/ Fantasy / Beast Evolution Forge
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“Look at that. Another one of those players just cleared a rank 4 dungeon. What I wouldn’t give to be in his position.”
The man muttered, tossing a few credits at Vell as he walked past, his eyes glued to his phone. He caught the coins with a trembling hand, his voice rough and hoarse from disuse.
“Thank you.”
He watched as the man disappeared into the crowded streets, the whispers of players and their achievements echoing in his ears. Looking down at the cup in his hand, the meager coins inside were a sad reminder of his fall from grace. But before he could gather the strength to stand, a group of bullies appeared, kicking his cup away and scattering the coins across the street. Vell didn’t bother to retrieve them; he could only watch as the bullies laughed and walked away.
“Fucking loser.”
“Haha, I heard a crazy rumor about him, apparently…”
Those were the last words he heard before a loud crash echoed from the other side of the building. He froze, listening intently, his heart pounding in his chest. Faint noises reached him—monster growls and people screaming for help.
{Warning: E-rank monster has escaped its master’s control. Evacuate until a player arrives at the location.}
The alert blared from the massive screens on the buildings, and panic swept through the crowd as people began to flee, pushing and shoving in their frantic attempts to escape. Vell watched the chaos unfold, a bitter disappointment settling in his stomach.
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Straight from chapter 1, I saw immense potential in this book. And though there aren't many chapters yet, I can already foresee this book reaching the top! Good luck, author!
A novel with a good potential, but the way of writing lacks. It's like some Japanese manga or anime nowadays where the MC is naive/has anger issues/no character development/full of awkwardly portrayal. These are the list that I see it lacks: 1. Story development is not good. Too fast development. MC jumps from one scenario to the other that there are no breathing. 2. The awkwardly interaction of characters. I read and some of the characters are like (I am a mysterious one) vibe.
ohh, not bad, there are issues but i am still enjoying it, i can see that the author is slowly improving with each chapter which is nice to see.
the story is really good, i do have to admit that the writing quality is not the best but and the characters are not described well but other than that, i love it so much.
nice, i love the slow build up, there are areas where i am like huh but it's not bad
some might not like the slow pacing but i love it, shows us the progression properly
Author here. just want to point out that my novel has many issues but i plan to keep improving. if you see any area that i could do better, feel free to tell me, either here or in my discord linked in the synopsis.