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A soul drift into a new body that just die in the dc universe (Young Justice). Read as the new soul life his new life in the new universe fill with opportunities and danger with his knowledge and system.
Note : This is my firsr time writing a fan fic novel, there will be mistake in grammer and whatnot as english is not my first language, this is just something i do for fun to fill in the self insert fantasy after reading many fanfic and novel. mc action maybe influence on what i would do if i was in mc situation. and i just wanted to thing my way.
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Another example of a cliche approach to characters in another universe, especially ones like DC or Marvel. There is no human attributes, no human quality and no actual human thought to the approach. You develop zero background for the character and make them a blank slate, which isn't great for the reader. The quality of grammar is decent, as seen instantly in the synopsis, however, you can really improve in how you describe the action taking place. Show us what is happening, rather than telling us.
Honestly, I'm really excited a good quality young justice story on this platform is hard to find. This is a new favorite for me the plot has me on my toes excited please keep up the amazing work.
The story itself is fine, not that I notice is that it lacks humanity, so to speak, it seems very irrational, many thoughts lack development at the MC, that would be all I see and a little more could Improve a lot
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Author Review for the boost of confidence. Still need a lot of rework but will continue to upload until finish book 1, book 1 is until season 1 of young justice
It starts out like your typical self insert character with a system but he starts making a TON of dumb decisions. Feel free to read but if you like smart MC’s you should find another fic.
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Really good, hope you get more time to write more, great quality just waiting for next chap. .................................................
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this story is good so far and I'm looking forward for more chapters and how the story will progress. please keep up the good work cuz I don't want see this dropped.
terrible. this is terrible 😞. sure there are some villains in Gotham that need to be put down permanently like the joker. but most of them don't. as they're just using any means they can to make a living. as living in Gotham is not easy. if it's anything like Detroit or Chicago or some of the other worst cities in the real world. while Batman does a lot of good things. he isn't actually solving the underline issues in Gotham. As to why there's so much crime in the first place? As these issues most likely stem from politics and as Batman's identity as Bruce Wayne is in one of the best positions to actually fix these political issues by backing a candidate with his money or running himself for the mayor of Gotham. in which he can use to affect change to improve the job opportunities for the people of Gotham. as people in Gotham have most likely turned to crime because there aren't very many good job opportunities. which probably drove most to crime and others to depression and given the atmosphere of Gotham only added to depression to the point it made some of them crazy. The most messed up part of Gotham's problem's is the guy who could effectively change this is out in the streets in a bat costume punching criminals in the face living out some type of 10 year old child fantasy of being a superhero.