ chapters in 1+ year. If you can ignore or stand the MC then this FF might be worth reading in 2-3 years.

LV 14

DetachedDreamer

I read 45 chapters and there hasn't been an ounce of action. seems obvious he wants to stray away from the plot and any action at all. its basically just been a long training montage. The writing is at an acceptable level but the humor falls short consistently due to the level of English. he does time skips then goes back to tell you what he did in detail, which defeats the purpose of the time skip. lol The author made sure to add 98/100 of the most popular hp fanfic tropes, granted the few not added were major ones. The story is decent but honestly just seems like a side story at this point. Not being involved and not affecting the plot is just lazy writing in my eyes. 45+ chapters and no true storyline cept a kid who's already reached his goal of being the most powerful wizard basically. Overall not a bad story but its development is at a snails pace, having full chapters dedicated to single day classes, consistently. I had to give up but I would recommend people to give the story a chance, I know there are folk who would like this story.

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ColdFenix

It starts pretty good and fast paced, although the MC's rapid progress doesn't have a great explanation and feels unjustified. But the big problem comes the moment he starts at Hogwarts. The story just slows down to a crawl with unnecessary excruciatingly detailed explanations of every little thing the MC does. 50 chapters of nothing interesting happening and little to no progress in the story becomes normal. The MC also seems to also loose his motivations to become stronger like protecting his family or changing the wizard world to stop discrimination and he basically becomes a normal slightly more talented student who doesn't train much and barely has any progress in his abilities. If you want to read a slice of life novel without much action in the HP world you might still like this one but if you expect anything to happen you will probably be dissapointed.

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Silver_mirror

I don't mind op MC but the pace is slow. Extremely slow. Even a snail can out pace this story. MC is not likable. So far chapter 74 and all thing that is worthwhile is that he establish a friendship with the twins. Did I mention slow, chapter 74 and MC plus batchmates are in 1st year, that's not all not even a month has passed of school year. At this rate we would have 10k plus chapter before triwizard tournament. Forget 5 th 6 th and 7 th year. Mark my word it shall never be finished. Webnovel should have negative star or blackhole. It would get 5 supermassive blackholes.

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Code_Cow

The author definitely needs to have someone go through and work on the grammer. Just in the first chapter alone the MC changes gender several times.

LV 12

Yuukit

first of all i love those hp novels and read most of them. this story is just not to me. i just cannot stand how he learn all skills easy, and all we get is little bit world building and lots and lots her skills and spells. too many always makes mc too op millions skills and spells. i love op mc but too op is not that good. maybe write bit more about her school life and not how he will make that spell work and other god sake he is 11 year and other world. but still novel was not bad and hope all best

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DaoistYX6dZF

Me gusta el modo en que has ido desarrollando la historia de manera muy relajada pero no ignorando el entorno de la misma ya que considero ése un detalle bastante importante, y me gusta que no tenga álgo así como un enemigo desde el principio de la historia ya que es algo raro ser un niño con enemigos jajaja.

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GoddessEmpressBird

love most of it so far I don't like how author is trying to maybe setup a Harem. PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM PLZ NO HAREM

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KronosZer0

I liked it, so I'll give it five stars. I liked the powers of the MC, and even though the story is a little slow (I've seen slower stories) I like how you're trying to develop the characters and the background of the world.

LV 4

Humbuub

Aside from the writing and consistency of updates, everything else is dumpsterfire. Don't waste your time, 300+ chapters might be a lot, but the story development and MC is insufferable.