概要
When I thought death was my finish line, I learned that I was just beginning.
-- 推薦
ランキング 
-- 推薦
チケット あなたも好きかも
33レビュー
4.38
- テキストの品質
- アップデートの安定性
- ストーリー展開
- キャラクターデザイン
- 世界の背景
あなたの考えを他の人と共有してください
レビューを書く
THE RULES FOR GIVING THIS NOVEL A REVIEW WRITING QUALITY 1 star if you can't understand my grammar 2 stars if you feel that my grammar is garbage 3 stars if you think that my grammar is bad 4 stars if you think I can improve but still bad 5 stars if you feel that it is passable and good STABILITY OF UPDATES Just give me mercy and automatically choose five stars since I have a scheduling problem it is understandable don't let the updates blind your eyes and lead you to the wrong path. 5 Stars STORY DEVELOPMENT 1 star if you can't understand what is happening 2 stars if the story is making you feel boring 3 stars if the story pacing is too fast or too slow 4 stars if it only needs a few adjustments 5 stars if you feel that it is great CHARACTER DESIGN 1 star if the characters are useless 2 stars if the characters are too bland 3 stars if you think that some are sub-par 4 stars if you can imagine what is happening 5 stars if you can relate to the characters WORLD BACKGROUND You decide if the world of fiction is good or bad. The world background is like every fiction like novels, mangas, animes, games, movies, and shows are combined into one story the world of Re/System
It was a great read until the end of chapter 8, it basically goes from where spirit hall was about to fight Xiao Wu's mother before the original DD1 plot to a massive skip of mc travelling through time picking up spirit rings as a soul douluo, basically 99% of the novel has been cut with a "rewriting" tag on a few of the earlier chapters and then nothing; just cut apart most of the novel with no activity for a year or so.
This maybe a little bit rude , however , i want to ask you , do you even read douluo dalu? Because while the idea is interesting, the world building you have done so far is a little bit err too much out of canon? Its like something different but with douluo dalu's character name , there is many plot hole and probably you will answer me it all because 'system' First thing first , i am actually fine with he going here and there , got his spirit ring from anything , but you should make it belivable , the golden tree (1m+) ring? Tang wulin got it because his connection with tang, and ah yin and his own blue silver emperor , silver dragon king gu yuena the one who hold the wisdom of dragon god actually just like 'ah-OK-letsdothat', and golden dragon king in all of his glory the own who holds the power and madness of dragon god , dude you are talking about the lord of myriad beast with 1b+ cultivation and strength of god king+(2 god kings level god couldnt even kill him in the story) . If my speculation right , you probably just do information digging from wikia and 'welp this cool lets add this to my story' , where i got no problem with that , please , just please do some background searching. Your writing is not bad really , it is just , you become too greedy with the ideas and tried to cramp all of it in this story , seriously the introduction of this story got me , i mean the protagonist somehow or other become adopted brother of xiao wu , that is really interesting , but you cant get all what you want , the development and plot are too rushed and just like i said before , too much ideas , and because that you cant focus to develop it.
ネタバレを明かす
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
I believe that the strory will become more and more interesting as the time goes by... maybe u can make MC meet the other MC from different timeline to join force and BOOM! keep it up btw! Already on my list to be read .....
ネタバレを明かす This is my second review to tell you readers that I will post anytime anywhere when I feel like it but this will not be drop. The release schedule can be multiple chaps a day or once every year.
You guys already know the reason behind this review and I am too lazy to explain for those who don't. This is completely normal for authors to rate their novel five stars cause why not it boosts their something to write I guess?
I really like this. Unfortunately chapter 9 wasn’t there and so it got confusing because all of a sudden we go from preparing for the invasion of spirit hall to looking for spirit rings with daydream. Otherwise love the story so far. Look forward to reading more!!!
Nice..........................................................................................................................................................................................
I've been following all this. I would like the admin to continue translating. Fight+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
ネタバレを明かす
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
make tang hao 99 rank and marry qian rexuene and help grandmaster and shrek teacher to reach higher cultivation also become teacher in shrek academy along with tang hao and ah yin
ネタバレを明かす
Gg%ffffffftttgggggggggggggggggggggggggg%gggggggy5c6c6cctcycuccucucycycycycycycycycycycycycycycycycycycy cycycycycycycyc6c6c6f6f6f6f6f6f6f6f6f6f6f6f6f6ff
Bfggctgftyggh guijhjibxssergghj fhbnkoohghcthcfgfxcghchgchcghcgyvfyvfhvcgcxgvcgcfgcfgdesxcbhijhuiknkoutdxsrdsercfubhjbfnjohffzdythgdxvuhtfhuniifccthfhihgibginbingikmmooudeszscgbvu
I really enjoy reading this I just wish he interacted with things a little more like the spirits of his rings or the people he meets. I understand he does want to mess up the original story to much but I feel the 40,000 year spirit ring for rongrong was just a bit over the top. Still I cant wait to see what you come up with next. Great job shadow. Also are you still gonna cover the spirit bones?
Hhhxjskajxvvxjwosjjdhcjsowiyeyhdhckdwidufjdbcmxmamnavduskqhsgdidndywkocucgwbgcifppwoyctciwoqlhhdowpqkbdbxbxowojxhudskhbdhddjdbdksndhxhxufjff
Actual literal trash from the first chapter. Not remembering anything, garbage strait garbage, he doesn’t even think of the ramifications of not having memories. At first I thought he was smart, but he is one of those “sees girl, loses all defense and complexion” trashes. Why wish for op if you don’t want to be op. And you blaspheme Itachi’s image of a cool domineering character. Another wasted character design, or should I say a trash mc to begin with. It was trashed from the start. I would like to continue but I simply can’t.