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Lin Fan had been reborn into Douluo Dalu with a cheat called the Library of Heavens Path.
But he realized, that his Library of Heavens Path was very limited!
And what he first got was the Heavens Path Divine Art, nothing more and nothing less.
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English is not my first language, and I used the Translator App to convert it from Indonesian to English.
So, maybe a lot of sentences that look weird.
Of course, I'll try to edit it as best I can.
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I have read a lot of douluo fanfic on the china web because this is still new so I said give the big harem to mc hahahahahaha ...........................
You want a review from me? This FanFiction tells of Lin Fan who reincarnated into Douluo Dalu, with a cheat called Library of Heavens Path. However, his Library of Heavens Path was limited. It's not like any Library you've ever read, which has to collect and put all the books together first. But this library has provided all the perfect techniques from the start, it's just that they are limited in number. Yes, limited. So Lin Fan wouldn't get all the techniques from the start, but one by one when he reached Rank 10, 20, 30, and so on. Of course, the Library of Heavens Path's basic abilities were still there, as it was used to check all target information. Lin Fan's Martial Spirit was very simple, not a Beast, not a Weapon, not related to God, and not from another Animation. Yes, very simple, one of them is the Spirit Body. Is there romance? Of course there is, but you have to be patient. But don't expect Harem, because I don't really like stories that contain Harem. Well, even though I'm going to decide to make a Harem, I'm only making Lin Fan have 2 Heroines. Is the story good? I don't know, I just made up what was on my mind. At least, I tried to make everything that Lin Fan did to have a plausible reason. Then, is the MC Simp? You could say yes, and you could also say no. Maybe you will complain on the part: "Why didn't the MC save his mother from the start?" "Why doesn't the MC read all the books in the Heaven Dou Empire library?" "Why didn't the MC just train in Heaven Dou Empire?" "How can the MC give a little of his strength just because of Karma?" "Why was the MC careless and entered the Spirit Beast Forest with low cultivation?" Well, maybe you can read it first. If the explanations in each chapter weren't very satisfactory, I also have nothing more to say. And there may be many other complaints, such as: 1. Spirit Bones should only come from 1,000 year old Spirit Beasts. 2. The Red Spirit Ring must have two abilities. 3. The ability of a Spirit Beast is not like that. 4. Etc. Eh? What do you expect from FanFic? You want to compare a FanFict with the Original?
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I liked the earlier chapters of the novel(if a bit rough around the edges) but later on around chapter 45-50 it feels like it has become nothing but a comedy and that gets old really fast, so I'm going to drop it here.
Brother, have you considered publishing this story elsewhere? It can be questionable questing or fanfiction.net. Many will leave here, including me, and your story is one of the few things I don't want to leave xD, but I have no choice because I can't read properly due to the lack of a proper translator in the app.
A word of advice, that martial soul "spirit soul" in your previous version, does not seem logical to me. All martial souls are an extension of the soul. I recommend a neural type martial soul. There is already a character with a martial soul brain, but it only has a silver rating. I recommend a martial soul that encompasses the entire nervous system. Unless you're going to create an ultimate martial soul that powers every last molecule of his body. But I think it's better to have two powerful martial armalas, since you can absorb more rings. Then you can make each one evolve or even give them a spiritual fusion.
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honestly, I wish I had found this FF later than I did so I can binge more great beginning, and really looking forward to where this story will head
I'm really enjoying it. Please write more. Thank you for the novel! ..........................................................................................
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The premise is good but it has too much info dump and too little character interaction. But at least it is not filled with cliches, so i hope you can improve....
This one of the best novel I have ever read I can only say that it needs a bit of harem or romance and it will be perfect and of course more chabter for us loyal readers to enjoy it and thank you for your hard work
Nice fanfic, but you should change the cover to attract more attention. .........,.........................................................