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Review is a part of review swap with this author. I really like this story, the MC is cool, his cheat is awesome and the way the author gradually reveals the world building is better! 10/ 10 would recommend. My problems with the story start here. Author, WTF is with ch. 1?! The MC is a autistic genius who could not handle a normal job with a salary, so he got into drugs and alcohol and somehow became a crazy criminal? He started kidnapping, smuggling and later on, murdering when on drugs and alcohol? Man, autism is real, autists exist in society and the prologue seems to be written as a hate letter to them! And the worse thing is that the MC's crazed personality in ch. 1 never reappears again in-story! Suggestion: scrub everything in ch.1 before he meets the Goddess and gets his cheat the fuck out. Let his past life be a complete mystery. Story will get 10x better.
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The overall story is nice and interesting, but the story-telling needs improvement. XD 😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😉😐😉😉😉😬😬😬😬😬😬😬😬😬😬😬😬😡
Okay so now I've read it. I find the story interesting and your writing quality is also fine but what actually needs stability is story development. Anyway the background is so-so. The cover is also something that intrigues me! It's not my genre but as i've to swap review that's why I read it!anyway dun forget to review mine.
*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters* Constructive Criticism: "Oh! God! Sis Mesa, if you've got to scare me please do it before warning me." I want to know... is this a weird form of sarcasm in which you meant exactly what was said, or did you mean to say "Oh! God! Sis Mesa, if you've got to scare me please warn me first."? Positive Feedback: Good job thus far on keeping your readers updated on what's going on w/ updates, and when nothing was, on keeping updated. Also, you are doing a good job at your story thus far. Personal Feedback: This is not my kind of story, thus I won't be continuing to read it, I apologize and hope you continue this story for those who enjoy it.;,;. Score: WQ 4/5 Rest 5/5
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I like how interesting this story is. Although I feel like it lack some emotions in it. But aside from that it's really good! Keep up the good work 😁
Just started this novel and I already love it! It was my friend who recommended this novel, and I realized after reading a chapter, why he was so fond of your creation. Also, just wanted to say... I loved the plot, so never stop it! And, I did read the description... Good luck for your exams bro 🙂
I read your book Wandering. As I read it, I felt like it was more telling rather than showing. The story sounds interesting, but I had a hard feeling the character's emotion.
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