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概要
In an alternate SAO World, a soul from another universe transmigrated to Kazuto's body without any memories of why or a sealed one.
Because of this, a whole new Kazuto was born which was very different from the Kazuto in the original series. In this Alternate World, what will be the other changes that might happen?
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I really suck at making synopsis so I try to avoid making one but seeing that it is really is needed, I decided to make one. even though it is really bad and will be edited in the future.
Note: I don't own the cover photo. If you're the owner please contact me so I will remove it for you.
Don't really need your power stone but I could use some advice on how to improve my story so don't hesitate to comment.
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Since there’s a 5 star review and 1star review Imma give you a 3 star review Thanos:”Balance as all should be”. Balanced😝👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
Might as well balance out this review section. All these cucks spamming one-star reviews without writing anything worthwhile. I'll say that I have read the last few iterations of this novel. While I can't agree that rewriting it so many times is a good idea; at least you've shown improvement. That's more than what can be said for some authors. Good job, although I'd love to see something else done with this concept. Sao is a lackluster novel, that's been done to all hell. The one punch concept that you had before was better. Although the creation concept sort of broke the pacing. Once you overload a character so much, with possibilities; you cut all possible ******* for your story. This makes it harder to decide on a path, when you literally have infinite open. I would rewrite that, but allow the ability to have some limits, and growth potential. For example, he can only give himself abilities at the start of the world, and is limited for three or so. Make it so that he can't give himself information, allowing him to gain experience in his skill. Of course, he can create outside of his body or something so it isn't a totally useless wish. You just have to have limits with those kinds of abilities. I'd go for a pseudo-creation wish, with a library sort of information center with exorbitant information, and a wish that encompasses his body/form or bloodlines.
The quality of the writing is actually really good with little to no error at all. Not a lot of grammatical error or sentence structure that’s off and the story is easy to follow and read. I’m really happy with fact that the story doesn’t start off immediately with the launch of SAO and instead starts off much earlier as this allows more character growth and helps the reader be attached to the story and it’s character. The change of POV is a really good idea and one that should be continued as we get to more and more characters. The pace of the story is really good so far not being too fast or too slow and allow us get to know the characters much more. The lack of system in the story so far actually helps the story seem more natural and I think it could be a story on its own without the help of a system. I’m personally fine with the addition of the system as long as it doesn’t take over the story. Overall the story is great and I hope the author is able to continue and not be dispirited by the comments. It already suck that this is the third rewrite as I feel the others were already great. Hope this continues and that the author will get more recognition for his/her work
You shamelessly gave yourself a 5 star, so I'll also shamelessly give you 1 star. 👍, 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌🙌😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩💩
One of the only good Sao fanfics I have read in a long time, u should give it a try!!! 👍 So to fill the remaining letters needed for the review : It's just great, author : keep up the good work! And so on.......
Very well detailed very minor spelling problems I just wish that kirito gets some kind of buff when or even if, hopefully, he gets trapped in Aincrad. 10 out of 10. I will definitely drop all my stonez
Same as Webzayne and Maclemore love the story, hope you keep it up. To trolls Stop being d!cks and trying to ruin the Authors drive to write.
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Author not gonna try to be cute with typing 'nyaaa...' again ? Imma review dis so this novel maybe can have 5 star rating😁 to "promote"........................ rrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeerrrrrrrrrEeeEEEEEEE3EEEEEEEEEEEERRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRERRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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So good so far...keep updating daily and don't drop it..hope u keep writing such amazing stuff🙌🔥........................................................... ......................... ... ...........
Pretty Good so far like it need more entertainment more .................................................................................................................. ................................................
I am the soul of my account Exp is my body and coin is my blood I have created countless reviews Unaware of the congruity, Nor aware of the quality Withstood critics to create reviews, waiting for one's acceptance I have no shame. This the easiest way My whole life was Unlimited Useless Previews
So I see one review that was at the top that said people put 1 star reviews because they didn’t read the story and calling us cucks, yet failed to mention how the author proceeds to sexualize children. Not only that romance is so forced, like no way Asuna would be acting like a fan girl and taking pictures. Then she proceeds to think, “Wow, his smile is so charming!” It’s basically just the author taking the characters and changing their personality to be so unrealistic, and did I forget to mention he’s sexualizing Kirito’s cousin when she’s 11?
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Honestly the story is not bad but good. I honestly don't understand why this novel has so many bad reviews. The story's grammar is not good but note bad enough to where you notice it all the time, unless you just started reading novels.
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I saw a lot of Authors doing this shamless review so I would also shamelessly do it. The things that you should probably expect of this novel is that: [1] I will not be focusing much on the game: there will be not much of a detail about the floors: the boss that the MC will fight will be the only ones mentioned in the novel or the anime [2] This is technically a Harem Story just as a warning for those that don't love Harem: I will make his interactions with his girls as real as possible: I will also make their reactions as logical as I can. [3] This story will not really follow the canon that much and I will be changing some of it: spoiler alert!! I will not let the Konno sisters die. [4] This will only be about SAO so if ever this gets a lot of attention. Then I may have to create a new plot which means a new game, new enemy, new girls and more fights! [5] The MC of this story had his memories forgotten but can be remembered of certain events triggers it: Just a spoiler, the MC is really connected to Kirito That's all folks just read the story to know more.