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What will happen when one day you come across a mysterious cave and when you go in and come out only you are the one who remembers? your family tells you you are a magic and psychic power wielder ? Join Max and his friends on their adventurous journey!!!
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Okay so if you want a summary of the story so far I'll just say that it's amazing...it's funny and the plot is developing steadily...I spend all my power stones so far on this book cuz it's too good and I'll be waiting for your updates
The story is interesting and it flows steadily and naturally. Nice pacing! Although, there are some grammar issues, but it is overshadowed by interesting plot and funny humor. Good job! Just don’t stop and keep writing better and better!
Great job author. I like the story very much. Well done! Can't wait for the next chapter to be released! I am sure you will do very well if you do not give up.
There are few errors of punctuation that could confuse readers but I gave it a five star review instead. Why? Because I think that the author could improve more. The first chapter is intriguing and good job author for writing it.
Many edits has to be made author. There are sentences that doesn't start with capital letters. Dialogues are not starting with capital letters too and does not end with comma (if an active convo) or period (if the end of convo) or punctuations or question marks. You have a nice story and I hope you will put efforts to edit it. Peace ✌️ I don't want to be critical though but maybe you need my suggestions. 😉