Hollywood RE:CODED

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junfriday

First of all, allow me to apologize for the low rating (61 reviews before mine and not a single bad reviews? You have to forgive me to be the first). The normal me would usually go full force on rant and rage in rewiew and comment section with this quality of writing but because I've been so hopeful of having more contemporary, non-Eastern Asian MCs and settings like this so much and the fact that the author has so far been maintaining a healthy stability of updates, I thus decided to give a rare constructive criticism where not only would I specify what's so bad about the story, but also to give reasons why and to offer some suggestion (to my best knowledge). Before we begin, I'd mention general mistakes that you might also found in this story: 1) bland dialogues; where the conversation just doesn't sound real except in Anime 2) lots of 'telling' and severe lacks of 'showing'; "show don't tell" is a rule of thumb that must be taught to every emerging writers where instead of just informing what is happening, a writer must 'show' it because outright telling it is simply called info-dumping, not storytelling. 3) cringy characterizations; from the characters shown so far they are all made of cutout carbon whose personalities is just so unbelievable and too convenient to exist in real life All of these made up the story into something extremely unrealistic--so much for a story set in real life, modern day settings. For these mistakes, however, I can't give much input because I'm an inexperienced writer myself and believe these kinds of mistakes are something that can only be mend with more experiences and self-learnings, so good luck for author with this. Now, I'll start discussing aspects in the story that I found to be simply too much incorrect and shows nothing but author's clear lack of research in a lot of things. FIRST MISTAKE: Hope Institute Orphanage. This is the name of the orphanage where MC grew up. I'm aware that this is a fictionalized orphanage. What is wrong with it is the fact that U.S doesn't actually run traditional orphanage system, they've abolished it since late 19th century and by mid 20th century any orphanage in the US shoud have gone extinct. What they run instead is called foster care system. In traditional orphanage system, any orphans with no relatives or family friends willing to adopt them would be placed in the orphanages and lived there until potential adoptive parents make a visit and decide to adopt any of them. Meanwhile in foster care system they believe that children is better placed directly into a new family in a private house. So for orphans who just lost their parents and aren't directly adopted by their relatives or family friends, they'll temporary live in with foster parents in their foster families' houses until (1) a legible ***** decided to permanently adopt them, or (2) they turned 18 by which the foster parents fulfilled their fostering obligation and the young adults would then be asked to live independently. Actually there are foster cares that operate quite like an institution, like treatment facilities for children with mental problems or clinically disabled, or Children's Houses--where a foster parents take in quite a number of mostly "unwanted, problematic children" (I mean zero offense and I blame the imperfect system for letting those children's life sadly spiraling down out of control), one of the worst type of foster homes where any children in the system would hope not to be placed in. For your information, the vast majority of children being taken care in the foster care system actually aren't orphans; they're either children protected by CPS from parental abuses, parental neglect, children kicked out of their families, etc. Many orphans in U.S. would usually ended up being adopted by their relatives or family friends, those aren't adopted by them would spend just little time in the foster care before the agency found parents that are willing to adopt them on permanent basis because orphaned children are generally seen to be "non-problematic". Infants, especially, are of the most popular to be adopted by parents wanting to adopt children because the adopting parents can rise them from so little and innocent. Actually, some of those institutionish-run houses are even using the name "Orphan" or "Orphanage" but most of the children living there are those abused, abandoned, or drugs addicted and needing help instead of orphans. So yeah, if MC exists in real life, he would have been living with his adopted parents since a baby instead of in institution like orphanage. Also yeah, Hunting Hollywood's MC who was written to have lived in orphanage before going to Stanford (iirc) is a result of author's ignorance too. On a side note, Hope Institute really exists in U.S., it's actually an academy for children with disabilities (like autism or clinical disabilities). (I feel it is quite injustice that I don't write more about the foster care, especially the bad aspects of it but since it is already past my intended point, those who are interested can just google it). SECOND MISTAKE: Serializing stories in L.A. Times. I know in some countries almost every major newspaper actually has a special column to publish fictional works, but in U.S. that is not the case. In U.S., paper media that do publish fictions are only literature/cultural newspapers or magazines (with The New Yorker magazine being arguably the number one dream choice of many writers). L.A. Times never publishes fictional stories. Also, serializing the stories in paper media is such a roundabout way if your aim is just to secure the copyright of your writing. You could simply write them in standard screenplay format and register them for protection in Writers Guild of America (the process is instant, but the validity is just for 5 years however you could always renew them easily) or you can directly mail them (even just the draft version of your story) to U.S. Copyright Office (the process takes time--usually 6 to 12 months--but the duration is lifetime [70 years in general, easily extended if you're still alive when it expires, or depending on its significance your family members can extend it even long after your death]). THIRD MISTAKE: Works in publishing industry and people's reactions make zero sense. He became an instant, debuting, best-selling children's book author by the tender age of 10, yet no mention of press interview request at all, and he could remain so "low-key" to the point that he could succesfully hide his identity despite no confidential agreement mentioned with the publising house or the people from L.A. Times who know of him. Dude this is supposed to be international bombastic news and the media people acted such incompetently that I had to pull my hair repeatedly to remain sane at how off-handedly author deal with this situation. Then... Jurrassic Park book happened. Jurrassic Park novel, if you've ever read it, is so heavily immersed in its biotechnology discussion concerning genetics and DNA that no mentally healthy person who have read the book would ever believe it is written by a ten year old kid, yet it just happened... just like that... and people directly involved with him and knew of his identity never casted any kind of doubt and this one character even went as far as laughing at someone who was amazed by the book because this someone didn't know it was written by a kid like nothing's wrong if a kid even capable of writing that... I... I... am trying to contain my rant so I decide to stop here. I haven't read much into this novel nor I plan to continue from where I left off (10 chapters are already too much for my mind), but the short amount of chapters I read already allowed me to know that this story is just like your regural original stories/fanfics from this site where the new emerging author is actually channelling himself as MC living the author's wet dream as supremely gifted capable of doing absolutely anything and everything in the most perfect and unrealistic way possible with all the girls of all ages attracted to him in the most convenient and unrealistic way possible, while the storytelling itself has lots and lots of works needed to be done to make it worthy to be called an actual story instead of journal-like infodump like it is now. It is disparaging but I hope author can improve his writing quality in his next works. Given his work ethic shown by his stability of updates so far I'm willing to believe he'll always improve himself in the future.

