Hello, there is a few problem that came from the lack of writing experience.First make sure to separate two different persons who talk also better use "" Ex:Jack (hello) natsumi (hello)ToJack : "Hello"Natsumi : "Hello"Also use gramarly or chatgpt or anything to check the text. Good luck with the following story.
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Hello, there is a few problem that came from the lack of writing experience.First make sure to separate two different persons who talk also better use "" Ex:Jack (hello) natsumi (hello)ToJack : "Hello"Natsumi : "Hello"Also use gramarly or chatgpt or anything to check the text. Good luck with the following story.