What a beautiful world the author has set up for us so far! The descriptions are so detailed, I can't help seeing play out like a movie in my mind.
I think introducing the reader to action right away was definitely a good move for this novel. It allows you to have an immediate taste of what's going to unfold as the story goes along.
Please keep up the action going forward! I have high expectations based on the first chapter.
My only critique is breaking up some of the longer descriptive paragraphs in the beginning.
Good luck
What a beautiful world the author has set up for us so far! The descriptions are so detailed, I can't help seeing play out like a movie in my mind. I think introducing the reader to action right away was definitely a good move for this novel. It allows you to have an immediate taste of what's going to unfold as the story goes along. Please keep up the action going forward! I have high expectations based on the first chapter. My only critique is breaking up some of the longer descriptive paragraphs in the beginning. Good luck