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God? reincarnation? multiverse? what?! WTF god is spinning a roulette! Ding! congratulations! you can choose a world of your liking. Ding! lineage randomly chosen. Ding! time line randomly chosen. Ding! power/abilities randomly chosen. Good Luck!
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... the grammar is bad, there is no question about it... yes the author did attempt to use advanced vocabulary and grammar structures but they used it incorrectly which made it hard to overlook. I couldn't even finish the first chapter. I can never understand why authors refuse to use grammarly or an equivalent.
This gets very religious very fast and personally that makes this almost unreadable for me. also there are several spelling errors that while are funny like (Tom marvell riddle) make it harder to focus on the plot.
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Never seen a more idiotic HPversr story. It's so bad it can't even be called a parody.....an idiotic know it all MC ....who is literally 'Messiah'. Take care y'all who read it.
The overall story is very good, except for one fact. The MC family lineages here seems to be forced to me, it seems like the author wants every major characters in HP series to be connected to Ophis family. Anyway, I'll give the story five stars except for the World Background. Keep up the good work author! There is not many good HP series around here anymore
I cringed so hard reading this that I might actually have a headache now. A vain and 'pardon-my-french' retarted main character that the author so desperately wants people to think is actually interesting and charismatic, despite EVERY. SINGLE. DIALOGUE. saying otherwise. Awful vocabulary. Awful grammar. Awful pacing. Awful settings and extreme OOC from beloved characters. The only reason I even bothered leaving a review is because this work has a much higher rating then it deserves.
Its just dumb, lot of time spent just preparing for school, was supposed to be true Slytherin but asked to be in Ravenclaw, a bit boring and graphomanic
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5 stars for World Background. The story so far, character interactions, mc's companions/romance developements, grammar and magic theory are all meh
Love how the mc just exposes all of Dumbledores secrets to the world and screws him over lol ---------------------------------- - - - - - - -
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I started reading from chapter 29. It's an interesting story from that chapter. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
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Is it just hp or multiverse novel ? ........................................................................................................
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you have some potential. but you need to read more you make rookie mistakes and commit so many clichés it physically hurt to read your work. read 100 of the top harry potter fanfiction. plus the books again the attempt this again