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I get transported into the world of Harry Potter I am going to become the most powerful and influential wizard of the time.
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Top notch premise with a unique main character. Can’t say much more without spoiling the small surprise. But great fanfic 10/10 would recommend
The novel is very well written and didn't saw any incorect words or grammar, The story develop fast but in a good way. All I want to say is just read it and you won't regret.
It's not that the story is bad. The problem lies in the fact that there are no facts. The first 2 chapters are a whole lot of PLOT ARMOR. He needs money? Hey, there is someone running a dice game and he just happens to be carrying around 50K pounds for MC to win it... how convenient! Honestly, the whole thing hit me with a sense of disbelief. I believe the guy isn't dead but in a coma where he is having this unreal dream. If that is true, my rating should be higher but if not... this needs a redo. Funny enough, the grammar isn't that bad, just a few misspelled and wrong word choices here and there.
Idea was good but execution was poor First few chapters makes it clear it won't go far. Too much plot armour like Ownership of so many houses, an 11 year old kid made 50k by gambling and Its like reading a summary I did this and That and also too few words.
It's too rushed. There are tons of hp fanfic so if ur gonna make a hp fanfic you have to make sure you do it right and not just make into a template.
Сначала скажу плюсы которые я смог найти , а затем ввделю минусы. Мне очень понравилось то, что герой это Волан Де Морта, и все его владия и силы. Он не слабак который каждый избивает и всловестной перепалкк мажет дать сдачи, что хорошо. История в целом интересная , хотя временами автор куда то спешит и повествование получается скомканным. Из минусов выделю моральную слабость главного героя. Мне очень бесит как он получает свой гарем. Он приходит к человеку, предлагает ему заработать огромные деньги или помочь в его деле( оборотни), эти люди не только как ьы нехотя на это соглашаются , но еще и ставят ему блять условия. Требуют от него чего то, а он как полный слабак даже не может им отказать. Из-за этого главный герой выглядит как бесхребетная размазня, у которой нет никакой гордости. Меня очень бесит, как его девушки его шпыняют и ставят себя как бы выше него. Я понимаю, что это некотороя комедийная составляющая, но это самый тупой и плоский юмор из существующих. Хоть и хорошее произведение в целом ,но некоторый элементы просто портят от него настроение и желание чмть практически пропадает.
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I have read other work from the author and it is very unique amongst other Fan-fic and I like it but there are some grammatical errors here and there but nothing major. The story progresses a bit fast and the character growth is a bit slow I hope that the Author could squeeze in more chapters. And could flesh out the character more.
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I think the author is deleting bad reviews or something cause the grammar is horrible, the dialogue is horrible, the characters feel off, nothing has detail, it feels like there are parts of the story missing and there's just so much bs in it.
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I've read a lot of HP fanfics. But this one has got all the things which others lacked. The ML is OP with bloodline, but has to work hard regarding magic and all. The relationships are really good, well can't expect more when the ML is just 12-13. The Harem is also coming along smoothly. I suggest this novel to people who like HP and also like romance.
I like the fan-fic it is very enjoyable if you suspend your disbelief and just enjoy where it is going if you just want a fun fan fic this is a good one.
honestly terrible. writing quality: 1 its horrendous. wrong words are used constantly. grammar and punctuation are also terrible. author shortens names to things like prof, voldy, ect. and it feels like ur reading a draft. story development: way to fast paced, there's nothing entertaining just plot. but terrible plot. incredibly unrealistic. its like a 5 year old got sudden inspiration and had to jot all his ideas down as fast as possible. character design: conservation is bland and boring, the characters are like robots without emotion. its like they try to micic humans but fail. I'd not be surprised if a lizard wrote this.
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