/ Anime & Comics / MHA: Reborn as Denki Kaminari
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follows the path of our mc as he tries to get to the apex of power as Kaminari Denki
This is my first series so please don't complain if it's not to your liking. I would gladly accept helpful criticism to help me improve the writing quality
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Since all authors give 5 stars to their own work I'm going to do the same just because I can 😂😂😂 I'm new to this fanfic writing thing and english is not my main lenguage I have help from a translator app, so please leave your honest opinions especially about my writing
Well, the protagonist looks like a Chinese all the time mentioning how great and powerful he is, unlike the extras And what is the point of being the most powerful? just to feel superior because you should have chosen another world
Muito bom!!! Fico há espera de mais, tem potencial. Espero que acrescentes a habilidade de killua de hunterxhunter ( god of speed) as habilidades de kaminari, aumenta todas as sua capacidades fisicas, e o melhor não tem limite. ( quanto mais eletricidade o corpo aguentar, mais poder o god of speed tem,)
We know absolutely nothing about the main character besides the fact that in his previous life he "has friends and family". We also know the absolute bare minimum about anyone in his new life, we don't even have his parents names, or his teachers names or anyone unless they are a named character from mha... and the character just starts training his life away to become a top hero at the ripe old age of 4! We aren't really told anything about his aspirations besides some shallow "If you aren't strong enough you shouldn't be a hero." And I have a pet peeve about one scene in particular, how can a ten year old little girl ever, EVER be "seductive"? You come off as a pedo trying to hook up a ten year old with your ten year old self insert, and its just weird.... I think you have a lot you can improve, and there is a lot of potential in Kaminari but you kind of just throw away any personality or character the mc could have to just train his quirk and make him "super smart and strong".
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