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A 24-year old girl was pushed to a corner. She only had herself to rely on so she pushed back harder.
Meet me, Xi Jingfei, in a world of violence and revenge... hate and love.... perplexed relationships....
From no one to rely to everyone relying upon me.... my story continues....
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Liked your story, had to say I was totally hooked! The plot is good and that can be seen in writing. The way the author describes each scene leaves you hungering for more. Character and world design is amazing except for a few glitches here and there. But no worries the smooth flow of story makes up for it. Lastly, I would say that your synopsis needs a little work, if you know what I mean. It's too short, a little detailing won't hurt. But that's just my opinion. Keep writing 👍 This one goes straight to my library.
This story is superb, astounding, breathtaking, and everything else. Although It’s not perfect and There are some minor mistakes, but they’re not glaring, so overall it’s passable. it's sort of thrilling at some parts. i can't really say that your novel is cliche cause i wasn't able to predict what would happen next and stuff. I'll admit, I was a bit dubious when I read the first chapter but the later chapters were of improved quality and enjoyed reading it a lot. Overall, I loved it.
Writing: 5 It’s not perfect. There are some minor mistakes, bu they’re not glaring, so overall it’s passable. My biggest qualm would be the use of Name: for speeches. It should be formatted as Name said/shouted/cried/etc. with an comma quotation or vice versa. Or have gestures and expressions in between speech to let the reader know who’s speaking. It also heightens the reading experience. Updates: 5 Fine enough for me. Story: 4 It’s a different type of story, more like a crime drama, so kudos for doing something uncommon. However, while ambitious, it lacks execution. Rather than feeling suspenseful, it felt like everything was out into the open. Adding more mystery, such as not revealing MC’s true family background and discovering it in a more dramatic way, would greatly increase the lacking *******. MC also is a little too open and not cautious by immediately telling her connections with Zhao to Samuel. It doesn’t quite feel consistent with what I expected/was lead to expect of her character. Moving onto... Characters: 3 The MC is atypical still, so that’s a good point of differentiation from female leads. But, like mentioned earlier, it’s not quite there/the strong-smart FL isn’t fully accomplished/convincing. Additionally, the other characters lacked substance. It felt like some human, realistic puzzle piece was missing. With Samuel, we got his backstory, but somehow, it didn’t strike me in any sentimental way. It felt like a tell without an actual show. I think a lot of the story and character inconsistencies can benefit from deeper delving into their histories and emotions as well as their motivations and beliefs in life. MC’s killing felt anti-climatic, it came too soon. While she showed some real, human reaction to killing a person, it made me wonder why? Why is the way she wants to deal with all her suffering? Does she wish a quick end to only run from the authorities the rest of her life? How about bringing the whole issue to light? Making him suffer more? I couldn’t figure out her innermost pain and anger turned into believable action. Maybe we’ll see some of this later, but the killing still felt...too sudden. Lastly, she accepts her new identity pretty easily. From how she dealt with it and encountered people, it felt like this dual identity didn’t make much of a difference in the story, like it could easily be revised without it. World: 4 Details and descriptions of world and settings were sufficient for basic imagination of the surroundings and construction, but total comprehension and immersion wasn’t quite accomplished. Questions like the standing of families and their connections with the sovereign law and authorities as well as even the entertainment industry considering the amount of times MC sang. (I also didn’t see the connection of this subplot/talent of hers into the whole crime drama.) Overall: 4.2 A story with great ambition in its desire for something different and substantial but one that did not quite achieve all the expectations set for itself. It has the makings for a fabulous crime romance drama, but it drags and speeds up in places where it should do the opposite to create the underlying psychological and philosophical claims and power which spur the story forth in believability and thrill. Once all the pieces are strung together convincingly and cohesively, this is a winner.
This story is superb awesome good mamamia and everything else. I don't know how to explain it. Just read it yourselves. But on thing for sure, the author knows how to expressed the feeling of the mc. The rollercoaster ride and angst. But I'm quite dissatisfied to be left hanging on a cliff bare alive.
omg~ i like it! it started dark but not gross-- which is well, my personal preference. it's sort of thrilling at some parts. i can't really say that your novel is cliche cause i wasn't able to predict what would happen next and stuff. keep it up~
I'll admit, I was a bit dubious when I read the first chapter but the later chapters were of improved quality and enjoyed reading it a lot. The storyline is cliché but at the same time it's not. What I mean is that I can't predict when a twist's gone appear. So far, I love the story. My suggestions are: 1) To get someone to edit the first few chapters 2) Add some spaces between the lines(for dialogues) 3) Write a synopsis. This is the most important one. A synopsis is what attracts and gets the reader's interests. Hoping for more chapters. Thank you.
