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A jumpchain multiverse exploration story. Where the main character will be travelling world to world across different popular media.
This is my first foray into fiction writing. Especially long form story telling, so I apologize for the quality and hopefully I'll get better.
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I only got to chapter 6 and had to call it quits on the fact it's less of a story and more of a brief description of what's happening. The pokemon fights aren't even explained it's just 'the gym was focused on rock so with my plant and water it was an easy win' not going into detail to explain the fights. All in all it reads like I'm reading the MC's daily diary.
Hi, First of all i want to say that the new vantage point you give to the readers, feels like an extremely fresh picture, i enjoy a lot reading it. I had read like 15 Fan Fictions (transmigration, reincarnation, World traveling etc...) that had Excelent Reviews and a lot of views, but the one that I had enjoyed the most is this. Just keep your way to see the things; because you're amazing
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Oh boy, well the story is ok, the writing style is a bit more in the way of tell not show at least in the first few arks. some arcs are realy short others like the Avatar ark are extremely drawn out. The quality gets better the longer you read but I'm gonna be honest most of the travels don't realy feel that fun except for the pokemon one and that one was very short, it's more like The mc thoes a Job or something that he does not realy enjoy. So why even travel? why not go back when you are not realy having fun? The GOT Arc was a work ark The Academia ark was a Punishment ark Avatar was again more or less just work from start to finish, shure he gets stronger and all but he still feels weak and he lacks purpose for gaining this power. like I said the MC doesn't seem to have fun at all, and I don't have fun reading about this then, it's like someone tells you about his workday, it's at best interesting but not realy entertainment. So yeah is the writing quality good? Yes it is. But did I enjoy the story as a whole? sadly not really, the MC lacks fun and motivation to do what he does, like it is now it seams pointless to me.
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This story is really good in some aspects, and really quite bad in others. For the good things: The grammar and spelling is pretty much perfect, and scenes are written in a way that you can easily understand and visualise what's going on. The premises and plot threads of each jump were really interesting (except for the pokemon world, which was rather bland, but even that had the cool idea of megastones being compared to evolution stones and being made permanent at the end). I mean, kicking the humans out of the far north and repopulating the giants, freeing Kurogiri from his mind control and becoming his apprentice, kidnapping Azula and swapping her role with Zuko's, all of these are top tier ideas. (I didn't read the Mass Effect arc since I never played the game and didn't see the point in powering through it since it was the last arc, anyway). The background worlds are very consistent with the canons', and have reasonable and well thought out outcomes in relation to the butterflies of the mc. There are lots of chapters, which is always a good thing. For the bad things: This gets better as the story goes on, but at the start the story is very very rushed. It feels more like the outline to the story rather than reading an actual story at times. This problem started to get better during the mha arc and was pretty much gone during the avatar arc, though. The second problem, I think is related to the first. The mc has no personality. During the first arcs, everything was more like a summary of what the mc did without exploring his mindset while doing it, or showing his conversations with others. Then, because of this, when the quality started to improve, there was no personality to build off of so he turned out super boring. In the mha world, it's like he's acting professionally all the time. In the avatar world, it's a little better, but still pretty bad. Like, even though there's romance, it's more like "by the way, we're dating now" than any sort of flirting or blushing or exploring their feelings or, well, anything, really. So, yeah. Good in some aspects and bad in others, but imo the good outweigh the bad and the bad slowly get better as the story goes on.
I really enjoy this story and i wish that there were more Jumpchains that are this well written, it doesn’t start off the best, but when you get your momentum it really improves. Keep up the good work.
La historia esta buena pero tiene 2 cosas muy molestas 1. Las charlas no están marcadas y aveces no sabes quien dijo que 2. Aveces entre relatar algo como un suceso pasa directamente a como si estuviera diciendo el futuro no hay forma de identificar cuando de un monólogo de pensamiento salta a una descripción de salto de tiempo Estas dos cosas hicieron que la lectura fuera difícil aveces estaba leyendo y resultó muy errático, sería bueno tener en cuenta
although there are a few typos and grammatical errors that make me a little irritated/lost the story itself is good and the author is improving at his storytelling rapidly compared to the start. the ATLA arc is my favorite so far! Keep up the good work Author-Sama!~
I'm kinda stuck here, I want to rate it lower because most of it is not that great, but the avatar arc just seems really good. If I was a reasonable person, I would wait for more to rate it, but I'm not that patient. Hopefully the quality keeps up. One thing that's great (maybe perfect, I skipped a lot), is the grammar and spelling. Too many stories just hurt to read with authors that have a grossly insufficient knowledge and/or experience of English. No one should have any problems trying to understand what the author is trying to convey, which I appreciate.
Cthulhu approved, jokes aside is an amazing story love the story telling a little like a dairy and kinda of boring in the beginning buuuuut trust me it gets way but just tough it out for a few chapters. summon Cthulhu "Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn!" somnia aeternae vocare possit aeternam tenebrarum obscurum. ut omnes moriuntur magnificentiam aeternae adorare.
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Really good chapters. And story. I really like this story.Really good chapters. And story. I really like this story.Really good chapters. And story. I really like this story.
Nice chapter. Cant wait to read more chapters author. 140 Words. 140 Words.140 Words. 140 Words.140 Words. 140 Words.140 Words. 140 Words.140 Words. 140 Words.
Great to see the update. Cant wait to read more chapters. 140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.140 Words.
Another good chapter. Really good chapter. Cant wait to read more.Another good chapter. Really good chapter. Cant wait to read more.Another good chapter. Really good chapter. Cant wait to read more.
I cant wait to read more. Really nice author.I cant wait to read more. Really nice author.I cant wait to read more. Really nice author.I cant wait to read more. Really nice author.I cant wait to read more. Really nice author.
I was gonna rate it 3.5 stars, but the quality DRASTICALLY improves from the MHA arc and it becomes very good! The first arcs are a bit written like a diary, which is weird, but at the MHA arc, the writing style completely changes!