LV 12

AsianLadyBoy

I was really enjoying this at the start. The Hollywood stuff was good, the business management stuff was good and even the slow romance start was good. Unfortunately for some reason, the author decided to take a hard left turn with his story and start focusing on other things than what people want to read about. The MC starts to hang out with friends more and it just turns into a slice of life with sprinkles of information of his business dealings and showbiz work. The author even decided to throw in some supernatural stuff into the story. By that point, you start to wonder whether or not you are even reading the same story you started with. I found myself skimming a lot trying to find the showbiz/business stuff because everything else is not interesting at all. When it comes to the romance stuff. In enjoyed the development with the first girl to confess to him but he rejected her. And his first girl he loses his V-card to is some random 17yold wanna-be actress from Europe. But she also rejects him. And he gets all mad and screams at her, then quickly apologizes. It just does not feel good at all. You just don't care about the characters he adds in to the story. It's not interesting and he forces a lot of things that just don't fit and makes you just want to skip all of those parts. If the Author kept it 80% showbiz/business management and 20%romance than this story for me would have been a 4+* book all day. And that's how it was at the start it really had me readying every chapter and not skipping or skimming any of them because it was interesting reading on how he was becoming the best in showbiz and in business. But it eventually stops being that, and the pace of the story slows down. It starts to make you think that it's a slice of life now with some showbiz stuff in it. The character design and story development as well as the world background building takes a huge nose dive as soon as the story starts to go all over the place. I was really enjoying it, and it sucks that I stopped enjoying it. But for me now this novel has lost its "Fun" factor. I no longer enjoyed reading it, it felt like a chore having to do so. And for that, I give this story a 2.8*.

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BukanOrang

Hello, Shameless Author here giving a 5 star review to my own work just like giving myself a BJ. But regardless of that, I think I want to make my own kind of novel which the MC reborn into past and become a richman. So many this kind of genre appeared untranslated wheter because copyright problem or not. But I see the author I'm In Hollywood made another novel Hunting Hollywood which I see no problem anyway. Also if you kind enough leave a review, I prefer good one but someone said that what artist fear is not bad review but none review at all.

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Sage_of_Heaven

Keep up the great work and I hope you could maintain or improve your novel quality in the future. Lastly be safe and stay awesome 👍 👍 👍 👍

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DORAEMON_2V

author can you give us a litte 18+ or his harem development i think you ignore their relationship just add development in his girls that has crush on him don't be simp you're a reincarnator lol

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Mustifa_89

İts very good story i like it .

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adil_6022

I read like this novels before but ussually all of them going to be a trash. But this novel have a potential and I feel that author make this novel amazing.

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Otled

there isn't much chapters to really review this novel but i want to support the author since im liking the story so far, the writing quality is also good so i hope you guys give it a chance. thank you again, keep it up.

