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(One of the best stories you can find in this platform!)
Yeman Talisman was bullied by his classmates and framed by his best friend in his high school days. One night, an incident occurred, which he rescued his ex-girlfriend from a drug organization syndicate. Too bad with his bad luck he got killed, when he opened his eyes again, he found himself in a different world? With a gaming-like system! Let’s find out what will happen to him in this world of fantasy. What if he finds out that his old classmates were the heroes of this new world and their leader was none other than his old best friend who framed him not only once, but twice?
They got summoned here through a magic circle unlike him!
What will happen when the system and magic clash?!!!
(Yeman made a promise to himself, that the next time their path cross, he will teach them true despair.)
Together with his pets, he will build his clan and rise to power!
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I love how the story goes. The development at first is a bit shaky. At first I thought the MC is too OP but as the story progressed it shows stability and balance. It is also my second favorite next to chrysalis(of course because it is FREE and not to mention the story is good as well). I would love to see it not in premium in the future or if it will I wish the quality stays the same or even became better.
IT is a very interesting start, The way the main character first gets his game system is interesting and I'm happy for once, that the girl isn't a complete scumbag like in most stories. The grammar is strange in places, but you can tell this is from someone who's English is their second language and it's great and still readable and enjoyable.
very stable with updates, and to be honest it is a good story. HOWEVER , the writing is a bit funky, and grammer is pretty bad. not to the point it's unreadable , it can be enjoyed with a bit of effort. mc starts out horribly stupid however, and honestly the first 10 chapters will likely give you an aneurysm. character decisions do improve though. highly suggest Author find an editor though, it honestly the biggest thing holding this back.
an other one fell to the greed of absurd privilege. 50e to unlock all privilege (for only one month, while still needed to unlock each chapter. it's sad since I enjoy the story.
Sigh...The MC is stupid i really want him dead and change the character i just read up to chapter 140 and i cant continue anymore..The only thing i like is the writing quality and nothing else. bruhhh.. just bruhhh.. bruhhh..bruhhh
Not a bad way to pass time but not even 5 chapters in we see the first plothole. I decided to review after reading all the free chapters out currently and that isn't the only issue, so many things are just never explained like how the MC's main class went from unarmed to cultivator or when he upgraded it from apprentice to silver rank. The series is called my magical system but the system is actually called the soul system that uses soul energy and he is a Cultivator not a magician.
I am so very tiring of reading the works of authors who abandons their readers by not finishing their work. NOTE TO WEBNOVEL: A work is not "COMPLETED" JUST BECAUSE AN AUTHOR STOPS SUBMITTING NEW CHAPTERS. pLEASE ADD A NEW CATEGORY "abandoned" TO WARN READERS.
Nah I didn't like it It's kind of strange the stupidity of the protagonist even though he proclaims himself to be smart and he said he was a gamer but he doesn't act like someone who has a brain not to mention that the writing is kind of confusing since you can't understand when it's a thought and when it's a speech and also the protagonist talks while fighting so you lose a sense of time just like when you're having movement in fights it's hard to understand what they're doing as you mention some things that happened in the fight after the action was done
Idk if this has fake reviews because of the ammount of spam, but so far, this is the novel that I'm looking foreword to the most. Though the novel is cliche, the way that things are done are just too perfect. I heard if this gets into top 10 you'll release twice a day? I'll support the novel.
I've read 20 chapters and in those chapters the MC remains a simp and he doesn't even know how to use attribute points. Worst experience reading 😭
Not gonna lie your grammer is trash and you should probobly fix that but besides that you should also be more in depth about topics like when he lit the candel he mentions he has a sister but thats something that should have been mentioned when you introduced us to the uncle not on ch 40 Besides that you have a really Good idea it is like a 7/10 right now but if you could fix the grammer and plot holes its a 9/10 if not 10/10 story
This is a dumpster fire I have no there words to describe the butchery of an already butchered language I made it past the first chapter hoping it would get better but gave up halfway though the second when it got unbearable
Dear author, I so wanna start reading the book, however, that 'taking a break' bugs me so annoyingly. I don't wanna be left on cliffhangers, so please start UPDATING it ASAP!!! thankin' you.
At first i dropped this book twice but after that it started get affect me and i couldn't stop, You could hate some certain FL's but they become cuter later on, But it was a waste that they couldn't get enough time there is a serious harem potential here but its lacking apart from that mc was very stupid at first but he becomes better later on story and he was similar to certain mc that i couldn't remember his name but better version of it and i didn't mind grammar too much since i'm a person that not too great with grammars myself and My biggest complaint is chapters comes too slow ):
meh, Grammer could use help. The titles even have issues. Jumps around, tried to make good jokes but doesn't translate at all and things sometimes are kinda forgot or not followed up on. like a monster is killed for level up but he does level up or he is suddenly level 10 after alot of travel filler.
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most cring book I've ever read and not that much on this app but I've read a but load of books................................................
It was good to see that Yeman was able to adapt to the system right away, but I guess it felt like he accepted the matter too easily? Also, Yeman's character is not established, like he has no prominent traits except for his occasional raging. Also, his history with Marie was quite abruptly narrated. This history has a bearing in the story, so I was hoping that it could be described a tad more confusing. I guess the first three chapters will be confusing if the reader doesn't know that the MC was transmigrated. I appreciate the detailed action scenes which compensates for the short chapters. I love Mina, by the way. She's feisty and such a badass! The pacing of the story is just right, but I think that the MC's improvements as a player was too slow in the beginning. Then suddenly, his growth became exponential. It's kind of following the usual progression of a transmigration light novel. :( He doesn't use his resources wisely and keeps on being saved by his teammates. [I'm really sorry for saying these mean things. I just want you to improve as an author, along with me too! ] There are a myriad of grammatical mistakes. (Sorry if I'm going technical) However, note that grammatical mistakes are easy to correct. We all make this mistake, so don't worry about it. Incorrect verb tenses, misuse/absence of punctuation marks are the majority of these. I'll be cheering you on! You clearly have a good world background. I hope that these criticisms will motivate you to do better. Remember that nobody is perfect, as all things should be. We should always find a way to improve! Please continue writing this art of yours!
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The way this story starts is quite confusing as the change in MC is way too extreme be his personality, power or anything else. After that the story becomes stable and is going in a good direction. Updates are slow. There is almost description regarding the world or the power levels involved. The struggle of MC is real as he didnt inherit memories of new body so looking forward to it
this novel has been stuck at the 300 chapters range for like 4 years, the author is lazy and dont finnish his novels/ .>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
Hi, author here. I’m not shameless. This story is one of the best stories on this platform. Go read and see it for yourself. Though, don’t come ranting if it isn’t to your liking. Every person has his/her preferences. The thing you dislike can be the thing like by others.