/ Book&Literature / Reborn in Harry Potter as a Le Fay
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Guy reborn as a Le Fay, he's probably going to be evil mc, or atleast he won't be good, he enjoys causing chaos, but he won't be the oh let me help save the world mc, but he won't go as far as like raping women or killing babies that type of shit, but torture yea he'll do that, also probably AU Harry Potter world
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An amazing story. It feels fresh not having to deal with the movie arcs. There are familiar characters but the story is original. Looking forward to what happens.
Honestly most fanfic about Harry Potter are usually during the main timeline but i this one is in an AU and before canon. I still like it tho its pretty good the writing is great and the character development is pretty decent overall its a great read
this looks like an interesting story but the delivery is not there. First is that the grammar and misspelling makes it less appealing to read. The use or lack of quotations is a huge turnoff in reading this
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Low quality writing, probably by a non English speaking teenager. Doesn't matter how good the premise is when the execution is a cesspool of inadequacy. -------------------------------------------------------------------------
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You have to update this story its amazing and could go very far. I cant wait to see him take over Hogwarts hmm he should go to slytherin or maybe ravenclaw
look i like the story but the fact your only partly using quotes to separate statements and actions from speech is getting confusing. itshard to tell without the quote marks whats a thought whats a speech and whats a action
Nice story. It doesn’t follow the time period of the books or movies which is different and interesting, and a plus in my opinion. It could be better written but good nonetheless. I am really enjoying it althought it seems the mc is looking to be like Voldemort which i am not a big fan of. The realationships are nice and seem real i just hope he gets more than 1 girl hehe.
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Overall a pretty good start to the story, just some punctuation would be nice to make it read more easily. Looking forward to reading where it goes!
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Could be better if the author wrote dialogue as actual dialogue and not just randomly in paragraphs.... use “ “ when writing dialogue and dont use “ “ when writing the mc thoughts it just doesnt make sense to do that hut not dialogue... use ‘ ‘ if you wanted to write him thinking.... Also randomly having thr MC gather 11 year old kids and tell them that he is making his own commandents is so cringe and dumb that it just doesnt make any sense..... story had potential but idk about that anymore
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