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Bloodthirsty09

I just finished reading all the chapters and I must say I like your story very much, still there are some things that I must say :- 1.Dont give up on the novel and try to release more chapters in the beginning because many people don't read those stories which have less than 100 chapters. So keep at it and I am sure more people will pick up the story later. 2.Tone the flirting down a bit, I mean he doesn't need to flirt with every female he sees, looks like he is desperate... 3.I saw the harem tag, if you are thinking of making it harem I urge you not to because this is modern society and nobody really likes harem in modern society, shows that the MC is not loyal enough. 4.You are doing everything right apart form the things that I mentioned so keep writing and I assure you you will get more readers..

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kunichan

hello author! it's been a year of no update 😓😓😓

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Cristhian_Guerrero

Well, I can only say that I really liked this fanfic, it had very emotional parts and I would like to read the second volume of the story, but seeing how they haven't updated anything for 6 months it's unlikely to continue. In short, I liked it a lot and I would like it to continue.

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Barukhant

Me gusta mucho este libro, fueron estraños los capitulos de fantasmas pero es genial el desarrollo del personaje, usas eventos de hollywood sin hacer al personaje un esclavo del dinero y el exito, este MC tiene mucha vida social lo que hace fascinante la historia, en conclucion creaste una novela increible.[img=exp][img=coins]

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NotYourCat

this is a good story, but if you come here for the harem tag... you can read my review first... 1. author said this story will never have harem ending (poligamy) so the harem is like what you got usually from anime like Nisekoi, haganai, oregairu, or something like that, MC will get many love interest but only choose one. usually harem tag in webnovel is placed for the story with harem ending, so I feel deceived with the tag here, morever when author answered my questionabout romance/harem development for the story... he answered it vaguely... 2. there will be Lesbian and Yuri of few female character that you can expect as romance interest... if you are someone like me who feel uncomfortable with this kind of development, that's means we are friend, lol... 3. well, defaming this story a bit... from the title of the book you will get what you expect, plagiating future work, and successing with that, repeat it, and repeat it... it's doesn't mean that repetitive is bad, it has it's own guilty pleasure in it... but repetitive plot still is repetitive plot... so that's it, if you someone like me who read for guilty pleasure of harem in real life, this story is not for you... if you someone who doesn't like to read about yuri, lesbian development of characters that you care, tis story is mot for you... but if you can accept what made me uncomfortable and come here for guilty pleasure of conquering entertainment industry but with repetitive plot, this story is for you...

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Navasu_69

I would like him to marry shakira in the near future[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Thaft

Mantap, akhirnya aku ketemu novel business kayak gini yang gak bikin pusing hehe, untuk kualitas penulisan sudah bagus menurutku, dan latar belakang cerita serta latar dunia juga sudah bagus, cuma kurang romance-nya saja, dan jika bisa, saya punya saran, bagaimana jika MC juga ikut ke dunia pembuatan anime & manga? Aku selama ini belum pernah ketemu novel business tentang anime & manga, hal itu bagus untuk bahan cerita, dan jika bisa lebih baik MC terjun ke dunia anime & manga setelah dia menyelesaikan urusannya di Amerika, juga lebih bagus lagi jika anda juga memasuki dunia Manhua & Manhwa (Webtoon) hahahaha, yah, yang terpenting selesaikan arc MC di Amerika terlebih dahulu. Kerja bagus author, semangat! Aku hanya bisa memberikan anda dukungan berupa Power Stone! -Eng : Great, finally I met a business novel like this that didn't make a headache, hehe, the quality of the writing was good in my opinion, and the story background and world setting were also good, just lacking romance, and if possible, I have suggestions, what if MC also joined the world of making anime & manga? So far, I have never met a business novel about anime & manga, it is good for story material, and if possible it would be better if the MC jumps into the world of anime & manga after he finishes his business in America, also great if you also enter the world of Manhua & Manhwa (Webtoon) hahahaha, well, the most important thing is to finish the MC arc in America first. Good job, author, cheer up! I can only give you support in the form of a Power Stone!

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Morganrd

Love it so far. Story itself, the background of mc, mc's himself all of it is good plus, the enviroment the mc is living is also nice but I just wish there would had beeen more details with the people that mc care's, friend with or more interactions with them at least. Keep it up.

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Zoodd

I see a lot of people complaining about scenes where the MC is hanging out with friends or something else unrelated to making money, in my opinion these scenes are great and help to see the protagonist as something more than a machine that only thinks about work, I loved this story and I look forward to the next volume 👍👍

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Acsmaster007

TELL ME WHY...........dont you update anymore ????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????

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Darith_Sky

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Acsmaster007

pretty decent one..... hope for a completed work...............👍👍👍👍👍👍[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🤟🤟🤟🤟🤟🤟👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