If you love romance within dangerous settings filled with twists and turns where you have no idea how everything will end up, then this is the book for you! I loved how it started with ****** vivid imagery, then dashed into the sequence of events that keep you on your edge. While I'm not a fan of romance at all, this book is one of the exceptions. Grammar is pretty good with a couple of negligible mistakes. But, the story makes you want to ignore them. Keep it up author! >3</
The first chapter definitely hooks you in. The concept and ideas behind the story is great but I think the writing could be improve. I really like how the fl is conveyed as intelligent but as a character she isn’t as fleshed out. And I think its due to the transitions of events. There not properly transitioned so the flow is bit awkward *spoilers* *Like for example when she escapes*. Overall its an enjoyable read :)
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The plot seems to be amazing!!! I am hooked! Though there are one or two mistakes here and there, but it's unnoticeable. Overall, this story is great! Keep writing!
Love this new novel. Hope it has a mass release. I loved how strong the MC was through out the chapters thus far. Unlike the cliché novels, this one differs because the story isn't predictable at all. I would be thinking this particular set of things will happen but then the twist changes it all, in a better way of course. Thank you for giving us opportunity to read such a wonderful story. Keep going Author. I'm rooting for Xi Jingfei.
Positive Points: Female character with strong and "intelligent" personality; a good motivation behind revenge; The first chapter was a very captivating chapter. And grammar is not bad. Negative points: After chapter 01, the other chapters are short and without consistency, as if something was missing; The intelligence of the MC is very exalted, even when she does stupid things, for example, she could have fled before her family was killed, but only ran away after the family died; Your description has one thing that I detest the exaltation of the intelligence of a character without real evidence of intelligence. Well, so far I have not seen anything clever in her actions. Now if you substitute intelligence for resilience or will power, then it would make more sense since so far it has shown more strength of character and resilience than intelligence. Another point, the structure of this world was not clearly explained, it would be good to have put it right at the beginning of the novel to situate the reader in the novel. Overall: I had a great deal of expectation about the novel, but the chapters that followed were short and did not involve that first chapter. Anyway, for those who like a story of revenge, this romance is not bad, but I feel that the author could do much more with this story.
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I like how you grew from the first chapter to the last chapter! You need to work on formatting your dialog so it's easier to read, even though you improved by the 23rd chapter. Basically, if a new person talks skip a line, and if you have details after dialog about the person talking, keep it on that line. Other than that, I think the more you write the more you will keep improving, and I hope you keep putting in lots of effort, and find inspiration in all the stories you read!
A dark, heavy, heartbreaking opening screen. Seems like this will tell us many things. I like it. Okay, you catch my attention. You have great ideas. I like it Your novel is written well. You did well in choosing the best words for explaining your ideas I hope, we, readers will be given much more trivial detail about the era or culture used by your characters/peoples, so readers will easily digest your story.
The novel intrigued me after the first chapter. The description of what's happening was vivid that compelled me to keep reading. There's a mixture of hilarity and a touch of espionage. You can relate with the character's thoughts. I am excited to see how the story unfolds. Keep going author!
Just from reading the synopsis I'd say she sounds like a tragic princess type. I'll have to actually read it to see, but I like your synopsis, because it's a pretty good attention grabber. 👍
The story had a great gripping beginning. The female lead shines through the initial chapters. You will definitely call in love with her. Awaiting more chapters to find where the story is heading. P.S. don't shut the book after reading first chapter. As you move on it comes even better 😊 Good job author 👍
As of chapter 19, it is difficult to predict how the plot would proceed but I am sure it will be good. The writing is good with a few glitches here and there, but it can't be a bother to the engrossing chapters. Details and description are to the point. Each chapter leads you to wanting more, wondering what will happen next. Overall a must read for romance lovers. Although I think that if you expand your synopsis a bit, the readers will have a more accurate view of what to expect from story. Keep writing 👍
You got at your synopsis, the name gives nothing away about the story which makes one want to find out what the story is about. Living for it.
I love how you potray the events smoothly and details. Make your characters more alive with adverb. You've done a well job👍 keep improving and update more.
The story has an interesting plot. The pacing is also good. I feel like I'm watching movies based on its transitions. I'm halfway through the available chapters. It's been a roller coaster. It becomes calm then, it intensifies. This happened several times and it's a good mix. The beginning scenes are just right to capture a reader's attention and the rest of it just makes you want to keep going to know what happens next. The main character works for the government. I liked that. I hardly see any stories with that line of work. It's a dangerous job—especially for people with righteous hearts. There's a lot of emphasis on the hard drive. I'm starting to become skeptical to how big of a deal it is. It could be anything but with that kind of build up, I sincerely hope the author delivers. It could make or break the story. I have this in my library! I'm looking forward to the rest. Have a good day!
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