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terrible grammar and spelling. he can't even use the correct names, duddlys instead of durslys lazy. concept could be good if had a competent author and no idea what all this Jacki Chan stuff is,makes no sense
Exagerou nos monólogos e coisas sem sentido. ..................................................................................................................................................
After reading the beginning chapters here's what I can give as a synopsis: A child born as the twin of Harry Potter, was cast aside by his family, the Potters, and ultimately ended up living as an orphan. Dumbledore himself even casting the child aside after forcefully consuming the boys life force to give it to Harry. Alone with nothing but a system and his previous knowledge of this world, the child will make his own way in the world of magic. (The system only seems to be there to give rewards exclusively so far)
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La idea esta bien, pero se omiten muchas cosas como las funciones del sistema, tiene afinidad con los animales pero ni siquiera aparece la interaccion con ellos y no explotas todo el potencial de ello y no hablemos de los hechizos y otras cosas que aprende y no se sabe de donde. Falta mucho contexto y profundidad de los personajes que parezcan tonto que se puedan manipular con cualquier cosa al azar. Recomiendo al autor que lea otros fanfics del mismo tema para inspirarse y ver lo que falta en su historia. Insisto que la idea del fanfic es buena, pero no está bien desarrollada, el mundo mágico en muy amplio y hay muchas cosas sobre su vida que no explicadas y parece demasiado superficial.
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a very interesting story I look forward to the continuation to see where it goes and to see if he gets all the 12 talismans
It's so bad that it make me want clean my eyes and brain with bleached and hope to never saw these fic again :). not recommended for you to read this
This was good. I enjoyed it honestly the writing isn’t the best but the content of the story is good however the way it worded make me feel like this was translated not written
this starts ok but it gets worse and worse the quality starts ok but it starts dropping to its like reading a badly translated MTL im dropping this after reading chapter 68
This is an average fic with spelling mistakes. There are some bad translations, for example jackie chan adventures talismans are called differently. The system it seems can do anything. We only learn that there is gatcha, shop and etc functions of the system as the story progress - it's bad writing. The main problem with this fic is too many rewards. We don't have time to process them and we receive yet another 3 rewards... I wouldn't say anything if the rewards weren't forgotten. For example the author forgets about a new template or the fact that he can absorb magical creatures and add them to his bloodline. Dude, MC gave the command to shadow creatures from jackie chan adventures to capture magical creatures, years later dude still didn't absorb a single magical creature...
The writing quality could not be worse if typed blindley on a phone. I would not say anything if some errors are made but this looks almost intentional. If you dont trust my words just read the first two chapters. If you dont want to scream by then maybe the story can be something for you.
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a total bs story for those masochist, it's total bs of how he didn't even want a revenge. Burn them alive, let animals ravage them, use all curses on them and after destroying everything about them and toying them for as long as they live, and even make contract with death and let them suffer even after death. Nobody should be spared be it Dumbledore, beast of parents, so called brother, and all those related to him, everybody. after getting it over with, live your life to fullest, find wives, have children and make good memories with them.
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I really love this novel, I hope the author can put a little more focus on the magical beasts though, swing as though he has a archdruid template but sees no use.
Overall, it's just plain wrong. I want to say a child wrote it. The writing is all over the place. There are so many spelling errors that it hurts to understand what was written. The story is one-dimensional. There is no character building. No background information. Only read if you can't find anything else to read. The one good thing is the chapter releases. At least for now, it averages 1 per day. Who knows how long that will last?
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Harem recommendation : damphne luna ,Hermione, fluer, tonks