/ Anime & Comics / One Piece: Nemo's Golden Lottery
概要
The story of a guy who ended up in the world of One Piece. As a bonus, he received the Golden Lottery, in which he can win almost anything from the worlds of the omniverse.
To buy lottery tickets, the MC will have to work hard, because the more he uses the lottery, the more expensive the next ticket will cost.
Watch the life of a guy in this wonderful and dangerous world, while he has the advantages of different worlds, which at times are too unfair.
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This is my side story that I wrote to take a break from the main story, so don't expect too many updates.
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Main story: https://www.webnovel.com/book/alexander-benjamin-tennyson_21838734606164605
My patr*eon: https://www.patreon.com/zeckyll11
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I don't know English at all, so I use Google Translate for translation, so there is no point in complaining about the grammar, but in the future I will try to find an editor like on the main story.
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The beginning is very decent and I like the main character and his way of thinking. Let's see what happens in the future, but for now I'm looking forward to the next chapters. Nice to see the work of my countryman on this site!!!!
new work of the author, very good start, the mc is persistent and not a weakling, and based on the prologue the story will be good, as I'm following your other story this one will be a fine addiction to my library!
so much monologue..so much unnecessary info.. repetition of many lines... if above things can be improved then story will become more fluent and more interesting..
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Grammar is alright with some mistakes. Grammar is alright with some mistakes. Grammar is alright with some mistakes. Grammar is alright with some mistakes. Grammar is alright with some mistakes. Grammar is alright with some mistakes. Not the best I’ve read but it’s still not bad at the same time, just needs to fix the flow of the dialogue and the character’s personality when talking to the Mc.
I tried reading this I really did but author chill with the info dumping. Reading this feels like a textbook almost with a ton of sticky notes with thoughts written on them. Like a whole chapter with hundreds of words was just a monolog or explaining night wing and Emma frosts abilities. Giving info is good but once I feel like I have to skim and skip to not be bored to death it's way too much. so in all if you love reading text books definitely but if you like to analyze yourself and watch the action instead of skimming through piles of info then you won't like it.
The MC is very hypocritical and annoying. His monologues are long and irritating. He thinks he's better than everyone else, when clearly he just depends on a system to get stronger. In a world dominated by greed, corruption, slavery, superior forces, etc., he wants to be the guy with the highest morals. He doesn't like to kill... well, I don't mind that, Luffy himself prefers to avoid it. The problem with the MC is treating everything from a very simple point of view for someone who is living a second life and has experiences of other people.
well this should be more dc or marvel than a omniverse lottery lol................................................................................................
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I'm a fan of both this author's stories. I think the writing itself is great but that makes the subpar grammar stand out more. Some advice I've given to authors like you that use google translate is to look into programs like grammarly, the premium version would help you tremendous because if you improve the grammar of your stories I feel like they would grow even more popular. Something I should note is that the premium version is $30 and I know that's a lot but you have a Patreon so a $30 investment might increase the number of patreons you have, it's up to you but I highly recommend looking into it.
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Very nice story I first thought that this will be a tipical system story but I'm happy i was wrong, i love the conspiracys and how characters that we don't know a lot are given a role even if is more on the background so... Please don't drop
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So far I love it!!! The idea is not new, but I like your approach. Keep up the good work and don't give up!!! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]